Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

Solid rhyming couplets complete this composition. All your poems are a work of art and this is no exception. One day I will try to write a horror.I attempted to enter the haiku horror contest and to my surprise while reviewing another participant wrote the exact theme and used the exact picture so I declined my entry.
love your poem and animated images.
Good use of enjambment

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014

Aw, that's a shame, emrpoems. I would have loved to see what you came up with.

Thanks for taking time out to read & review it for me. Much appreciated. :)

reply by emrpoems on 07-Sep-2014

I will try a horror some time soon again-Erica

reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014

I'll be looking forward to it, Erica. :]

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

great multi-media presentation
excellent use of rhyming couplets
good alliteration in phrases like something smells
vivid details with strong sensory appeal
good use of questions to intensify the emotion and draw the reader in
strong verb choices add to the emotional power and drama
definitely an eerie atmosphere, my friend
Brooke

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 Comment Written 07-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014

Thanks for taking the time to read & review it, Brooke. Much obliged. :)

Comment from James Dooney

Excellent

Oh now this is pretty cool here indeed. It is so true. Just ask anyone who has ever 'officially' dealt with the dead body like me, other current/former cops, and medics ! You describe this so well !

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 Comment Written 06-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2014

Thanks, James. I really appreciate the review, especially coming from someone with experience.

Much obliged. :)