Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

My sixth grade literature anthology had Riki Tiki Tavi in it - great memories :-)
solid use of rhyming couplets
I love the dialogue of the opponents
vivid descriptive detail
great high-impact verb choices add to the intensity of the drama
This is really good, my friend :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

---

reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Thanks, Brooke. Riki Tiki Tavi by Rudyard Kipling was a favorite story of mine growing up. I really appreciate your kind comments and generous review. :)

Comment from daeneam

Exceptional

I enjoyed this poem, my friend. I was associating the two animals with people I know and I remembered those who are fond of bullying underdogs. I hope they will meet some mongoose out there and get what they deserve. (hahaha I'm so bad)...

God bless... c", Mae

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

---

reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Ha ha, yes, Mae, you sure are, but you go, girl, LOL!

I sincerely appreciate the six stars and your glowing review, my friend. :)

Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

I learned something new. Never would have thought that a mongoose could defeat a cobra
Solid rhymed couplets in your quatrains
Good use of alliteration and enjambment.
loved the poem as usual

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

---

reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Thanks so much, emrpoems. I am really glad that you enjoyed this one. :)

Comment from amada

Excellent

I like the sense of humor in the last line of your comments. Yes, i even read the comments! "Rudyard Kipling would be proud..." Indeed. Indeed.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

---

reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Ha ha, thanks, Amada, I read them too. I really appreciate the review, you're too kind. :)

Comment from Writingfundimension

Excellent

Really excellent, natural-sounding rhymes and meter, Dean. You tell a great tale of the bravery of the mongoose. I love watching certain cable channels myself, so I had to smile at your AN's. Totally enjoyable, my friend.

:) Bev

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

---

reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Thanks, Bev, I really appreciate that. So sorry about the late reply, things have been rather crazy for me lately! :0

reply by Writingfundimension on 05-Sep-2014

Hey, I totally understand, Dean. You're very welcome, as always. :) Bev

reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

:]

reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Oh, congrats on another Book of the Month. How many times is that now, fifty, LOL? :D

reply by Writingfundimension on 05-Sep-2014

You made me laugh out loud, Dean. What a nut! No, it's four. And I darned lucky I got those (hehehe). Thanks so much, my friend. :)

reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Aw, you're far too modest, Bev. It was definitely talent. The majority of voters may have those they hate, like myself, and their favorites, but they are wise enough to see and recognize true talent when they see, it.

reply by Writingfundimension on 05-Sep-2014

Dean, what a gentleman you are. Thanks for this... coming from such a talent as yourself, it means a lot to me. Have a great weekend.

reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

You do the same, Bev. :]

Comment from Loren (7)

Excellent

enlightening and a bit hard to take in for squeamish folk like me. I know nature can appear to be cruel and you've done an excellent job (in poetic form none the less) of how it is no more, actually, then a part of the cycle of life. Loren

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

---

reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Thank you very much, Loren (7). I truly appreciate your review.

Comment from granny goes viral

Excellent

Yes, I watch too much Animal Planet too. Better 'n the news.
Lovely, well crafted an illustrated story. I think this would make a lovely children's book.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

---

reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Thanks so much, granny, and you're absolutely right, it is a thousand times better and more inspirational than our local nightly news. It's rarely ever good news.

I truly appreciate your kind comments and review. :)

Comment from BritSoldier

Exceptional

Kipling would be proud of this story/poem you have penned here, all the adventures of Huckleberry Finn in a Mongoose
great writing my friend and drawings you did this one proud

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

---

reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Thanks so much, BritSoldier. You are very kind. I really appreciate the six stars, as well as your complimentary review.

All the best to you, my friend. :)

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

So you are a nature channel junkie too. And a devotee of Kipling ( Riki Tiki Tavi who really taught Ali all of his moved). Part Aesop and all your own. Before pride goeth the fall, Ms. Cobra. Excellent tale of the animal kingdom. Just one typo- " have storied often told" - stories.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

---

reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Got it, Ed, and thanks for the comments. Yeah, I've become an Animal Planet Junkie for sure, LOL! :) Thanks again for catching that typo. All fixed up now...

reply by ravenblack on 02-Sep-2014

Much better than being a news junkie!

reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

You got that right!

Comment from JM

Excellent

Not too long ago my husband was telling me about the habu snakes in Japan and how the mongoose preyed on them. Your poem is an interesting lesson. I like your illustrations too. Always do enjoy your work.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2014

---

reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014

Thanks, JM. I always enjoy you work as well. I appreciate the kind comments. :)