Comment from rrabinow

Excellent

I like the line the widow's infamous hour glass. Great use of descriptive words in your poem. Great job with the syllable count. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014

Thank you rrabinow!!

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Black widows give me the shudders......dies.....her mate....? Does he have any clue ? Is she that alluring? I guess so we still have black widows running around...a time for male rights activists to step,in
God bless

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014

I guess the sex must be worth it. You know men.. LOL

reply by kiwijenny on 30-Aug-2014

Ha ha ha

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

stunning presentation of your 17 syllable haiku
widow's hour glass - add the apostrophe for possessive
a strong visual, and you create an ominous tone well
Brooke :-)
sorry, the 4 was a mistake - I never deduct a star for one tiny error :-)

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014

Have corrected error. requesting a re-review:)

reply by adewpearl on 30-Aug-2014

I upped the rating - it never should have been a 4 in the first place :-)

reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014

Thank you adewpearl!!