Vision and Sound: Their Stories
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Comment from rama devi
SOUNDS very interesting!
LOOKS like it will be unique!
Looking forward to reading some of it soon.
Well penned intro--with only two tiny nits noted:
Firstly(,) because he interprets the world like Vision but with sound has(AS not HAS) the basis.
I appreciate your intro...inviting readers to share honest critique. Good for you, dear Mikey!
Blessings,
rd
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SOUNDS very interesting!
LOOKS like it will be unique!
Looking forward to reading some of it soon.
Well penned intro--with only two tiny nits noted:
Firstly(,) because he interprets the world like Vision but with sound has(AS not HAS) the basis.
I appreciate your intro...inviting readers to share honest critique. Good for you, dear Mikey!
Blessings,
rd
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
Comment from adewpearl
frequently on earth - Earth
Hey, I'm currently enjoying a book about Hell, and I don't believe in Hell - and I've read vampire stories here, and I don't believe in them either :-)
a narrator, who is a special soul - add comma
quite a bit in the year I've been here, and - add comma
If you were to ask her, "what kind - What
but with sound has the basis - as
I look forward to it, Mikey - sounds fascinating :-) Brooke
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frequently on earth - Earth
Hey, I'm currently enjoying a book about Hell, and I don't believe in Hell - and I've read vampire stories here, and I don't believe in them either :-)
a narrator, who is a special soul - add comma
quite a bit in the year I've been here, and - add comma
If you were to ask her, "what kind - What
but with sound has the basis - as
I look forward to it, Mikey - sounds fascinating :-) Brooke
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Well, Mikey, I'm looking forward to your story. Sounds intriguing and the kind of subject that interests me. Perhaps it should be categorized as "general fiction?" Looking forward to your next post.
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Well, Mikey, I'm looking forward to your story. Sounds intriguing and the kind of subject that interests me. Perhaps it should be categorized as "general fiction?" Looking forward to your next post.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mikey
This sounds intriguing and certainly something a little different. You have me already questioning, what the narrator knows that the other soul's don't?
I love the concept of the main characters Vision and Sound. I think this would make a great script as well. Now don't let me give you any ideas ..... I have enough trouble keeping up with your work already. I keep trying to back-track to keep up with The Bard. :)))
Seems your narration skills in this piece already have that fantasy/spiritual ambience in the gentle writing style. Love the image, perfect for what you have to say in this prologue. The over-all tone of the piece already sounds Heavenly. Well done, I'm looking forward what follows. Hugs - Lovi xoxox
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Hi Mikey
This sounds intriguing and certainly something a little different. You have me already questioning, what the narrator knows that the other soul's don't?
I love the concept of the main characters Vision and Sound. I think this would make a great script as well. Now don't let me give you any ideas ..... I have enough trouble keeping up with your work already. I keep trying to back-track to keep up with The Bard. :)))
Seems your narration skills in this piece already have that fantasy/spiritual ambience in the gentle writing style. Love the image, perfect for what you have to say in this prologue. The over-all tone of the piece already sounds Heavenly. Well done, I'm looking forward what follows. Hugs - Lovi xoxox
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
Comment from MissMerri
Well, I'm hooked. This sounds like a most creative story and I'm excited that I'm getting in on the first part of it. Your synopsis is well constructed and certainly tantalizing. Your character descriptions are well done too. (One typo: the paragraph about Sound... You meant 'as' and wrote 'has') I really can't wait to read this story/novel. I am already convinced you are a good writer and the story will be worthwhile.
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Well, I'm hooked. This sounds like a most creative story and I'm excited that I'm getting in on the first part of it. Your synopsis is well constructed and certainly tantalizing. Your character descriptions are well done too. (One typo: the paragraph about Sound... You meant 'as' and wrote 'has') I really can't wait to read this story/novel. I am already convinced you are a good writer and the story will be worthwhile.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
Comment from trimple
Hi there Michael.
An interesting intro to your new tale of spiritual wonders. :)
Just a couple of things that you may or may not consider...
Vision is a soul that has female characteristics and [views] (interprets) [the] (her) world visually.
When she is human, she uses her sight to tell her about things. (For example, when) she sees a crowd of people, Vision can pick out.....
Sound is so named for two reasons. Firstly because he interprets the world like Vision but with sound [h]as the
basis.
I very much enjoyed the narration of this opener as you gathered your reader in and fluffed up the leaning pillows.
I have missed much of your work Michael, as you have released each chapter, but now that I'm back for a while at least, I look forward to following each installment here.
Religion is a very interesting subject, and although I am not a believer myself, I find it all very interesting.
Very enjoyable....
kind regards
tracey :)
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Hi there Michael.
An interesting intro to your new tale of spiritual wonders. :)
Just a couple of things that you may or may not consider...
Vision is a soul that has female characteristics and [views] (interprets) [the] (her) world visually.
When she is human, she uses her sight to tell her about things. (For example, when) she sees a crowd of people, Vision can pick out.....
Sound is so named for two reasons. Firstly because he interprets the world like Vision but with sound [h]as the
basis.
I very much enjoyed the narration of this opener as you gathered your reader in and fluffed up the leaning pillows.
I have missed much of your work Michael, as you have released each chapter, but now that I'm back for a while at least, I look forward to following each installment here.
Religion is a very interesting subject, and although I am not a believer myself, I find it all very interesting.
Very enjoyable....
kind regards
tracey :)
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
Comment from Linda Engel
This is most intriging and I'm looking forward to it . most insightful way to look at heaven and hell and being a Christian also I can see the possibility that we come back to earth as God's angels so we would see things that possibly others will not. this is going to be a great story going and will have a lot of interesting facts fiction fantasy and knowing you as I do and you're writing, it's going to be well worth the read. I haven't heard from you on either side all week and was worried hoping everything was okay glad to see you back and looking forward to this take care
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This is most intriging and I'm looking forward to it . most insightful way to look at heaven and hell and being a Christian also I can see the possibility that we come back to earth as God's angels so we would see things that possibly others will not. this is going to be a great story going and will have a lot of interesting facts fiction fantasy and knowing you as I do and you're writing, it's going to be well worth the read. I haven't heard from you on either side all week and was worried hoping everything was okay glad to see you back and looking forward to this take care
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
Comment from Michaelk
Okay Mikey, I'll tag along again. I fell so far behind that I just stopped with the last Bard book (sorry) I'll try to keep up with this one.
Your premise sounds intriguing. So Sound and Vision are angels? Or do they live an entire lifetime before going back to Heaven just to be sent back to earth? This sounds just a tiny bit like the plotline to the movie 'Hancock'. Except they were just dealing with the relationship part, not going back and forth.
So is the narrator God? Or don't you want to reveal that just yet?
The more questions I ask, the more intrigued I become with this premise. I look forward to your first chapter.
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Okay Mikey, I'll tag along again. I fell so far behind that I just stopped with the last Bard book (sorry) I'll try to keep up with this one.
Your premise sounds intriguing. So Sound and Vision are angels? Or do they live an entire lifetime before going back to Heaven just to be sent back to earth? This sounds just a tiny bit like the plotline to the movie 'Hancock'. Except they were just dealing with the relationship part, not going back and forth.
So is the narrator God? Or don't you want to reveal that just yet?
The more questions I ask, the more intrigued I become with this premise. I look forward to your first chapter.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
Comment from Sasha
This sounds very interesting and quite unique. I look forward to reading it and will try to offer suggestions if and when I feel needed, but you know me, being helpful is not my forte.
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This sounds very interesting and quite unique. I look forward to reading it and will try to offer suggestions if and when I feel needed, but you know me, being helpful is not my forte.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
Comment from amanda98653
Fascinating! Looking forward to reading your next novel. ( thank goodness that we talked about reincarnation?) haha. Smiles.
So awesome that you picked out "Sound" and "Vision" as their names. Like personifications!
I haven't been reviewing much this year, but I promise to follow along this time :)
Hugs
Amanda
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Fascinating! Looking forward to reading your next novel. ( thank goodness that we talked about reincarnation?) haha. Smiles.
So awesome that you picked out "Sound" and "Vision" as their names. Like personifications!
I haven't been reviewing much this year, but I promise to follow along this time :)
Hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
