Heart Country
Love of my land - Australia.26 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Thorough descrition full of color and action. You clearly love this country. You make it sound like an interesting place to visit. But it doesn't seem like the younger generation believes this. They always want big change. It seems that alcohol is the problem the settlers bring to a new land. It happened with the Native Americans too.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thorough descrition full of color and action. You clearly love this country. You make it sound like an interesting place to visit. But it doesn't seem like the younger generation believes this. They always want big change. It seems that alcohol is the problem the settlers bring to a new land. It happened with the Native Americans too.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much for reading and glad you liked the poem. Cheers, Aussie.
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You're so very welcome, Aussie.
dragonpoet
Comment from zanya
Here is a pictorial, poetic cornucopia of what we in the Northern Hemisphere call the Land Down Under - brimming with color and exotic life yet a tinge of sadness as the youth - the life blood - are choosing to leave
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Here is a pictorial, poetic cornucopia of what we in the Northern Hemisphere call the Land Down Under - brimming with color and exotic life yet a tinge of sadness as the youth - the life blood - are choosing to leave
Comment Written 04-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014
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Thank you zanya - glad you liked the poem and enjoyed our country. Cheers, K.
Comment from jlsavell
Kace, this is you and you are so very good at story poems that are actually so creative and so didactic at the same time. I always enjoy reading you so much. I will try to stay on this site a little longer this time. Loved it Jiminy Cricket
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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Kace, this is you and you are so very good at story poems that are actually so creative and so didactic at the same time. I always enjoy reading you so much. I will try to stay on this site a little longer this time. Loved it Jiminy Cricket
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2014
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G'day Turtle, Thanks so much for reading my friend Jiminy Cricket. I enjoyed writing it. Love, Kay XX :-)
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Aussie
The first glance of this magic painting by Albert Namatjirra leads beautifully into your poem. The title "Heart Country" is the next part to complete the trilogy which exhibits your love of the land, magnificent Australia. Your imagery draws readers from other countries to know and learn about the wonders of our country. You also touch on the shame of the white Australians on behalf of the early settlers, through the history where Aboriginal met the white men.
It is sad children leave their families for the cities .... and often suffer the worst modern society offers which leads to tragic consequences. The dreamtime runs deep in the Aboriginal race ... if only the world and burgeoning technology could leave a place for this culture to thrive and cherish. I suppose none of us can avoid so-called 'progress'.
All the time I've spent in the Australian bush and visiting relatives in the small country towns of the sheep-wheat belt, I've always felt the presence of 'the dreaming' and a respect for the culture of the original peoples who understood this land so well. My family stories were of peaceful and respectful interaction ... my great great grandfather was named by the Aborigines who often stayed on their tribal sites near where he dwelled.
Well so much to this story, so much to still happen, hopefully for everyone's well-being.
Mostly you've expressed the love of so much which is unique to our huge island. I never tire of hearing or reading about Australia ... there is so much unique and unspoiled ... and so much being destroyed by greed and stupidity. I'm sure many FS members form over the seas will find much beauty in your wonderful poem. Hugs - Lovi xoxox
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Hi Aussie
The first glance of this magic painting by Albert Namatjirra leads beautifully into your poem. The title "Heart Country" is the next part to complete the trilogy which exhibits your love of the land, magnificent Australia. Your imagery draws readers from other countries to know and learn about the wonders of our country. You also touch on the shame of the white Australians on behalf of the early settlers, through the history where Aboriginal met the white men.
It is sad children leave their families for the cities .... and often suffer the worst modern society offers which leads to tragic consequences. The dreamtime runs deep in the Aboriginal race ... if only the world and burgeoning technology could leave a place for this culture to thrive and cherish. I suppose none of us can avoid so-called 'progress'.
All the time I've spent in the Australian bush and visiting relatives in the small country towns of the sheep-wheat belt, I've always felt the presence of 'the dreaming' and a respect for the culture of the original peoples who understood this land so well. My family stories were of peaceful and respectful interaction ... my great great grandfather was named by the Aborigines who often stayed on their tribal sites near where he dwelled.
Well so much to this story, so much to still happen, hopefully for everyone's well-being.
Mostly you've expressed the love of so much which is unique to our huge island. I never tire of hearing or reading about Australia ... there is so much unique and unspoiled ... and so much being destroyed by greed and stupidity. I'm sure many FS members form over the seas will find much beauty in your wonderful poem. Hugs - Lovi xoxox
Comment Written 01-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2014
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Hello Lovi, I have missed you! Thanks for the very in-depth review and you could write about your great-great grandfather? An idea for a story? Love, Kay. XX
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Hi Kay
Thanks for your new e-mail ... sorry slow off the mark to keep in touch. I only just found out about Sandra's hip op..... and she's walking already.
Now that you say, yes a great idea for a story .... only nearly everyone who would remember have passed. My mother can tell me a little .... he had a white beard quite long ... I've never even seen a photo and the Aboriginals had a name for him relating to that .... Long white beard or something??
I'm pleased to hear my relatives way back had good relations with the indigenous peoples. There was not a huge population in the small town of Nyngan where my mother came from .... though I could always feel a strong connection through Aboriginal artwork and the dream time stories, even as a very young child. I've wanted to write about the early childhood of my mother ... almost seems in some ways like a different planet.
I've missed you too. I hope your back is not giving you pain. Old age is a b**tch. lol I've had arthritis giving me hell in my thumb of all places..... heheheh! It must be miserable to have it much wore than me.
Spring is here .... not that I could complain about the cold much this winter. Quite a mild one for me ... though I've spent a lot of it indoors recovering from my slip off the verandah step. I'll try to get back to e-mail soon. I'm moving at a snail's pace .... Love ya. Hugs - Lovi xoxoxo
Comment from Alan K Pease
A lovely expression of the natural world of Australia and the like that dwells within. You date Australia as the oldest of nations because of one aboriginal race that has dwelt there ( without the Europeans) for 60,000 years or is this a question of tribal lands set aside for a people? The painting is very appropriate for a poem written by a descendent of such a race who wishes to show her ties to a original people she belongs. Your poetry is enlivened by your notes.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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A lovely expression of the natural world of Australia and the like that dwells within. You date Australia as the oldest of nations because of one aboriginal race that has dwelt there ( without the Europeans) for 60,000 years or is this a question of tribal lands set aside for a people? The painting is very appropriate for a poem written by a descendent of such a race who wishes to show her ties to a original people she belongs. Your poetry is enlivened by your notes.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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The first land owners (aboriginals) have dwelt here for 60,000 years - the whites landed in 1788 and claimed Australia for the British crown. The whites put the men to work in chains, raped the women and fed the nation on white flour, sugar and rum. The painting was by renowned artist Albert Namatjirra - who was MADE an Australian when he was given the Order of Australia on the Queen's visit in 1954 - what a joke!! Thank you my dear friend Alan. Love, Kay. XX
Comment from Writingfundimension
What a sad and touching story you tell in this wonderful free verse contest entry, Kay. What's happening with the Aboriginal peoples seems to be repeating itself worldwide. Thank you for sharing the unique insights of your ancestors.
Good luck, my friend.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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What a sad and touching story you tell in this wonderful free verse contest entry, Kay. What's happening with the Aboriginal peoples seems to be repeating itself worldwide. Thank you for sharing the unique insights of your ancestors.
Good luck, my friend.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, glad you enjoyed. Yes, a common theme amongst the original land owners. Blessings, Kay.
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You're very welcome, Kay. :)
Comment from Kingsrookviii
Wow. I love this so much. The language is wonderful and fresh to me and exotic English. That's so cool. I have a Scottish friend who has his own similarly different radical twists that I enjoy, too. But, this is really something and with a ton of interesting notes. I really like this. One line is so haunting, "Families sit - for their lands, grieve."
But, it is still brilliant, nevertheless.
Thanks for this gem. Best of luck. Bruce.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Wow. I love this so much. The language is wonderful and fresh to me and exotic English. That's so cool. I have a Scottish friend who has his own similarly different radical twists that I enjoy, too. But, this is really something and with a ton of interesting notes. I really like this. One line is so haunting, "Families sit - for their lands, grieve."
But, it is still brilliant, nevertheless.
Thanks for this gem. Best of luck. Bruce.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Greetings from Australia, Bruce - glad you enjoyed the poem. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Jendowoz
This is a beautiful poem, Aussie. It typifies our land so well. Fantastic and descriptive stanzas. Well done. I love all your poems.
I have just re-subscribed here. I was so caught up finishing and send out my novel when I finally got back on here I needed to re-subscribe. So I'm back.
regards,
Jen
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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This is a beautiful poem, Aussie. It typifies our land so well. Fantastic and descriptive stanzas. Well done. I love all your poems.
I have just re-subscribed here. I was so caught up finishing and send out my novel when I finally got back on here I needed to re-subscribe. So I'm back.
regards,
Jen
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Welcome back my friend - thanks for reading and glad you liked the poem. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from Glasstruth
Such a heartbreaking story. Glad I read your author notes first. Otherwise I wouldn't have known what some things mean. The first verse is very colorful, as I kept reading, it never weakened. My favorite:
"Mother Earth her faced cracked open
No Botox here"
Awesome! Les
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Such a heartbreaking story. Glad I read your author notes first. Otherwise I wouldn't have known what some things mean. The first verse is very colorful, as I kept reading, it never weakened. My favorite:
"Mother Earth her faced cracked open
No Botox here"
Awesome! Les
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Hello Les, Thanks so much for reading; glad you liked the poem. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from granny goes viral
This is quite beautiful and sad as well. I have passing knowledge of your land. Know some people who have lived there. My son has visited and loved it. There is a mystery that covers this land. Your poem expressed that. I am so sorry this is changing. Sorry your people are and will fade.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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This is quite beautiful and sad as well. I have passing knowledge of your land. Know some people who have lived there. My son has visited and loved it. There is a mystery that covers this land. Your poem expressed that. I am so sorry this is changing. Sorry your people are and will fade.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Just like the First Nation of America, different land - same problems. Thanks so much for reading. Blessings, Kay.
