Sticks and Stones
Flash Fiction44 total reviews
Comment from pfwelder
I admit I had to read this one a few times. I found it very creative and thought provoking. Was he really murdered or did he really commit suicide. Only the writer knows. Very good writing style.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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I admit I had to read this one a few times. I found it very creative and thought provoking. Was he really murdered or did he really commit suicide. Only the writer knows. Very good writing style.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Yep, this one was a tough one. I was definitely constrained by the 500 word limit. Thanks for the awesome review!
Comment from CALLAHANMR
This is certainly a different kind of assassination. Charlie simply brain washes his victims, First he develope a complete feel for evert fascinate of his intended victim's life. Then one facet at a time he cleanses the victim's mind of everything that made life worthwhile. until his mind seemed empt., Last was the carefully composed suicide note which spelled out the futility of living in this empty state and the time for final desperation was set.
What follows is the fulfillment of the suicide note which the brainwashed victim now perceives as reality and comits self-assassination.
What a diabolical plot. Perfect for a flash fiction contest.
Roger aka Marilyn's writing partner
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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This is certainly a different kind of assassination. Charlie simply brain washes his victims, First he develope a complete feel for evert fascinate of his intended victim's life. Then one facet at a time he cleanses the victim's mind of everything that made life worthwhile. until his mind seemed empt., Last was the carefully composed suicide note which spelled out the futility of living in this empty state and the time for final desperation was set.
What follows is the fulfillment of the suicide note which the brainwashed victim now perceives as reality and comits self-assassination.
What a diabolical plot. Perfect for a flash fiction contest.
Roger aka Marilyn's writing partner
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Wow,
You got it exactly right. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from dennis0530
Administered a poison laced in the victim's favorite drink which caused hallucination leading to a suicide?
My clue is : "Frank, what would you do if all this is gone..." But, by eliminating the family and leave Frank Baker alone is not suicide. Next clue:"He deletes the most artistic and thoughtful pictures of his family first.
Poison and the sharpened pen required Charlie to be near the victim. And the absent family suggests a separation.
Charlie pens the letter; Frank reads it; the words slowly start their killing job. Frank starts drinking; the poison works. The deed is done.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Administered a poison laced in the victim's favorite drink which caused hallucination leading to a suicide?
My clue is : "Frank, what would you do if all this is gone..." But, by eliminating the family and leave Frank Baker alone is not suicide. Next clue:"He deletes the most artistic and thoughtful pictures of his family first.
Poison and the sharpened pen required Charlie to be near the victim. And the absent family suggests a separation.
Charlie pens the letter; Frank reads it; the words slowly start their killing job. Frank starts drinking; the poison works. The deed is done.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Close Dennis, but n0t quite what I intended. Thanks for taking the time to read and review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from Bridge
Great story and very well written. I have tried flash fiction and know how difficult it is but you have done a great job. I especially like the last line.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Great story and very well written. I have tried flash fiction and know how difficult it is but you have done a great job. I especially like the last line.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thanks for the awesome review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is spooky! I am thinking that Charlie is able to get into Franks head, like a hypnotist, and persuade him his family is dead and that he can't live without them. What a great story, it took me a while and hope this is somewhere near what you have written. It was really good! Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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That is spooky! I am thinking that Charlie is able to get into Franks head, like a hypnotist, and persuade him his family is dead and that he can't live without them. What a great story, it took me a while and hope this is somewhere near what you have written. It was really good! Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Yep.You are spot on. Thanks for the awesome review.
Comment from Titan Black
That was worth reading. The
killer in this one was very
cunning. And your story telling
abilities are superb. You make
the reader want more. Nevertheless,
you stayed within the rules. And
that makes you a even better writer.
Keep writing.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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That was worth reading. The
killer in this one was very
cunning. And your story telling
abilities are superb. You make
the reader want more. Nevertheless,
you stayed within the rules. And
that makes you a even better writer.
Keep writing.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Thank you for taking the time. This excellent review is much appreciated.
Comment from adewpearl
Jenna, his wife, stare back - add the second comma to close the appositive
Frank, what would you do - add comma for direct address
You describe the assassin's research and preparations effectively
wow, what a creepy ending - clever assassin! Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Jenna, his wife, stare back - add the second comma to close the appositive
Frank, what would you do - add comma for direct address
You describe the assassin's research and preparations effectively
wow, what a creepy ending - clever assassin! Brooke
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Yep. Fixed those. Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from chasennov
"Sticks and Stones" This Horror and thriller flash fiction you have created here is very good, and I enjoyed reading it. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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"Sticks and Stones" This Horror and thriller flash fiction you have created here is very good, and I enjoyed reading it. Well done.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Im thrilled you enjoyed it. thanks for taking the time to read and review.
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Im thrilled you enjoyed it. thanks for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from Gargantuan2
sorry.. word count is 496, I did not count properly, I do wish you the best of luck when the voting occurs. The story is very good and needs no edits.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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sorry.. word count is 496, I did not count properly, I do wish you the best of luck when the voting occurs. The story is very good and needs no edits.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review, it is much appreciated!
Comment from Cajungirl
I commend you on a job well done. I think your approach to this writing prompt is very original. I enjoyed your thriller very much. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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I commend you on a job well done. I think your approach to this writing prompt is very original. I enjoyed your thriller very much. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2014
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Wow thanks CajunGirl. Your review and time taken is much appreciated!
