Comment from Judy Couch

Excellent

This poem carries a lot of emotion. I'm not sure about the picture. Is the poem about an encounter with a vampire? I wasn't sure. It has good rhyme and is written well.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

Comment from visionary1234

Excellent

Well of COURSE it's you dear ... who else would write such wonderfully creepy stuff! I'm assuming "Fair" is a play on words, rather than the usual Fare Thee Well?"
:)S

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Ha ha, well, no, Sharyn, actually it was just my misspelling of that time honored phrase, and I'd be lying to you if I tried to tell you otherwise, LOL. But, we're all good now, and I appreciate you keeping me grammatically correct and in-line.

Much obliged, my dear friend!:)

reply by visionary1234 on 24-Aug-2014

I knew that dear - was just being polite. I have a dog in the fight too, so got a chuckle! Big hugs,
S

Comment from gazzagodbod

Exceptional

oh my godd where did you find that picture of my missus and what the hell is she doing with that other guy lol scary picture fab write sixer from me gazza

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Ha ha, thanks, G, I appreciate the sixer, my friend. As far as the picture, I'm not sure where it originated from, I've had it for so long. I just never had the occasion to use it until now~:)

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

That's scary picture! it reminds me of nightmares I've had...me the victim. Old world feeling is conveyed with language and myth

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Thanks, seaglass. I appreciate the review.

Comment from RGstar

Exceptional

What a beautiful poem. Well constructed, and beautifully orchestrated.

''My carnal lust I can not quell...''

One little thing.: I would use the one word ''cannot''instead of ''can not''..as it has a hidden double meaning written that way.
Good alliteration, beautifully soft end rhymes and a lovely delivery.
Good luck in the competition.
Have a nice day,
RGstar

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Thank you, Ray, and I will make that change straight away, my friend.

I appreciate the exceptional rating and thoughtful review. Coming from a poet of your caliber, a poet who I hold in the highest regard, I am extremely grateful.

Thanks again.

Comment from Drew Delaney

Exceptional

Yes, we all have stories or dreams of possessing and being obsessed with such desires. You always do so well on your writing. It's funny how it goes. We get to know the writer by their writing. And so it is. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Thanks, Drew, and I am going to need lots of luck in this one, I'm afraid.

It is amazing how clearly we can detect a particular writer's own unique and personal style, even when the playing field has been so carefully leveled, as it has been here.

Although it is not winning, I was very happy with the way in which this turned out.

Thanks again for the exceptional rating and thoughtful review, my dear friend. It is appreciated!

Comment from NurseBarb

Excellent

Your poem is fascinating to read with such great presentation and rhyming and flow. I had a friend who had a stalker for 2 years. This is what I imagined going through his head on a daily basis. He was so obsessed with her and it was so scary. I love that your poem is frightening, but not at all surprised. Good luck in this contest.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Thanks, NurseBarb, and that is a chilling story. I appreciate you sharing your friend's experience with me. As far as the contest, well, I'm not doing so hot in this one. But, it is still fairly early and one can never tell how these things will turn out.

I truly appreciate your thoughtful and encouraging comments. I needed it for this one!

Comment from chasennov

Excellent

~Fair-Thee-Well~ This is quite a good poem you have created here for an contest entry. I have seen too many a time when partners choose each other at great risk to themselves. Well done.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Yes, there certainly are a great many couples like the ones you mention, chase.

I really appreciate the review, my friend...

Comment from hifein

Excellent

well written entry for contest. you capture well how desire overcomes the fear of trying for something that you are sure will not end well. flows easily and rhyming is not forced or contrived.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Good, hifein. I always hate it when my poems come across as forced and contrived. I always do my utmost best to avoid that.

I appreciate your review.

Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

And so, my loathsome succubus.... well, this fulfills a darker side of love. Giving up total control of your mind, soul and passion because mortal lust takes total possession over all senses.

Yup, that is love gone wrong - but, was it really love? Great choice of photo - cloudy, white eyes...yeah, got me quivering...

Great poem - best of luck in the contest..AT=/

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Oh yes, Jean, we can often love those we know are just simply poisonous to us and our lives. I myself have done so on numerous occasions. Glad I got it right, finally, this last time...

Thanks for the encouraging review. I needed it!