A Dapper Crow of Blackest Coat
My time's run out...108 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
A dapper crow, in blackest coat.... I like the way these words roll on my tongue
I loved reading this Poem out loud. It reminds me of Poe and of my mother.
She was very superstitious. One think she was scared about was black birds flying inside the house. In Spain we believe that black birds are the messengers of death.
This horror poem is awesome and the presentation is a good fit for the poem. Where did you find that crow? It's so cool.
Well done my love
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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A dapper crow, in blackest coat.... I like the way these words roll on my tongue
I loved reading this Poem out loud. It reminds me of Poe and of my mother.
She was very superstitious. One think she was scared about was black birds flying inside the house. In Spain we believe that black birds are the messengers of death.
This horror poem is awesome and the presentation is a good fit for the poem. Where did you find that crow? It's so cool.
Well done my love
Comment Written 12-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2016
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I believe that particular drawing is my own, Gypsy. I used to draw quite a bit and once wanted to be an illustrator for books and graphic novels. Yet without formal training, no one will hire you.
I'm happy to see you've dug this up from the obscurity of FanStory's forgotten works pile. You're a doll for caring enough to want to do so. Your most generous six star rating is just the icing on the cake. I deeply appreciate your kind and thoughtful comments, as I always do.
Thanks so much again, darlin'
Hugs!!!
~Dean ;)
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You drew that? Wow! An excellent drawing. I hear what you say about the unfair employment requirements. My son is an excellent graphic artist and he has the same problem. Check out his album on my Facebook page when you get a chance. It's titled John's art.
I will dig to the other side of the world to read your older poems. They should not be forgotten.
Luv ya darlin
*gypsy hugs*
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Thanks, darlin'. You're truly one of the sweetest people I know. An angel, in fact...
Luv ya'!
~Dean ;)
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Thanks, darlin'. You're truly one of the sweetest people I know. An angel, in fact...
Luv ya'!
~Dean ;)
Comment from Justin Chopin
I think you must've channeled the spirit of Edgar Allan Poe for this piece because it was morbidly frightening to me. The rhythm and the rhymes were well placed and reminded me of " The Raven" since both in Poe's poetry and in yours the bird is seen as a blood thirsty beast from Beelzebub. Great job with this.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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I think you must've channeled the spirit of Edgar Allan Poe for this piece because it was morbidly frightening to me. The rhythm and the rhymes were well placed and reminded me of " The Raven" since both in Poe's poetry and in yours the bird is seen as a blood thirsty beast from Beelzebub. Great job with this.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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Thanks very much for resurrecting this from FanStory obscurity and giving me your detailed assessment of the poem, Justin. I am indeed a huge fan of Poe's work and have studied his poetry and prose extensively.
I'm grateful for the complimentary review, as well as the six star rating. All of your feedback is greatly appreciated. :}
~Dean
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You're welcome Dean
Comment from lorettayoung
Loved the internal rhyme, rhythm excellent, so readable feels believable, the only line I could ask about is ":though scribed in blood", and "watched him change", although they fit with meter and rhyme and interest, I don't see evidence in the poem regarding relatability. But this is a minor point and nit picking, as truly I consider this poem to be very enjoyable.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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Loved the internal rhyme, rhythm excellent, so readable feels believable, the only line I could ask about is ":though scribed in blood", and "watched him change", although they fit with meter and rhyme and interest, I don't see evidence in the poem regarding relatability. But this is a minor point and nit picking, as truly I consider this poem to be very enjoyable.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2015
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Thank you very much for resurrecting this from FanStory obscurity and having a go at it, Loretta. I very much appreciate your candid comments and review, my friend.
Oh, and by the way, I loved your 1973 smash country hit, 'Louisiana Woman, Mississippi Man' , with Conway Twitty. Simply outstanding. Heh-heh... ~Dean :)
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Hi Dean: Thank you for posting my review because I couldn't find it. I am very new here and I would like to improve my work, since I am done with my deep south ways. I love to be critiqued and I hate to do it. Is this a good place to improve technique. Thanks Dean
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Well, if you want help then this is definitely the right place to be. There are many talented people here who are more than willing to give freely of their time.
You're very welcome for the review, and welcome to FanStory.
~DK
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Thank you Dean, Loretta
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You're very welcome, Loretta. If you have any questions at all, never hesitate to ask. :)
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Hi Dean: Thank you for posting my review because I couldn't find it. I am very new here and I would like to improve my work, since I am done with my deep south ways. I love to be critiqued and I hate to do it. Is this a good place to improve technique. Thanks Dean
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Thank you Dean, Loretta
Comment from Valkirkman
Wow. I found your poem incredibly grabbing and very Poe-like with a mixture of Cat in the Hat type of rhyming. I loved it!
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Wow. I found your poem incredibly grabbing and very Poe-like with a mixture of Cat in the Hat type of rhyming. I loved it!
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to dust this one off and take a shot at it, Valkirkman, you're very thoughtful to do so. You're also quite perceptive it would seem, as Poe was a big inspiration for me in writing this particular piece.
Your kind comments and exceptional rating are most graciously received, my friend. Thank you! ~Dean Kuch
Comment from Kaila Mari
This is such a chilling, supernatural poem of a nightmare. I have read this now five times and still each time I read I'm in awe. The structure of the poem is different and compelling to read. The nightmare is terrifying yet attracting. Words can not explain the feeling of dread and attraction one feels with this. You are one terrific poet!
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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This is such a chilling, supernatural poem of a nightmare. I have read this now five times and still each time I read I'm in awe. The structure of the poem is different and compelling to read. The nightmare is terrifying yet attracting. Words can not explain the feeling of dread and attraction one feels with this. You are one terrific poet!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Kaila, and what a lovely compliment, especially coming from a poet of your caliber. I realize that my writing doesn't appeal to everyone, but I'm very happy to know that you enjoy it.
Thanks so much again for your complimentary review, as well a syour exceptional six star rating.
With deepest gratitude,
~Dean:)
Comment from kristo81
Very strong gothic strain reminiscent of Poe. I recall the childhood refrain if there's more than one crow they're rooks; if there's only one rook it's a crow. Well composed keeps the reader eager for more
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Very strong gothic strain reminiscent of Poe. I recall the childhood refrain if there's more than one crow they're rooks; if there's only one rook it's a crow. Well composed keeps the reader eager for more
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2014
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Thanks for the excellent review, kristo81. I'm very flattered to have my work mentioned in the same breath as Poe's. I studied him quite a bit at university, and he's always been one of my favorites. Thanks for the Rook/Crow info too. I knew a flock of crows is referred to as a murder of crows. but not about the rook. I do enjoy playing the card game, Rook. It's a lot of fun!
Thanks again, very much.:)
Comment from Ridley Williams
Hello Dean,
Growing up, I'm afraid I was one of those who used to shoot these birds for sport at our local dump. I had never heard any of the associations the birds had with other peoples beliefs. And, as you say, we figured we were helping the local ranchers and farmers in our area. I'm glad I didn't know, lol!
I appreciated the wonderful delivery of this write. You develop a scene from childhood nightmares and bring it to the page. I enjoyed the solid rhyme and meter which allowed the reader to become more involved in the story...and what a story! "We flew..." Great ending!
Thanks for the read, it was a blast... Later, Bill
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Hello Dean,
Growing up, I'm afraid I was one of those who used to shoot these birds for sport at our local dump. I had never heard any of the associations the birds had with other peoples beliefs. And, as you say, we figured we were helping the local ranchers and farmers in our area. I'm glad I didn't know, lol!
I appreciated the wonderful delivery of this write. You develop a scene from childhood nightmares and bring it to the page. I enjoyed the solid rhyme and meter which allowed the reader to become more involved in the story...and what a story! "We flew..." Great ending!
Thanks for the read, it was a blast... Later, Bill
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
Comment from padumachitta
Hi Dean...okay the stars say it all, sort of. I like the progression in this..and the final line. And of course the lay out...one day i will pay you to walk me through how you put this stuff in..I am computer friendly but certainly not literate:-)
And hey...I come from the West Coast...so owls call one to death and the crows...well the crows are the tricksters and the rascals...and yet and yet, my European ancestors have installed a primal nervousness of the raven...padumachitta
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Hi Dean...okay the stars say it all, sort of. I like the progression in this..and the final line. And of course the lay out...one day i will pay you to walk me through how you put this stuff in..I am computer friendly but certainly not literate:-)
And hey...I come from the West Coast...so owls call one to death and the crows...well the crows are the tricksters and the rascals...and yet and yet, my European ancestors have installed a primal nervousness of the raven...padumachitta
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
Comment from vapros
Dean, this is tremendous poetry, done in the style and mood of Poe. By far, the best of yours I have seen.
I'm kind of a bug about artwork, resenting those posts which appear to be more of a display than literary works. That is pretty narrow-minded of me. This post, even so, is a master work of presentation, as yours usually are. I can imagine it as a prize winner in many venues. I hope you will continue. (I'm pretty sure you will!)
Excellent work.
Bill
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Dean, this is tremendous poetry, done in the style and mood of Poe. By far, the best of yours I have seen.
I'm kind of a bug about artwork, resenting those posts which appear to be more of a display than literary works. That is pretty narrow-minded of me. This post, even so, is a master work of presentation, as yours usually are. I can imagine it as a prize winner in many venues. I hope you will continue. (I'm pretty sure you will!)
Excellent work.
Bill
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2014
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Thanks so much, Bill, and I completely understand (as well as appreciate) your viewpoint and stance on artwork in prose and poetry. I can tell you this with all honesty. I work very hard on getting the words just right before the first picture is even thought about. Sometimes, it is so very difficult to even locate pictures to accompany the kinds of things I write. Not always, but sometimes.
I submit lots of poems and prose to publishes and magazines, and no artwork is permitted in those. So, I fully understand that the words have to be able to stand on their own merit.
The wording is the "meat", if you will. The artwork, well...that's just the gravy. And who doesn't like a little gravy on their meat every now and again?
I appreciate the exceptional rating and comprehensive review, Bill. Much obliged!~Dean:)
Comment from GracieAnn
Dean, this has captured the language of a bygone day in a fresh way. The reader is compelled to finish though he/she dreads what is to come. Strong work. :0 GracieAnn
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Dean, this has captured the language of a bygone day in a fresh way. The reader is compelled to finish though he/she dreads what is to come. Strong work. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
