Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "O mother dear"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from michaelcahill
I found this to be quite original. That is an exceptional and memorable line: "O mother dear" carries in the wind from cries as men go down," There is so much to ponder about it when it comes to the senselessness and the horrible sacrifice of war. How could anything be worth the life of a mother's son or daughter? It isn't. One of the best I've read from you. Well done. mikey
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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I found this to be quite original. That is an exceptional and memorable line: "O mother dear" carries in the wind from cries as men go down," There is so much to ponder about it when it comes to the senselessness and the horrible sacrifice of war. How could anything be worth the life of a mother's son or daughter? It isn't. One of the best I've read from you. Well done. mikey
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from ArtGal
So very real, and that makes it even more sad. So many dying, young and old. And I do believe that many think of their mother toward the end. I believe that God cries for each loss soul. War is the devil's work, not His. Strong words with a strong message, and a great write. . .Sharon
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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So very real, and that makes it even more sad. So many dying, young and old. And I do believe that many think of their mother toward the end. I believe that God cries for each loss soul. War is the devil's work, not His. Strong words with a strong message, and a great write. . .Sharon
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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thank you Sharon for this review
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You're so very welcome.
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
Beautifully said and what a true message. The heartache and woes, the youthful and the brilliant stars of grace. I didn't see any spelling errors but one point of tense; (these field or this field or these fields).
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014
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Beautifully said and what a true message. The heartache and woes, the youthful and the brilliant stars of grace. I didn't see any spelling errors but one point of tense; (these field or this field or these fields).
Comment Written 14-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014
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Thank you for your review the guy with the long name :-)
Comment from Titan Black
I like the message. It was very touching, considering the circumstances within the scheme. But you could have been more creative. I know other people might have praised this, but I think that, for the message that you were presenting you could have put more effort into making the reader feel what you were saying. Nevertheless, the message was very powerful. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014
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I like the message. It was very touching, considering the circumstances within the scheme. But you could have been more creative. I know other people might have praised this, but I think that, for the message that you were presenting you could have put more effort into making the reader feel what you were saying. Nevertheless, the message was very powerful. Keep writing.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2014
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thanks for the review
Comment from DR DIP
I never tire of reading your poetry deepwater that my friend had a beautiful flow and its written from the heart and from an author who has experienced all this first hand for it shows in your writing
thanks for sharing
dip
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I never tire of reading your poetry deepwater that my friend had a beautiful flow and its written from the heart and from an author who has experienced all this first hand for it shows in your writing
thanks for sharing
dip
Comment Written 14-Aug-2014
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thank you dip for this warm review
your friend
Gary
Comment from Smoothiecool
your well chosen words allow the reader to see and feel the plight of the soldier that went to war and the price some paid as the fell and died on the land they were fighting in
good visual to portray message
good rhyme through out not forced
cheers smoothiecool
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your well chosen words allow the reader to see and feel the plight of the soldier that went to war and the price some paid as the fell and died on the land they were fighting in
good visual to portray message
good rhyme through out not forced
cheers smoothiecool
Comment Written 14-Aug-2014
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thank you
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welcome..SC
Comment from Acquired Taste
This is lovely - rhymes very nicely and flows smoothly as you read it.
Your last line: We fell and died upon this field in sight of God and grace - is truly beautiful and ties up the entire poem.
Again, lovely. AT=/
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014
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This is lovely - rhymes very nicely and flows smoothly as you read it.
Your last line: We fell and died upon this field in sight of God and grace - is truly beautiful and ties up the entire poem.
Again, lovely. AT=/
Comment Written 14-Aug-2014
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thank you AT for your review
Comment from lappmellott
Great job on this poem. I love it. The photograph with the red flowers just seems to suit the poem. Many people have lost loved ones during war time. It's very sad, but very true, also.
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Great job on this poem. I love it. The photograph with the red flowers just seems to suit the poem. Many people have lost loved ones during war time. It's very sad, but very true, also.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2014
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thank you
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You're welcome.
Comment from NicciFaye
This was a nice poem. The rhyme of it flowed easily and the message is firm. All men and women are brave as we fall and die upon this land in the sight of God and grace..Fighting a continuous battle of war and love.
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This was a nice poem. The rhyme of it flowed easily and the message is firm. All men and women are brave as we fall and die upon this land in the sight of God and grace..Fighting a continuous battle of war and love.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2014
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thank you for this
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there Gary
I regret that I have squandered all of my 6's. This is exquisite. In so many ways reminds me of us kids in Vietnam.
Great line: We fell and died upon this field in sight of God and grace.
Bear
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014
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Hey there Gary
I regret that I have squandered all of my 6's. This is exquisite. In so many ways reminds me of us kids in Vietnam.
Great line: We fell and died upon this field in sight of God and grace.
Bear
Comment Written 14-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2014
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thank you Bear for this
Gary
