Stories of the Dreamtime
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Yalunga - The Rainbow Serpent."Aboriginal myths and legends.
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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I've enjoyed this historical, informative, and legendary in Australian regional English about the legend of how the rainbows came to be, Yalunga the rainbow serpent, simply narrated; it was a pleasant read; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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I've enjoyed this historical, informative, and legendary in Australian regional English about the legend of how the rainbows came to be, Yalunga the rainbow serpent, simply narrated; it was a pleasant read; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
Comment Written 21-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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DR, Thank you for reading, glad you enjoyed. I started on a book Stories of the Dreamtime to inform and teach white folks about our history. God bless you. K XX
Comment from Michelle Oden
Well written. Interesting subject matter. Nice dialogue. Very descriptive of the characters and the setting. Entertaining for young and not so young!. Good length.
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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Well written. Interesting subject matter. Nice dialogue. Very descriptive of the characters and the setting. Entertaining for young and not so young!. Good length.
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Comment Written 20-Sep-2022
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2022
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Thanks for reading Michelle. Blessings K.
Comment from tfawcus
This is a marvellous retelling of the Rainbow Serpent Dreaming. The school where I last taught had a stained glass window winding up one side of a staircase, depicting the rainbow serpent. It had prisms set in it that cast small rainbows on the stairs and on the walls as the sun moved across the sky.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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This is a marvellous retelling of the Rainbow Serpent Dreaming. The school where I last taught had a stained glass window winding up one side of a staircase, depicting the rainbow serpent. It had prisms set in it that cast small rainbows on the stairs and on the walls as the sun moved across the sky.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Hello tfawcus, Have not met you before; glorious re-telling of the colours of the stained glass window - why not put pen to paper and write a poem? Glad you enjoyed my story of Yalunga. Blessings, Kay. Hope you are getting some rain over there? We are in Queensland!
Comment from c_lucas
There are thousands mythical tales throughout the societies of Earth. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words making for a good read.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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There are thousands mythical tales throughout the societies of Earth. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words making for a good read.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2014
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Tanka you for reading and glad you enjoyed. Cheers, Kay. :-)
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You're welcome, Kay. Charlie
Comment from Loren (7)
This reads as if hearing the words come from a wizened Indian story teller. Bold with color, entrancing thoughts to hold your readers captive. Authentic sounding. Loren
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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This reads as if hearing the words come from a wizened Indian story teller. Bold with color, entrancing thoughts to hold your readers captive. Authentic sounding. Loren
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Thank you Loren - glad you enjoyed the story. My people had no written language and so it was word of mouth or cave paintings. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Finally, a moment to get caught up on my messages. Kay, this is a really fascinating story. You tell it so well, that I can see a child being drawn in and engaging with the wonderful tale. I love the message that everything needs love, even an old serpent. And that ending is awesome! I'd gladly give you a six if I had any left, my friend.
Hugs, Bev
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Finally, a moment to get caught up on my messages. Kay, this is a really fascinating story. You tell it so well, that I can see a child being drawn in and engaging with the wonderful tale. I love the message that everything needs love, even an old serpent. And that ending is awesome! I'd gladly give you a six if I had any left, my friend.
Hugs, Bev
Comment Written 13-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Ah, Ha! You are the third person that has told me they have no sixes! Not to worry, glad you enjoyed. Hugs back, Kay. :-)
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I sure did, Kay. I'd love to see this in the BOM contest. :) Bev
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We call BOM is bureau of meteorology! What is BOM in US?
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HaHa, that's definitely not what I meant! I was referring to the Book of the Month contest on the site, Kay. You gave me a good laugh today... sorry for the confusion.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I wish I knew when you were going to post one of these lovely stories of yours, Kay, so I could keep a 6 back, so unfair we only have so few. I just loved this story, how many of these wonderful legends do you have? Each one is incredible. I loved how Yalunga just wanted the children to be his friend, even serpents get lonely. And after 10,000 years, I think I would too! Brilliant Kay! xsx sandra
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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I wish I knew when you were going to post one of these lovely stories of yours, Kay, so I could keep a 6 back, so unfair we only have so few. I just loved this story, how many of these wonderful legends do you have? Each one is incredible. I loved how Yalunga just wanted the children to be his friend, even serpents get lonely. And after 10,000 years, I think I would too! Brilliant Kay! xsx sandra
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Hello Seagull, You can always update to 6 when you get them? I have many tales to tell. Glad you liked it - thank you so much for reading. Love, Kay.XX
Comment from tedanytime
This is an entrancing legend. It amazes me to read of ancient tribes that have stories of creation and after. The Greeks and others have tales I suspect have a basis in actuality, as this one.
Maybe you have read cowboy tales told of Paul Bunyon using his blue ox tomake rivers and lakes. It is an original American story, not ancient.
Very nice work, my lady!
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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This is an entrancing legend. It amazes me to read of ancient tribes that have stories of creation and after. The Greeks and others have tales I suspect have a basis in actuality, as this one.
Maybe you have read cowboy tales told of Paul Bunyon using his blue ox tomake rivers and lakes. It is an original American story, not ancient.
Very nice work, my lady!
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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G'day Ted, Thanks for reading, glad you liked. Our culture is one of the oldest - 60,000 years to be exact, no written language. I haven't heard of Paul Bunyon? I don't know a lot about American history - I do love to hear about the American Indians. Bless you son, Kay XX
Comment from adewpearl
When you write legends they all sound totally authentic, in a voice I would believe any day is an ancient folk legend
lovely detail of setting
when the rains come, if he emerges - I would make that a period
I really like your depiction of the rainbow serpent
a fine, fat dinner," - make that a period
I love the encounter and conversation with the wary children
how moving when he realizes he is more lonely than hungry
Thank you, dear children - add comma with direct address
Great Spirit, we meant no harm - add comma for direct address
I love the closing
This is just a wonderful story :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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When you write legends they all sound totally authentic, in a voice I would believe any day is an ancient folk legend
lovely detail of setting
when the rains come, if he emerges - I would make that a period
I really like your depiction of the rainbow serpent
a fine, fat dinner," - make that a period
I love the encounter and conversation with the wary children
how moving when he realizes he is more lonely than hungry
Thank you, dear children - add comma with direct address
Great Spirit, we meant no harm - add comma for direct address
I love the closing
This is just a wonderful story :-) Brooke
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Hello Possum, Tanka you for reading and so pleased that it brightened your day. I have more stories coming. Luv, One-legged garden gnome X
Comment from Eigle Rull
I very much enjoy the stories you tell from Aboriginal tribes of Australia. I've not read one that I have not enjoyed. This well written story is a great example of it. My interest and attention was grabbed right away and held with every word. I loved the story and the dialog. This story was excellent.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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I very much enjoy the stories you tell from Aboriginal tribes of Australia. I've not read one that I have not enjoyed. This well written story is a great example of it. My interest and attention was grabbed right away and held with every word. I loved the story and the dialog. This story was excellent.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 12-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014
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Hello my friend, So pleased that you enjoyed the story - lots more to come. Love, Kay.
