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Along the Jericho Road

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Murder Mystery

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Comment from N.K. Wagner
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Excellently written with well paced build-up of drama and tension. Dramatic climax. Construction and grammar are perfect. :) nancy

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
    Nancy, I am very honored by this generous and very encouraging review. Thank you so much! :) Bev
Comment from Patrick G Cox
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Hi Writingfundimension,

A good tense confrontation with the demon and the possessed, and a dramatic climax with the priest confronting the truth of the meaning a 'Grace'.

Patrick

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
    Patrick, I had you in my mind as I wrote this chapter. I'm so relieved that it passed muster. Thanks so much for both your generosity and support.

    :) Bev
Comment from sweetwoodjax
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this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter, great drama and imagery presented here. hopefully father brian will make it back

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
    Thank you so very much, Sweet. I sure appreciate your encouragement and generosity. :) Bev
Comment from Joan E.
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"Possessed people are not evil" is a great statement to use, along with the scarey picture, to open this chapter. Thanks for your notes about an exorcism and the Sioux term--consecrated armor is so descriptive. Your "reluctant puppet" analogy is quite effective along with the tension you created. The final scene is unexpected and heartwarming--it will be difficult to top when you conclude the story. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
    Thank you so much for your gratifying and very generous review, Joan. I, especially, enjoy the mention of sections you liked. And so appreciate your taking time to read and offer your insights. Hugs, Bev
reply by Joan E. on 02-Aug-2014
    It is always my pleasure to read your work. I'll suffer withdrawal symptoms when this story ends! More hugs and happy weekend- Joan
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
    I've got a couple in the hopper, Joan. Just not sure yet which one I'll go with.

    You are really so very kind and generous. Hugs, Bev
reply by Joan E. on 02-Aug-2014
    I'm delighted you have choices! Thank you for your heartwarming comment, my friend. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
    :) xx
Comment from c_lucas
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It looks as if your story is winding down. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Very good imagery.

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 Comment Written 02-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
    Hey, Charlie. Thanks so much for the terrific review. I really appreciate it. Yes, it's down to the final stages. But a twist and a few explanations forthcoming. Can't let you all off that easy LoL. :) Bev

    Correction appreciated too!
reply by c_lucas on 02-Aug-2014
    You're welcome, Bev. Charlie
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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You did a wonderful job with this post. The descriptions and the emotions became real to the reader. That's a mark of a good author.

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reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
    Thanks so very much, Barbara. I really appreciate your generous and encouraging review. Hugs, Bev
Comment from lindalcreel
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Well, we know that the priest has died, but still don't know the fate of the others. The demon may have said he didn't need another priest in Hell, but I can't believe he wouldn't jump on the chance to take Brian's soul if the chance were there. Why else would he have Rick turn on him? This was another well-written chapter. Your descriptions and dialogue were brilliant.

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 Comment Written 02-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
    Hi, Lindal. Thank you so much for your insights and encouragement for my chapter. As you know with your great story, Demons never die, they only come back another day in another form.

    Much appreciate it! :) Bev
reply by lindalcreel on 02-Aug-2014
    So true. It was my pleasure to read this.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
    You're so kind, Lindal. :)
Comment from jadapenn
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Great tension and action in this chapter, Bev. I loved it. The story was well paced and easy to follow. I sure hope Father Brian hasn't gone altogether now. It would be a pity to lose him at this stage. He is doing such great work. I can't wait for the next chapter. Great thriller. :) luv jada

 Comment Written 02-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
    Jada, you have really touched my heart with your wonderful and encouraging review. I appreciate both the spirit behind the words and the generosity. I love Father Brian's character, so am glad to know you catch the sense of who this man is. Love it! Hugs, Bev
Comment from royowen
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I enjoyed your story, and because I have scriptural knowledge,I'm au fait with your story! Your characters were quite well defined! The story was nice and tense, and maintained that tension throughout the narrative, it is well written, with a clear plot thread running through it! I was absorbed from beginning to end, good work, well done, blessings, Roy.

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 Comment Written 02-Aug-2014


reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
    Thank you so much, Roy. I appreciate your gracious review! Glad you enjoyed the read. :) Bev
reply by royowen on 02-Aug-2014
    You're welcome, Roy.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
    :)