I Love My Mom
rhyming quatrains151 total reviews
Comment from GeorgieBoy
Everyone can relate to this message in your poem. Excellent, as usual. I especially liked the 'gob of mayonnaise and mustard's all it takes' You can hear a little boy's angst in the words.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
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Everyone can relate to this message in your poem. Excellent, as usual. I especially liked the 'gob of mayonnaise and mustard's all it takes' You can hear a little boy's angst in the words.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
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GeorgieBoy, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dom G Robles
I think the poem flowed freely. The rhymes are neat and clean, smooth as silk. The structure was strong. Its was like a five story building, with foundation of love but unaware of what the owner's really wanted. The paintings inside the house was beautiful but was not like the liking of the unsophisticated owner. The prospective, buyer of the home or owner just relish on simple decorations not full of artistic settings. He did not like that. Finally, he was amenable to all what is the structure, all that is inside, because he is home-hungry. He wanted a home at all cost. (My simile of hunger for food and home).
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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I think the poem flowed freely. The rhymes are neat and clean, smooth as silk. The structure was strong. Its was like a five story building, with foundation of love but unaware of what the owner's really wanted. The paintings inside the house was beautiful but was not like the liking of the unsophisticated owner. The prospective, buyer of the home or owner just relish on simple decorations not full of artistic settings. He did not like that. Finally, he was amenable to all what is the structure, all that is inside, because he is home-hungry. He wanted a home at all cost. (My simile of hunger for food and home).
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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What a thoughtful analysis of my poem, Dom :-) Thank you so much for your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
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Thank you. It was a simile in terms what the subject is: A child hungry to eat but did not really like the food very much--like a home-buyer that has been presented a home with all the beautiful trimmings inside that was so much for him--he preferred simple one--a simple meal...a 5-poem stanza to a five story home with strong foundation. Was I imagining too, much? Yes because I am an engineer looking for strong foundation of a home with all the beautiful architectural inside. The too much decoration inside the home lost my appetite, like the food... and the home, it was full of design that did not appear to appetite. I think there could an application of simile in thought not only in
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Thank you. I made a simile out of the thought presented and not a simile on the words presented in the poem. Thank you.
Comment from ruzu27
Brooke, oh, how very nice. I hear him saying all that.
He is really a happy boy, just imagine all your poems and stories.
I am sure he will love them. I certainly try and do my best for my grandson to have a few poems written especially for him. So far, his favorite is the dragon.
Thank you for sharing. Ruth
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Brooke, oh, how very nice. I hear him saying all that.
He is really a happy boy, just imagine all your poems and stories.
I am sure he will love them. I certainly try and do my best for my grandson to have a few poems written especially for him. So far, his favorite is the dragon.
Thank you for sharing. Ruth
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thanks so very much, Ruth - I'm glad you and your grandson share your poems too :-) Brooke
Comment from OLA THOMAS
The muse of a child in a poem. Sometimes, children are very selective and don't like some of the menus served by their Moms but could they actually have their ways?
ola thomas
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
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The muse of a child in a poem. Sometimes, children are very selective and don't like some of the menus served by their Moms but could they actually have their ways?
ola thomas
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
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Ola, thank you so much :-) The nutritionists and doctors and child-rearing experts all agree that you can't force feed them :-) Brooke
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brooke,
What a cute picture of Sawyer with a funny but really nice poem. You sure come up with good ideas to write poetry about your darling grandson. Bravo!
Kat
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Hi Brooke,
What a cute picture of Sawyer with a funny but really nice poem. You sure come up with good ideas to write poetry about your darling grandson. Bravo!
Kat
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Kat, thanks so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from Just2Write
Another delightful insight of the world's truths through Sawyer's eyes. This poem is positively fun - I especially liked how mother ruined some perfectly good cheese by pouring it on cauliflower. Now, that's cruel.
And as far as tuna goes - I wish it would jump back in the ocean too.
A great read that made me smile.
Rose.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Another delightful insight of the world's truths through Sawyer's eyes. This poem is positively fun - I especially liked how mother ruined some perfectly good cheese by pouring it on cauliflower. Now, that's cruel.
And as far as tuna goes - I wish it would jump back in the ocean too.
A great read that made me smile.
Rose.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Rose, for your fun and generous response to my poem :-) Brooke
Comment from janalma
This one made me laugh. You are so right about the 'nasty' things we made our kids eat--and we had to eat when we were kids. Very articulate and well written. I could see this in a magazine like Woman's World, so a six again.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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This one made me laugh. You are so right about the 'nasty' things we made our kids eat--and we had to eat when we were kids. Very articulate and well written. I could see this in a magazine like Woman's World, so a six again.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Janalma, thank you so much for your generous sixth star. I'm so glad you laughed :-) Brooke
Comment from L.M.Mullins
Brooke;
I must say; this might be the only time reading of vegetables or liverwurst has ever made me smile. I can almost smell the nasty plate of them. Enjoyable piece.
Len
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Brooke;
I must say; this might be the only time reading of vegetables or liverwurst has ever made me smile. I can almost smell the nasty plate of them. Enjoyable piece.
Len
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Len, thanks so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Angel Debbie
Beautiful. Mom's do some strange things to get children to eat. I know I did.
Ice cream always seems to be a treat they all love to eat.
I enjoyed this read greatly.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Beautiful. Mom's do some strange things to get children to eat. I know I did.
Ice cream always seems to be a treat they all love to eat.
I enjoyed this read greatly.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Angel Debbie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Gracie619
What a fun and enjoyable piece of writing! Thank you for sharing this. The different foods and how they went "wrong" made me chuckle and smile. A perfect start for my Sunday.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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What a fun and enjoyable piece of writing! Thank you for sharing this. The different foods and how they went "wrong" made me chuckle and smile. A perfect start for my Sunday.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2014
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Gracie, thanks so much :-) Brooke
