Memoir
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Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Bill.
This is a great account of a childhood experience. Writing is an escape, a way to release the stress and put down our thoughts, whether in fiction or nonfiction. You showed this well, accounting the fight, followed by the roughhousing from your older brother. It sounds like you've always been a writer, from a young age onward able to create rich characters based on personal experiences and observations. Best of luck in the contest.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Hi, Bill.
This is a great account of a childhood experience. Writing is an escape, a way to release the stress and put down our thoughts, whether in fiction or nonfiction. You showed this well, accounting the fight, followed by the roughhousing from your older brother. It sounds like you've always been a writer, from a young age onward able to create rich characters based on personal experiences and observations. Best of luck in the contest.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Rosalyne, got the excellent review
Comment from lindalcreel
I guess your older siblings responded in a way unlike our family. People were always picking on our little brother, and you're right, there would have been another beating, but the sisters would join together and go after the punks who hurt him. Not that we weren't young ladies in front of our father, but nobody messed with our little brother. This story brought back memories for me too. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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I guess your older siblings responded in a way unlike our family. People were always picking on our little brother, and you're right, there would have been another beating, but the sisters would join together and go after the punks who hurt him. Not that we weren't young ladies in front of our father, but nobody messed with our little brother. This story brought back memories for me too. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Linda, for giving this a peek.
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My pleasure:)
Comment from mfowler
You seem to have found a measure of comfort in penning non-fiction here, Bill. Or, is this just embellished truth (LOL)? I've used a text with my primary students about a kid who did just what you did; invented details in his diary to make the day turn out better than it had. It seems to connect with a lot of kids, so I guess your method had veracity when things didn't go so well. I really liked the fight story, and showing both the diary entry and the real version of events, made your childhood ploy very entertaining and believable. I like how you rounded thsi piece off by alluding to where your writing has headed. Good, interesting tale of youth. Good luck with this contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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You seem to have found a measure of comfort in penning non-fiction here, Bill. Or, is this just embellished truth (LOL)? I've used a text with my primary students about a kid who did just what you did; invented details in his diary to make the day turn out better than it had. It seems to connect with a lot of kids, so I guess your method had veracity when things didn't go so well. I really liked the fight story, and showing both the diary entry and the real version of events, made your childhood ploy very entertaining and believable. I like how you rounded thsi piece off by alluding to where your writing has headed. Good, interesting tale of youth. Good luck with this contest.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you, m, for the excellent review.
Comment from Emily George
You were obviously born to write, for who wants to read about the mundane.That you stumbled on this so early in life is both amazing and profound. I enjoyed your article and was amazed at the self reflections of you the little boy, who obviously even then knew the power of the written word.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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You were obviously born to write, for who wants to read about the mundane.That you stumbled on this so early in life is both amazing and profound. I enjoyed your article and was amazed at the self reflections of you the little boy, who obviously even then knew the power of the written word.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Emily, for the excellent review.
