Death Fantasy #17
Short Story-50 Word Contest Entry33 total reviews
Comment from susankaye
Definitely reaches out & grabs your attention! Interesting juxtaposition of death & the life-generating powers of sex. (Dolly IS quite like one of those pagan fertility symbols.) Also could be judged as very successful in the genre of pornographic writing & might even get you a gig at Playboy, etc.
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Definitely reaches out & grabs your attention! Interesting juxtaposition of death & the life-generating powers of sex. (Dolly IS quite like one of those pagan fertility symbols.) Also could be judged as very successful in the genre of pornographic writing & might even get you a gig at Playboy, etc.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2014
Comment from Patti R.
LOL! Let me catch my breath... yea, better not to add anything to those author notes my friend, this is a well-written hole you've dug here! Ah, Dolly.
I think crotch-less should/could be hyphenated, freeing up one more self-recriminating word for you to use!!
Patti
Good luck in this contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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LOL! Let me catch my breath... yea, better not to add anything to those author notes my friend, this is a well-written hole you've dug here! Ah, Dolly.
I think crotch-less should/could be hyphenated, freeing up one more self-recriminating word for you to use!!
Patti
Good luck in this contest.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2014
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Spell check blushed when I used that word. I had it as a single word and it said no and then like you suggest and finally in two separate beds with one foot on the floor! I figured I'd be dead and wouldn't have to face the music, but then I realized to late that it was just a fantasy... mikey
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After a fantasy like that you need some air!
I am impressed at how bravely you put forth details about yourself that just keeps your fan(s) smilin'.
Have I apologized lately for not reading all your stuff, Mikey?? I wish I could. You are a prolific rabbit of writing and I like to read from several portfolios, and time's limited...blah blah blah, sorry man. Everything I do read makes me happy to know you.
Patti
Comment from Domino 2
I suspect if Dolly wasn't wearing a bra, then her boobs would be bouncing on your three feet high head and probably pummel you to 'death', Mikey, or at least knock you unconscious, so you'd be unable to appreciate her other 'assets'.
I also suspect she's too old to jog, as am I. :-)
Fun and original entry.
Cheers, Ray.
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I suspect if Dolly wasn't wearing a bra, then her boobs would be bouncing on your three feet high head and probably pummel you to 'death', Mikey, or at least knock you unconscious, so you'd be unable to appreciate her other 'assets'.
I also suspect she's too old to jog, as am I. :-)
Fun and original entry.
Cheers, Ray.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
Comment from l.raven
Michael, shame on you!!!!...they aren't real...she had to changed them a few times...one broke open inside her and almost killed her...hope your wife hit you with a frying pan for this one....you...LOL...dreamer...Luff Linda xxoo
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Michael, shame on you!!!!...they aren't real...she had to changed them a few times...one broke open inside her and almost killed her...hope your wife hit you with a frying pan for this one....you...LOL...dreamer...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 09-Jul-2014
Comment from Muffins
This is a crazy story, I bet came to you in one fast sweep. The ultimate Yeek boy-man fantasy. If it were me, I would have said, " I choose not to have it." Ha!Ha.
I love it when a story, short or long makes me laugh.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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This is a crazy story, I bet came to you in one fast sweep. The ultimate Yeek boy-man fantasy. If it were me, I would have said, " I choose not to have it." Ha!Ha.
I love it when a story, short or long makes me laugh.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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Yes. It did just occur to me and then I posted it. I came to my senses tooooo late. Now, here it is. Hahaha. I'm glad you got a laugh out of it. Thank you, mikey
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Your welcome.
Comment from ravenblack
Ummm....are you sure it was a bottle you were rubbing? LOL.. Sorry. Blame Freud. What a way to go! I thing I'd choose to be squashed between Scarlet Johansen and Jennifer Lawrence. Crotch less- should just be crotchless.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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Ummm....are you sure it was a bottle you were rubbing? LOL.. Sorry. Blame Freud. What a way to go! I thing I'd choose to be squashed between Scarlet Johansen and Jennifer Lawrence. Crotch less- should just be crotchless.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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Hahaha. Spell check made me change it! It must be from the fifties. I like your version better, but I only had fifty words...
Comment from Kingsland
Well that was rather risqué. What made you come forth with this notion? It is kind of like when I was younger and listening to guys say dumb things. This was well written and done for the sake of humor, at least I think it was supposed to be humor... John
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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Well that was rather risqué. What made you come forth with this notion? It is kind of like when I was younger and listening to guys say dumb things. This was well written and done for the sake of humor, at least I think it was supposed to be humor... John
Comment Written 09-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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YES! It was supposed to be humor. I don't know what possessed me to post it. Hahaha. I imagine the desire to feel young and dumb. Mikey
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh my. LOL I was wondering if you're a teenager male or just a male in general. LOL I enjoyed reading your short story. I laughed. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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Oh my. LOL I was wondering if you're a teenager male or just a male in general. LOL I enjoyed reading your short story. I laughed. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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I suppose we're all teenager males regardless of what our driver's license says! Some of us are silly enough to post it though! Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Mikey.
Very funny story! Beware of what you wish for. What appears perky in a dress droops when freed of restraints. With breasts that big, she's top heavy, and has a tendency to topple over. LOL
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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Hi, Mikey.
Very funny story! Beware of what you wish for. What appears perky in a dress droops when freed of restraints. With breasts that big, she's top heavy, and has a tendency to topple over. LOL
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 09-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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Yep. That's why I figured it would be lethal! Sometimes I can't believe what I'm willing to post. Hahaha. mikey
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Mikey, your post is great. It is funny and made me laugh. I don't believe in censorship, or being restricted of creative freedom. Good for you to post such a humourous story! :D
Comment from Shirley B
Dear Michael, You are so bad but in a good way. Why do I even enter contest that you are in. I have no chance. You are way too funny. The imagery there is way too vivid! LOL. Best of luck in the contest, Shirley
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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Dear Michael, You are so bad but in a good way. Why do I even enter contest that you are in. I have no chance. You are way too funny. The imagery there is way too vivid! LOL. Best of luck in the contest, Shirley
Comment Written 09-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2014
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Thank you for such a wonderful review and the great compliments. I feel like a fourteen year old writing this. Hahaha. Well... I always do! I suppose I have a second childhood to look forward to when I'm done with the first! mikey
