History and Myth
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "High Ideals"Poems that tell stories of long ago
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Comment from Joan E.
I am amazed that you established this A through Z challenge for yourself. I enjoyed your vehicle of the suite of rhymed, ABC poems in rhythmic stanzas and your history lesson, with a powerful repeating line. A tour de force- Joan
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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I am amazed that you established this A through Z challenge for yourself. I enjoyed your vehicle of the suite of rhymed, ABC poems in rhythmic stanzas and your history lesson, with a powerful repeating line. A tour de force- Joan
Comment Written 09-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Thank you Joan. The other format just seemed too easy, so I thought I'd stretch it a bit. I am glad you liked it.
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Here's to you continuing to challenge yourself! -Joan
Comment from adewpearl
I like how you've created your suite of ABC Poems with the use of the same refrain line in each that ties them together
good alliteration in bought by blood
I like the history you include that involves the difference between our country's highest ideals and what actually happens in practice
Brooke
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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I like how you've created your suite of ABC Poems with the use of the same refrain line in each that ties them together
good alliteration in bought by blood
I like the history you include that involves the difference between our country's highest ideals and what actually happens in practice
Brooke
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much Brooke. Yes, there is and always has been a dichotomy.
Comment from rod007
This is a very reflective and impressive poem on the state of your Nation. I loved these lines as they are so true:
'Quarreling states fought Civil War
Rights Proclamation freed the slaves
Soon Women's Rights came to the fore
Today discrimination raves
When shall we meet our high ideals?'
An Imperfect nation striving for perfection we hope. Like men as long as the Nation strives to become purer, cleaner and better, God will smile.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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This is a very reflective and impressive poem on the state of your Nation. I loved these lines as they are so true:
'Quarreling states fought Civil War
Rights Proclamation freed the slaves
Soon Women's Rights came to the fore
Today discrimination raves
When shall we meet our high ideals?'
An Imperfect nation striving for perfection we hope. Like men as long as the Nation strives to become purer, cleaner and better, God will smile.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Thank you rod. I hope you are right.
Comment from Angel Debbie
Great ABC poem.
Perfect subject for the fourth of July.
Yes when shall we meet our high ideals? Does anyone even know?
Nice thinking write, many would not have thought this way as forgetful people are.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Great ABC poem.
Perfect subject for the fourth of July.
Yes when shall we meet our high ideals? Does anyone even know?
Nice thinking write, many would not have thought this way as forgetful people are.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Thank you Angel. I am please you liked it and rated it so highly.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
A very interesting, thought-provoking poem. I enjoyed it very much. I love history and historical "things." You have done a good job expressing yourself and the history of the USA. One suggestion I have is this: In the fourth stanza, should the word "enjoy" be "enjoyed" ? It seems that you are writing in past tense. How nice that you can illustrate your poem with a picture you took.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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A very interesting, thought-provoking poem. I enjoyed it very much. I love history and historical "things." You have done a good job expressing yourself and the history of the USA. One suggestion I have is this: In the fourth stanza, should the word "enjoy" be "enjoyed" ? It seems that you are writing in past tense. How nice that you can illustrate your poem with a picture you took.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Thank jannypan. I look at that again.
Comment from Eric1
This is a fascinating piece of American history in the ABC format, and you went for the full Monty!, I must admit I had to read on as I was intrigued as to what the X was going to be, you didn't disappoint! This work has great flow, rhythm, and rhyme and the imagery portrayed is beautiful, a surefire contender!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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This is a fascinating piece of American history in the ABC format, and you went for the full Monty!, I must admit I had to read on as I was intrigued as to what the X was going to be, you didn't disappoint! This work has great flow, rhythm, and rhyme and the imagery portrayed is beautiful, a surefire contender!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Thank you Eric, glad you read on.
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You are so welcomeTreischel
