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Homework- revise to free verse23 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
an interesting idea for a free verse poem, to take a rhyming poem and create free verse from it. I am a big fan of revision, so I like your story of composing and then recomposing :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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an interesting idea for a free verse poem, to take a rhyming poem and create free verse from it. I am a big fan of revision, so I like your story of composing and then recomposing :-) Brooke
Comment Written 16-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Brooke. Yes, this was a bit of a challenge. Appreciate the great review!
Comment from Sonaleeka
Very well written. Very well crafted free verse poem.
Best of luck for contest.Worth reading.
I loved this part
Now, I'm new at this game.
Although I've played it for years.
God bless!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Very well written. Very well crafted free verse poem.
Best of luck for contest.Worth reading.
I loved this part
Now, I'm new at this game.
Although I've played it for years.
God bless!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the great review. Have a great day!
Comment from Christopher Lones
It's good but I don't understand. Is the last stanza an author note or part of the poem? Either way the first two stanzas are really good.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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It's good but I don't understand. Is the last stanza an author note or part of the poem? Either way the first two stanzas are really good.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Thank you.. I posted a different poem at first, but it rhymed. Reviewers reminded me of the "free verse" description so I revised the poem to a free verse
Comment from Bill Schott
You've done a good job changing RHYMY to FREE
and now you've encouraged a rhymer like me
to try and forget that I have need to rhyme
and seem to be doing it all of the time.
Here's my rewrite:
You are good with poetry
Like your style
Absent of guile
I am too much in rhyme
You are not....Good.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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You've done a good job changing RHYMY to FREE
and now you've encouraged a rhymer like me
to try and forget that I have need to rhyme
and seem to be doing it all of the time.
Here's my rewrite:
You are good with poetry
Like your style
Absent of guile
I am too much in rhyme
You are not....Good.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
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Thank you. That's funny. Have a nice day.
Comment from michaelcahill
I've been through this twice! Once when I was in high school and I was convinced that everything didn't have to rhyme. Then when I came here and had to be convinced that it was okay for some things to rhyme! Hahaha. I hadn't rhymed anything in... well, a "few" years!! This is great. A definite free verser if I ever heard one. mikey
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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I've been through this twice! Once when I was in high school and I was convinced that everything didn't have to rhyme. Then when I came here and had to be convinced that it was okay for some things to rhyme! Hahaha. I hadn't rhymed anything in... well, a "few" years!! This is great. A definite free verser if I ever heard one. mikey
Comment Written 08-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Thank you, Mikey. I'm certainly getting a little taste of everything on this "poetic buffet table." Lol! This revision was somewhat of a challenge for me because when I saw that it wasn't the right formation for free verse I put everything around me in "freeze frame" until I was satisfied enough to pull a quick switch. Thanks for the great review!
Comment from thedreampeddler
I like it. My version of free verse still rhymes, but that's just because I like rhyming. This is a free-er style for sure.
To me, some of these just come across like thinking out loud. Your's was better than that.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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I like it. My version of free verse still rhymes, but that's just because I like rhyming. This is a free-er style for sure.
To me, some of these just come across like thinking out loud. Your's was better than that.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Thank you. I actually had a bit of difficulty with putting this together because I am so used to rhyming. If anything, I gained a tiny bit more knowledge about poetry, very cool! Have a great day!
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Sue,
LOL... I know that look with the tongue sticking out - he's thinking about it big time! This picture is a keeper!
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Hi Sue,
LOL... I know that look with the tongue sticking out - he's thinking about it big time! This picture is a keeper!
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Thank you so much! Have a wonderful day!
Comment from Nosha17
Good sport to revise it and with good humour. Well chosen words to convey your message. Good luck in the contest. Appropriate illustration. Faye
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Good sport to revise it and with good humour. Well chosen words to convey your message. Good luck in the contest. Appropriate illustration. Faye
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the great review. I wasn't sure what type of reaction I would receive by revising the first poem, but I am glad I did. Have a great day.
Comment from Goodauthor
Oh the frustration of rhyme and flow, meter and the rest. It's enough to make a poet want to quit, but as surely poetry is, so the poet did devise a better what to speak the words his hear had to say.
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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Oh the frustration of rhyme and flow, meter and the rest. It's enough to make a poet want to quit, but as surely poetry is, so the poet did devise a better what to speak the words his hear had to say.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the nice review. Have a wonderful day!
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Your welcome.
Comment from Aplgwest
The great thing about free verse is that you are free to allow a poem to wander where it will. It does seem restricting when you have to delete rhymes in order for it to be free. I like how that child's tongue freely sticks out. Good luck to you.--Elaine
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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The great thing about free verse is that you are free to allow a poem to wander where it will. It does seem restricting when you have to delete rhymes in order for it to be free. I like how that child's tongue freely sticks out. Good luck to you.--Elaine
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the great review. Have a nice day!
