Father's Day (Revived 6/11/19)
A boy wanting to know how Father's Day became a holiday.22 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Thank you for reviving this one, my friend. Been a long time since you were posting anything. I liked this article and can easily understand why you saved it and reposted too. Hope to see you back again soon. Bob
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Thank you for reviving this one, my friend. Been a long time since you were posting anything. I liked this article and can easily understand why you saved it and reposted too. Hope to see you back again soon. Bob
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to review my revived story and the five stars.
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You are welcome. :) Bob
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I love how you created this story, intertwining fiction and facts. Love the research you provided. Love how you taught me something that I had not thought through before, and I found the information fascinating.
I love your story; it is a special one and very timely.
What I don't like are advertisers (and, I know, that's their job) who take advantage of certain holidays by enticing consumers to buy, buy, buy, which in turn seems to override the special meaning of the holiday being celebrated.
But, that has nothing to do with your writing. Again, I loved your story!
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2019
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I love how you created this story, intertwining fiction and facts. Love the research you provided. Love how you taught me something that I had not thought through before, and I found the information fascinating.
I love your story; it is a special one and very timely.
What I don't like are advertisers (and, I know, that's their job) who take advantage of certain holidays by enticing consumers to buy, buy, buy, which in turn seems to override the special meaning of the holiday being celebrated.
But, that has nothing to do with your writing. Again, I loved your story!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2019
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Thank you for taking time to review my story and giving me the five stars.
Comment from Aussie
Father's Day, Mother's Day, and what about Children's Day? We all missed out. We in Australia also celebrate those days - one in Sept. one in May. I don't know where it came from, maybe America. Anyway, I reckon us kids still missed out. Except for Children's Day at our Royal Agricultural Show. Thanks for sharing my friend.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Father's Day, Mother's Day, and what about Children's Day? We all missed out. We in Australia also celebrate those days - one in Sept. one in May. I don't know where it came from, maybe America. Anyway, I reckon us kids still missed out. Except for Children's Day at our Royal Agricultural Show. Thanks for sharing my friend.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Thank you for the five stars and comment. When you have time read "Centralia's Calamity" or the one I have about agriculture.
You don't have review it, just read at you leisure.
Comment from MTF1955
I did enjoy that. I never knew how it came about but thanks to you now I do. Hope everyone enjoys it as much as I did. Mary
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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I did enjoy that. I never knew how it came about but thanks to you now I do. Hope everyone enjoys it as much as I did. Mary
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Thank you for the five stars and comment as far as how it became a holiday, neither did I until I was in that area.
Comment from nomi338
So you see kids, old 'Tricky Dick', er, excuse me. President Nixon did do some good things while he was in office. I do hope that fathers all across this great nation will think kindly of President Nixon on Father's Day this year and each one hereafter. Even those fathers who receive yet another cheap and ugly tie. LOL.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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So you see kids, old 'Tricky Dick', er, excuse me. President Nixon did do some good things while he was in office. I do hope that fathers all across this great nation will think kindly of President Nixon on Father's Day this year and each one hereafter. Even those fathers who receive yet another cheap and ugly tie. LOL.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
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Thank you for you five stars and comment about President Nixon.
Comment from Bill Schott
I liked this story for its information and the idea that the son skimmed the article to discover what most don't know. As a story it works well. There are a few SPAG that I'll point out in case you're interested.
First sentence, which is actually two sentences: "(C)an you help me(?) I need to do a report for school on how Father's Day became a holiday(.)"
Second sentence: "(W)ell son, I don't know(,) but I'll find out." I am also questioning the identification of (Dad) at the beginning of the sentence, instead of (The dad).
Third Sentence: I don't think the newspaper needs to be in quotation marks here, as this is not an essay, but dialog. If the word were a different use of a word or one you made up, pointing that out might call for such markings.
Fourth sentences: You've got a COMMA SPLICE joining the first two and next two sentences. (...to read the article(.) (H)e skimmed over it...) THEN "(D)ad, this is great(!) (I)t tells how fathers...
Fifth sentence: COMMA SPLICE ("Thanks(,) son(.) (N)ow you...)
I think these changes will improve the readability of your story. Happy day.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I liked this story for its information and the idea that the son skimmed the article to discover what most don't know. As a story it works well. There are a few SPAG that I'll point out in case you're interested.
First sentence, which is actually two sentences: "(C)an you help me(?) I need to do a report for school on how Father's Day became a holiday(.)"
Second sentence: "(W)ell son, I don't know(,) but I'll find out." I am also questioning the identification of (Dad) at the beginning of the sentence, instead of (The dad).
Third Sentence: I don't think the newspaper needs to be in quotation marks here, as this is not an essay, but dialog. If the word were a different use of a word or one you made up, pointing that out might call for such markings.
Fourth sentences: You've got a COMMA SPLICE joining the first two and next two sentences. (...to read the article(.) (H)e skimmed over it...) THEN "(D)ad, this is great(!) (I)t tells how fathers...
Fifth sentence: COMMA SPLICE ("Thanks(,) son(.) (N)ow you...)
I think these changes will improve the readability of your story. Happy day.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Thanks for your serious review and five stars. I went back in and made changes. Whenever you have time read it again.
Once again thanks. If it is too bad I will hide it.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is an informative and timely piece. It could do with a little bit of an edit, but nothing too much.
"can you help me, I - dialogue should start with a capital letter.
"well son, I don't know - "Well.
"Son," the father said - you don't need the speech tag here as he addresses the son on the dialogue.
"dad, this is great - Dad.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Hi there,
This is an informative and timely piece. It could do with a little bit of an edit, but nothing too much.
"can you help me, I - dialogue should start with a capital letter.
"well son, I don't know - "Well.
"Son," the father said - you don't need the speech tag here as he addresses the son on the dialogue.
"dad, this is great - Dad.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Thanks for your serious review and stars. I went back in and made changes, so when you have time read it again.
If it is still bad I will hide it.
Comment from Dr. Nad
Father's Day is a nice write that takes historical fact and weaves it into a family narrative. I like the little twist you put in where dad does the research concerning his own day. LOL. You have provided all of us insights that we didn't have before. You have schooled us! Thanks a lot for sharing. May God bless you!
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Father's Day is a nice write that takes historical fact and weaves it into a family narrative. I like the little twist you put in where dad does the research concerning his own day. LOL. You have provided all of us insights that we didn't have before. You have schooled us! Thanks a lot for sharing. May God bless you!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Thanks for the five stars and review about the historical fact.
You are most welcome.
Embrace the love from above!
Comment from adewpearl
Virginia, asked his dad - I would drop that comma
asked his dad, "Can you - I added the comma and the capital C
dad, this is great - Dad
make a profit off of this day - profit off this
an interesting look into this holiday with lots of good information
Brooke
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Virginia, asked his dad - I would drop that comma
asked his dad, "Can you - I added the comma and the capital C
dad, this is great - Dad
make a profit off of this day - profit off this
an interesting look into this holiday with lots of good information
Brooke
Comment Written 06-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Thank you for your stars and your comment. I read over it and made some adjustments. Feel free to view it and see the changes.
Comment from Eric1
What a wonderful and inspirational take on the much celebrated Fathers day. there is only one fly in the ointment in this splendid story, the first paragraph doesn't read too well, if you dropped the 'as he was walking closer to him, it would work a treat and raise your already brilliant story even higher, hope you didn't mind me saying.
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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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What a wonderful and inspirational take on the much celebrated Fathers day. there is only one fly in the ointment in this splendid story, the first paragraph doesn't read too well, if you dropped the 'as he was walking closer to him, it would work a treat and raise your already brilliant story even higher, hope you didn't mind me saying.
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Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thanks for the stars and especially the critical, meaning good, review, I will work on that area. I wasn't quite sure
of what I wanted to put there anyway.
