Ernest in the Afternoon
Short story, a paradox16 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
It's a man's world, but the women get all the lousy jobs while the credit goes to the male species. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
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It's a man's world, but the women get all the lousy jobs while the credit goes to the male species. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much for reading and your kind review! irish
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You're welcome, Irish. Charlie
Comment from Ric Myworld
I enjoyed your well written first chapter of "Ernest in the Afternoon." Sharp, smooth, and to the point, you have built believable characters that readers can relate. Great job, and I'll be looking forward to reading part two. :-)
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
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I enjoyed your well written first chapter of "Ernest in the Afternoon." Sharp, smooth, and to the point, you have built believable characters that readers can relate. Great job, and I'll be looking forward to reading part two. :-)
Comment Written 12-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much fro reading and your kind review! I hope the next chapter brings it all together. irish
Comment from Leineco
Thank god for the author's notes! I was thoroughly enjoying both the story and the writing style and felt so let down when it ended (thinking how could this writer write so well and leave it on such a weak conclusion?) I am definitely looking forward to another installment :-)
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
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Thank god for the author's notes! I was thoroughly enjoying both the story and the writing style and felt so let down when it ended (thinking how could this writer write so well and leave it on such a weak conclusion?) I am definitely looking forward to another installment :-)
Comment Written 12-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much for reading, and your kind review! I hope the next chapter brings it all together and gives you a satisfactory conclusion.
irish
Comment from LIJ Red
In the first paragraph I was led to believe her watch was
screeching around corners. Otherwise a pretty good read-I am supposed to dislike that little Natalie twit, right?
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
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In the first paragraph I was led to believe her watch was
screeching around corners. Otherwise a pretty good read-I am supposed to dislike that little Natalie twit, right?
Comment Written 12-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
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Wow, I had better go back and check that first paragraph! Actually, I tried to display Natalie as a complex character whose talent was recognized by Linderman, but was hired by Krejak for her good looks. She proved herself to be a good journalist and was picked for some in-depth interviews. However, she is gaining that cynical reporter outlook, and that qualifies her to be a twit.
Hey, thanks for reading and your in-depth review.
irish
Comment from humpwhistle
Hmm, first post in a very long time, I think, irish.
I'm sorry, but I'm out of sixes (an unusual occurance for me).
You set the stage of a busy, chaotic editorial desk very well. I like all the petty gripes you have going. Germs that I'm sure will blossom as you continue--assuming you will continue.
The idea of a faux Hemingway is very interesting. Especially when you consider that there are still those who consider the original faux.
Glad to see you back on the stick, old man!
Peace, Lee
wishing the announcer an untimely death.
--now that's the attitude I like to hear!
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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
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Hmm, first post in a very long time, I think, irish.
I'm sorry, but I'm out of sixes (an unusual occurance for me).
You set the stage of a busy, chaotic editorial desk very well. I like all the petty gripes you have going. Germs that I'm sure will blossom as you continue--assuming you will continue.
The idea of a faux Hemingway is very interesting. Especially when you consider that there are still those who consider the original faux.
Glad to see you back on the stick, old man!
Peace, Lee
wishing the announcer an untimely death.
--now that's the attitude I like to hear!
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Comment Written 12-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
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Hey there, thanks for reading, and the in-depth review. Got the next chapter ready as soon as time runs out on this one. Yeah, you guessed it, I am a Hemingway junkie! I scrubbed on this one, hope the next chapter brings it all together.
irish
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Looking forward, irish. The way I figure it, I owe you 212 reads. L
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have missed you posting, but I am so glad you posted this post. It's a very good read and told an interesting story. I found only one typo
Natalie shut the machine off. "What an arrogant bastard," she thought, ""had to one-up Hemingway!" (extra quotation mark.)
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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
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I have missed you posting, but I am so glad you posted this post. It's a very good read and told an interesting story. I found only one typo
Natalie shut the machine off. "What an arrogant bastard," she thought, ""had to one-up Hemingway!" (extra quotation mark.)
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Comment Written 12-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2014
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Thank you Barbara, I am finally back on screen, and I have a lot of catching up to do! Thanks for catching that nit, and your in-depth review. Hope you enjoy the next(and last) chapter.
irish
