Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from c_lucas
Sometimes all the dirt doesn't come out of the family wash. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Sometimes all the dirt doesn't come out of the family wash. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Well said, Charlie. Thanks for the great review and your continued support. :) Bev
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You're welcome, Bev. Charlie
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Comment from chasennov
"Witko Moon" This is another excellent chapter in your ongoing saga; 'Along The Jericho Road.' I have been following this story for quite a while now. With time constraints I hope I have not missed too much. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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"Witko Moon" This is another excellent chapter in your ongoing saga; 'Along The Jericho Road.' I have been following this story for quite a while now. With time constraints I hope I have not missed too much. Well done.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, C. I do appreciate your continued interest and support for the story. Your generosity and support mean a lot to me. :) Bev
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You are always most welcome, Bev.
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Comment from CR Delport
They are both determined to get to Pearce first, but for different reason. That was quite a tense situation that you described very well. Another very well written chapter. I didn't spot any errors.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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They are both determined to get to Pearce first, but for different reason. That was quite a tense situation that you described very well. Another very well written chapter. I didn't spot any errors.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Hi, CR. Thanks for being specific about what you liked in the chapter. That really helps to know what resonates with readers. Much appreciated! :) Bev
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the gaps in rick's story leads jana to suspect that rick is the traitor.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the gaps in rick's story leads jana to suspect that rick is the traitor.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, sweet. I do appreciate your time and support. :) Bev
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Another excellent chapter, Bev. Tuning into this story about a year ago, I have not had lots of exposure to Matthew Buell. He doesn't seem to be that bad of a guy. Am I reading that incorrectly? You can understand he wants justice and even revenge. But at least he tried to help at the accident scene.
You've thickened the plot very nicely too. I was shocked by Rick Morales. All these different people are converging, making for one hell of a climax to this story.
You are the mistress of suspense, Bev; a natural with this type of genre. Poor Father Brian. I can't believe the inner strength he will need for the upcoming battle with the devil. Makes me shudder!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Another excellent chapter, Bev. Tuning into this story about a year ago, I have not had lots of exposure to Matthew Buell. He doesn't seem to be that bad of a guy. Am I reading that incorrectly? You can understand he wants justice and even revenge. But at least he tried to help at the accident scene.
You've thickened the plot very nicely too. I was shocked by Rick Morales. All these different people are converging, making for one hell of a climax to this story.
You are the mistress of suspense, Bev; a natural with this type of genre. Poor Father Brian. I can't believe the inner strength he will need for the upcoming battle with the devil. Makes me shudder!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Hi, Marietta. Thanks for the grand review! I agree with you -- Matthew is very human in his need to see that his father's death is vindicated. The department mole is another one of those loose ends that needed 'cleaning up'. I've written Rick to be a nice guy too, just overly jealous and, as it will be revealed, in over his head.
Much appreciate your generosity and encouragement, my friend.
:) Bev
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Wow. I just sit patiently waiting for your pen to hit the paper again!
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Aw, that's sweet, buddy. :)
Comment from Jay Squires
"Rick," Jana asked, "how'd you know I needed help?" [And, more to the point, where did he come from? I thought there were only the four of them, and it seems as though someone would have seen his approach.]
This has a certain authenticity to it in the way they do police-speak over the phone. This of course is due to your experience as a writer, Bev.
I just have problems with Rick's sudden appearance.
Good chapter.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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"Rick," Jana asked, "how'd you know I needed help?" [And, more to the point, where did he come from? I thought there were only the four of them, and it seems as though someone would have seen his approach.]
This has a certain authenticity to it in the way they do police-speak over the phone. This of course is due to your experience as a writer, Bev.
I just have problems with Rick's sudden appearance.
Good chapter.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Jay. Remember they were down off the road and involved in an altercation. And Rick had good reason to arrive without a fuss. Still, I'll take a look and see if that can be clarified. :) Bev
Comment from Dawn Munro
Sheesh, Bev, this just gets better and better!!! And I ran out of sixes by Sunday evening because I have been doing a lot of reviewing! I HATE that I haven't got one for this! Hell, even the lingo is SO PERFECT!!! (e.g. - "Affirmative") You've covered the smallest detail!
I'm telling you, this has bestseller written all over it!!!
************************OUTSTANDING!!!*********************
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Sheesh, Bev, this just gets better and better!!! And I ran out of sixes by Sunday evening because I have been doing a lot of reviewing! I HATE that I haven't got one for this! Hell, even the lingo is SO PERFECT!!! (e.g. - "Affirmative") You've covered the smallest detail!
I'm telling you, this has bestseller written all over it!!!
************************OUTSTANDING!!!*********************
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Your wish for a six is enough for me, Dawn. I know what you mean about them... I run out very quickly, too. Just knowing you enjoyed this chapter is enough for me. Thank you so much for the support and encouragement, my dear friend.
Hugs, Bev
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I just sent you a PM - I WANT THIS BOOK! I am buying it the minute it's published!
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Aw, shucks. xxxxxxxxxxxx Bev
Comment from boxergirl
The tension is building up in this one, especially now that Jana has some doubts about Rick and his statement to her. It will be interesting to see what happens with Tony.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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The tension is building up in this one, especially now that Jana has some doubts about Rick and his statement to her. It will be interesting to see what happens with Tony.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, BG. I sure appreciate your continue support. More on Tony coming up! :) Bev
Comment from Hareem.S
No person how strong morals one has, during had times they can be shaken up really bad. People with supposedly high moral ground can also commit mistakes sometimes. Enjoyed it much.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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No person how strong morals one has, during had times they can be shaken up really bad. People with supposedly high moral ground can also commit mistakes sometimes. Enjoyed it much.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Hareem. I appreciate the sharing of your insights, and I agree with you completely. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from judiverse
This is great, and such an unusual story. The patrol car that Jana is driving appears to levitate and winds up in a field, and a sword appears in the sky. Matthew goes to assist Jana, but he is mostly obstructive. His story is that Jana was driving too fast. Father Brian appears to be uninjured. Jana wants to use Matthew's car, but that doesn't go over well either. All the complications help make the story exciting. They know Tony's at the hunting lodge. Interesting detail about FBI having jurisdiction over crimes on a reservation. Another complication is that Jana is beginning to believe Rick might be the traitor in the department. A lot of issues to sort through. Definitely 6 star entertainment. judi
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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This is great, and such an unusual story. The patrol car that Jana is driving appears to levitate and winds up in a field, and a sword appears in the sky. Matthew goes to assist Jana, but he is mostly obstructive. His story is that Jana was driving too fast. Father Brian appears to be uninjured. Jana wants to use Matthew's car, but that doesn't go over well either. All the complications help make the story exciting. They know Tony's at the hunting lodge. Interesting detail about FBI having jurisdiction over crimes on a reservation. Another complication is that Jana is beginning to believe Rick might be the traitor in the department. A lot of issues to sort through. Definitely 6 star entertainment. judi
Comment Written 09-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Hi, Judi. Thank you my faithful FanFriend for yet another wonderful review. I'm so glad you are finding the story entertaining. That's means a lot to me. And the situation with Rick... well someone has to be sacrificed LoL. So appreciated, Judi. :) Bev
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You're so welcome. judi
