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Comment from Spitfire
Very clever. Two characters well-defined by the dialogue. One's obsessed with details about her cleaning habits. The other, a wimp who can't just barge in. No one builds houses anymore with only one bathroom. LOL
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Very clever. Two characters well-defined by the dialogue. One's obsessed with details about her cleaning habits. The other, a wimp who can't just barge in. No one builds houses anymore with only one bathroom. LOL
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from kiwijenny
Ha ha ha ha .........so true......................
Two sinks ....you have solved the problems of men and women .......
So succinct ....I meant sucsink-t
Well done
God bless
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Ha ha ha ha .........so true......................
Two sinks ....you have solved the problems of men and women .......
So succinct ....I meant sucsink-t
Well done
God bless
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Jenny, for the excellent review.
Comment from royowen
What a wonderful, provocative thought you have conjured up in this short story entry! It could be considered as a parody of a much vaunted bathroom scene! This is very well written! Expressive and articulate! Very clever! Good luck in the contest! Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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What a wonderful, provocative thought you have conjured up in this short story entry! It could be considered as a parody of a much vaunted bathroom scene! This is very well written! Expressive and articulate! Very clever! Good luck in the contest! Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Roy, for the excellent review.
Comment from mbagby23
That's cute funny. It's hard having one bathroom at times. I share with my husband and son. Sometimes my son is in four about an hour getting ready for school. I wondering he just a young guy what on earth is taking so long.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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That's cute funny. It's hard having one bathroom at times. I share with my husband and son. Sometimes my son is in four about an hour getting ready for school. I wondering he just a young guy what on earth is taking so long.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from missjosi
Lovely little story summed up neatly in 100 words here... rather amusing actually... I wish you the best of luck in the competition... Kindest Regards :)
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Lovely little story summed up neatly in 100 words here... rather amusing actually... I wish you the best of luck in the competition... Kindest Regards :)
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Josi, for the excellent review.
Comment from Muffins
An engaging tender piece that should teach men a lesson about how important a woman's appearance is to her. That's why a second bathroom should be a requirement where ever a man and a woman are sharing living quarters. Nice piece of work.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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An engaging tender piece that should teach men a lesson about how important a woman's appearance is to her. That's why a second bathroom should be a requirement where ever a man and a woman are sharing living quarters. Nice piece of work.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Muffins, for the excellent review.
Comment from adewpearl
good use of dialogue-only format
Love the detail of her grooming process
What a great way to motivate one's husband to do a home renovation :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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good use of dialogue-only format
Love the detail of her grooming process
What a great way to motivate one's husband to do a home renovation :-) Brooke
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Brooke, for the encouraging review.
Comment from RodG
I love this dialog. Even though you have exaggerated her rite d' tooth brush, I can almost believe SHE could be real. And the fact that SHE gets the last word(s) is priceless!
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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I love this dialog. Even though you have exaggerated her rite d' tooth brush, I can almost believe SHE could be real. And the fact that SHE gets the last word(s) is priceless!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thank you, Rod, for the encouraging review.
Comment from Capricorn30
Oh my goodness-I can very well relate to your well-penned prose--my old house has one bathroom also, and it can be aggravating, especially when we have guests.
One must need great patience when only one bathroom is available!
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Oh my goodness-I can very well relate to your well-penned prose--my old house has one bathroom also, and it can be aggravating, especially when we have guests.
One must need great patience when only one bathroom is available!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review, Cap.
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Sure. You're welcome.
Comment from lancellot
Nicely done. Perfect on the word count and presentation. I think many couples will relate to this short tale. how many times have wives wished for a 2nd bathroom.
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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Nicely done. Perfect on the word count and presentation. I think many couples will relate to this short tale. how many times have wives wished for a 2nd bathroom.
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Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Thank you for the excellent review.
