The Old Quarry
A secret healing place48 total reviews
Comment from chicken scratch love
What a wonderful and calming vision that this piece paints! Very beautiful word choices and though a specific rhyme scheme was never quite established, it did no harm to the flow at all. Thanks for the share!
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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What a wonderful and calming vision that this piece paints! Very beautiful word choices and though a specific rhyme scheme was never quite established, it did no harm to the flow at all. Thanks for the share!
Comment Written 20-May-2014
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Many thanks for your review and observations, CSL. I appreciate them! The rhyme scheme was ABABABCC in both stanzas and the rhythm was iambic pentameter.
Comment from c_lucas
Any old home or building will have a history. Some positive, other negative. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Any old home or building will have a history. Some positive, other negative. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 20-May-2014
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Many thanks, Charlie. It is a beautiful place and we are in the midst of restoring it at the moment - an activity leading to much scavenging for stone at the edge of the old quarry!
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You're welcome, Tony. Charlie
Comment from Nosha17
Sounds like an absolutely lovely place, I love stone houses, so pretty and long standing. We have an abundance in the UK and they never look any older. Your choice of words to describe this lovely place is excellent. They really paint a picture of rural bliss. The rhymes worked really well and it had a smooth flow. The preponderance of wildlife is nice. Most enjoyable. Faye
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Sounds like an absolutely lovely place, I love stone houses, so pretty and long standing. We have an abundance in the UK and they never look any older. Your choice of words to describe this lovely place is excellent. They really paint a picture of rural bliss. The rhymes worked really well and it had a smooth flow. The preponderance of wildlife is nice. Most enjoyable. Faye
Comment Written 20-May-2014
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Many thanks, Faye. It is a beautiful place and we are in the midst of restoring it at the moment - an activity leading to much scavenging for stone at the edge of the old quarry!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
What a beautiful read - and biographical as I read your really interesting author notes. Some great use of metaphor - 'its guts torn from the belly of the hill' - very good. In your last stanza line 4 - maybe 'the gloom' as 'that gloom that grips' does not roll easily off the tongue. Just a thought on what is a truly lovely poem. The best read I've had this morning. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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What a beautiful read - and biographical as I read your really interesting author notes. Some great use of metaphor - 'its guts torn from the belly of the hill' - very good. In your last stanza line 4 - maybe 'the gloom' as 'that gloom that grips' does not roll easily off the tongue. Just a thought on what is a truly lovely poem. The best read I've had this morning. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 20-May-2014
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Many thanks, Dorothy, both for your review and for the six stars. Much appreciated! It is a beautiful place and we are in the midst of restoring it at the moment - an activity leading to much scavenging for stone at the edge of the old quarry! I'll think about 'the gloom'. I put 'that gloom' for emphasis, but you are right about the rough edge it gives.
Comment from Pili Pubul
You live in paradise !!! I have seen in Spain houses made of stone
Crafted in such way not cement required, probably learned from the Romans . Your poem is extraordinary, you paint to perfection the marvelous images of the place with such elegant mastery of the language.
I delighted myself reading it. Thank you. Pili
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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You live in paradise !!! I have seen in Spain houses made of stone
Crafted in such way not cement required, probably learned from the Romans . Your poem is extraordinary, you paint to perfection the marvelous images of the place with such elegant mastery of the language.
I delighted myself reading it. Thank you. Pili
Comment Written 20-May-2014
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Many thanks, Pili. It is a beautiful place and we are in the midst of restoring it at the moment - an activity leading to much scavenging for stone at the edge of the old quarry!
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You are very welcome... Enjoy ! Pili
Comment from kiwijenny
Tony this deserves a six...I love the images ...four square and aloof
Stone-girt pool holds deep and ancient thoughts.....beautiful
I love your description of nature healing the quarry.
I want to
Lose myself in
The landscape
Some hundred years
After gold mines'
Land-rape
Nature clothes
With fern fronds
Man-scape
From greed scars
Nature helps us
Escape
I wrote this seeing after seeing Waihi gold mine scars ..:o)
God bless.i LOVE this poem
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reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Tony this deserves a six...I love the images ...four square and aloof
Stone-girt pool holds deep and ancient thoughts.....beautiful
I love your description of nature healing the quarry.
I want to
Lose myself in
The landscape
Some hundred years
After gold mines'
Land-rape
Nature clothes
With fern fronds
Man-scape
From greed scars
Nature helps us
Escape
I wrote this seeing after seeing Waihi gold mine scars ..:o)
God bless.i LOVE this poem
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-May-2014
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Many thanks, Jenny. It is a beautiful place and we are in the midst of restoring it at the moment - an activity leading to much scavenging for stone at the edge of the old quarry! You are right about the ugly scars that miners leave on the landscape. I enjoyed your poem about the 'land-rape' - thanks for sharing it.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Very creative. Your poem has wonderful descriptions and you do a great job of painting a scene. I like the use of rhyme as well. The word choices were so natural.
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reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Very creative. Your poem has wonderful descriptions and you do a great job of painting a scene. I like the use of rhyme as well. The word choices were so natural.
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Comment Written 20-May-2014
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Many thanks, Michael. It is a beautiful place and we are in the midst of restoring it at the moment - an activity leading to much scavenging for stone at the edge of the old quarry!
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
I love the personification of the house, and the first stanza is captivating. The second stanza opens it up, house, and reminisce. I particularly like the 'salve of green' and the small birds 'still' and wary. The third stanza offers us praise of the house and its surroundings and a usefulness beyond the visual. I like the language. Kenny
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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I love the personification of the house, and the first stanza is captivating. The second stanza opens it up, house, and reminisce. I particularly like the 'salve of green' and the small birds 'still' and wary. The third stanza offers us praise of the house and its surroundings and a usefulness beyond the visual. I like the language. Kenny
Comment Written 20-May-2014
reply by the author on 22-May-2014
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Many thanks, Kenny, for your review and comments and for the six stars. Brooklands is a beautiful place and we are in the midst of restoring the original farmhouse at the moment - an activity leading to much scavenging for stone at the edge of the old quarry!
