Dark Embrace
It's so good21 total reviews
Comment from VMR39
I really enjoyed your story and perspective. No matter how strong Eva was I felt that Emmitt was safe and would not be harmed. Really enjoyed.
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I really enjoyed your story and perspective. No matter how strong Eva was I felt that Emmitt was safe and would not be harmed. Really enjoyed.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2015
Comment from jmdg1954
Sea like you nailed sex with a female vampire very well. It wasn't long before I didn't feel sorry for Emmett any longer.
You have s good entry into the contest. Best of luck. John
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Sea like you nailed sex with a female vampire very well. It wasn't long before I didn't feel sorry for Emmett any longer.
You have s good entry into the contest. Best of luck. John
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Green Lake Girl
You're probably safer sticking with humans! Or should I say, sticking humans? :D
An unusual erotica story. The interspersed artwork is a unique touch. Nicely penned!
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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You're probably safer sticking with humans! Or should I say, sticking humans? :D
An unusual erotica story. The interspersed artwork is a unique touch. Nicely penned!
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Tonulak
"I thought the concept and approach to this prompt was very creative. It skirted the lines of graphic language very well. I saw two minor spags:
"Eva flashed her blues at him...", wasn't clear to me until I read it again, perhaps I'd embelish that, though you mention the blue eyes a dozen times.
"his attention back to woman standing over him", add "the"
Storywise, I thought the whole girlfriend/let's give this a try conversation after the sex was a little too "Frankie and Anette" in comparison to the sinister aspect of the story. But, by and large the writing was good. Best of luck in the contest--Ted
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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"I thought the concept and approach to this prompt was very creative. It skirted the lines of graphic language very well. I saw two minor spags:
"Eva flashed her blues at him...", wasn't clear to me until I read it again, perhaps I'd embelish that, though you mention the blue eyes a dozen times.
"his attention back to woman standing over him", add "the"
Storywise, I thought the whole girlfriend/let's give this a try conversation after the sex was a little too "Frankie and Anette" in comparison to the sinister aspect of the story. But, by and large the writing was good. Best of luck in the contest--Ted
Comment Written 14-May-2014
reply by the author on 15-May-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from michaelcahill
This was an amazing suspenseful tale. Quite believable within the context and so perfectly written. I can't imagine anyone approaching this. Excellent, mikey
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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This was an amazing suspenseful tale. Quite believable within the context and so perfectly written. I can't imagine anyone approaching this. Excellent, mikey
Comment Written 14-May-2014
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Thank you very much. There many good entries in this contest. It's going to a lot of fun.
Comment from GWinterwin
Good story that kept the reader interested all the way to the end. Sensuous and yet scary. Good words to describe the encounter with your vampire lover.
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Good story that kept the reader interested all the way to the end. Sensuous and yet scary. Good words to describe the encounter with your vampire lover.
Comment Written 14-May-2014
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Thank you very much
Comment from Zue65
Well this is a different kind of romance, kinky and frightening not meant for most humans anyway. This is fiction right and writers are given the freedom to write as they please and create stories to satisfy their flights of fancy and this one was your kind of release I guess.
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Well this is a different kind of romance, kinky and frightening not meant for most humans anyway. This is fiction right and writers are given the freedom to write as they please and create stories to satisfy their flights of fancy and this one was your kind of release I guess.
Comment Written 13-May-2014
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Thank you very much
Comment from a.w.brooks
Man O man I loved the story, One of my favorites is Vampires and Werewolf, and this story went the way I wanted it to. I know this will be a best it is awesome, and I see a great book from this. Well happy writing and loved the read.
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Man O man I loved the story, One of my favorites is Vampires and Werewolf, and this story went the way I wanted it to. I know this will be a best it is awesome, and I see a great book from this. Well happy writing and loved the read.
Comment Written 13-May-2014
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Thank you very much
Comment from ravenblack
Lots of sizzle to this steak and I am glad that you did not follow the traditional vampire route with a stake to the heart or the death of the dude who is drained, just not of scarlet from the neck. Vampire sex, trying to rekindle warmth, life from orgasm....do you have her phone number? Excellent write both sensual and original.
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Lots of sizzle to this steak and I am glad that you did not follow the traditional vampire route with a stake to the heart or the death of the dude who is drained, just not of scarlet from the neck. Vampire sex, trying to rekindle warmth, life from orgasm....do you have her phone number? Excellent write both sensual and original.
Comment Written 13-May-2014
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Thank you very much
Comment from Twilightspire
Whoa! That definitely takes the cake for one of the better vampire stories I've ever read. You didn't go into a fantastic, never-ending description of how vampires operate, which I'm thankful for. You took the myth and made it your own, while staying true to a lot of the existing lore out there.
Your descriptions were blissfully amazing in this piece. You truly transported us to that room and let us...er...slide into Emmit's POV perfectly.
Excellent work, my friend.
-T.J.
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Whoa! That definitely takes the cake for one of the better vampire stories I've ever read. You didn't go into a fantastic, never-ending description of how vampires operate, which I'm thankful for. You took the myth and made it your own, while staying true to a lot of the existing lore out there.
Your descriptions were blissfully amazing in this piece. You truly transported us to that room and let us...er...slide into Emmit's POV perfectly.
Excellent work, my friend.
-T.J.
Comment Written 12-May-2014
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Thank you very much, T.J. I had been working on this for awhile. It was my 2nd choice for this contest.
