Little Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 152 "Child's Play"Small and Specialty Poems
10 total reviews
Comment from lakeport
Chields play, indeed we did not have such fun play equipment
like the children have now a days. that's a heartfelt expressed poem,I enjoyed reading it,God bless you.lakeport.
reply by the author on 10-May-2014
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Chields play, indeed we did not have such fun play equipment
like the children have now a days. that's a heartfelt expressed poem,I enjoyed reading it,God bless you.lakeport.
Comment Written 10-May-2014
reply by the author on 10-May-2014
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Thank you Lakeport. Indeed, it's much fancier now.
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your welcome,Lakeport.
Comment from Joan E.
Let your inner child free and explore the monkey bars! I especially liked the play on "money superstars". Thanks for teaching us another fascinating form and an energized snapshot. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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Let your inner child free and explore the monkey bars! I especially liked the play on "money superstars". Thanks for teaching us another fascinating form and an energized snapshot. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 08-May-2014
reply by the author on 09-May-2014
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Thank you Joan. Monkey bars and monkey business. Little kids certainly are similar.
Comment from Green Lake Girl
True confessions: I indulge in the swings on playgrounds! Of course, I have to push a kid out of the way, but so what?
Seriously, great poem. I love your phrase, "monkey superstars." Reading this felt like a brush with spring.
reply by the author on 08-May-2014
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True confessions: I indulge in the swings on playgrounds! Of course, I have to push a kid out of the way, but so what?
Seriously, great poem. I love your phrase, "monkey superstars." Reading this felt like a brush with spring.
Comment Written 08-May-2014
reply by the author on 08-May-2014
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Thank you Marrietta. Sounds delightful.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Trieschel,
"Child's Play" is an excellent hultan poem following the form you indicated for the genre. It has excellent rhyme and meter and and structure. There two comments that I could make. Item is the fourth line of the second stanza is a rather pedestrian word not up to the standards of the rest of the poem. In the sixth line of that stanza I believe that indulges to be parallel with casts would be better choice than indulge.
Preston
reply by the author on 08-May-2014
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Hi, Trieschel,
"Child's Play" is an excellent hultan poem following the form you indicated for the genre. It has excellent rhyme and meter and and structure. There two comments that I could make. Item is the fourth line of the second stanza is a rather pedestrian word not up to the standards of the rest of the poem. In the sixth line of that stanza I believe that indulges to be parallel with casts would be better choice than indulge.
Preston
Comment Written 07-May-2014
reply by the author on 08-May-2014
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Thank you Preston.
Comment from rod007
This is a well thought out poem but perhaps you should not resist your urges. It would be actually healthy to be a little kid again.So do it, go play in that playground with the kids. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 08-May-2014
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This is a well thought out poem but perhaps you should not resist your urges. It would be actually healthy to be a little kid again.So do it, go play in that playground with the kids. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 07-May-2014
reply by the author on 08-May-2014
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Thank you rod. Good advice.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A clever and well written Huitan poem and thoughtful subject choice. To watch children at play is such a joy and reminds us of how simple our lives once were. Usually.
Wouldn't it be lovely to have the flexibility and dexterity to run, climb
And play. The energy and creativity to create and above a ll to have every scrape and dent in life made better with a hug and kiss and... maybe a band-aid.
reply by the author on 06-May-2014
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A clever and well written Huitan poem and thoughtful subject choice. To watch children at play is such a joy and reminds us of how simple our lives once were. Usually.
Wouldn't it be lovely to have the flexibility and dexterity to run, climb
And play. The energy and creativity to create and above a ll to have every scrape and dent in life made better with a hug and kiss and... maybe a band-aid.
Comment Written 06-May-2014
reply by the author on 06-May-2014
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Thank you Shirley. Yes, it sure would.
Comment from wordsmatter2me
I like that I am learning about this poetic style. I took my time to recognize the ababccbc in each line. I like that the thoughts of being a child again resonates in how you value children playing.
reply by the author on 06-May-2014
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I like that I am learning about this poetic style. I took my time to recognize the ababccbc in each line. I like that the thoughts of being a child again resonates in how you value children playing.
Comment Written 06-May-2014
reply by the author on 06-May-2014
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Thank you wordsmatter2me. For a wonderful review.
Comment from Angel Debbie
O to be young once more
With no care in the world.no bills to pay or food to buy.
What a dream to have.
Beautiful write but I'm not sure I want to live life over again from what I know now. Take care
reply by the author on 06-May-2014
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O to be young once more
With no care in the world.no bills to pay or food to buy.
What a dream to have.
Beautiful write but I'm not sure I want to live life over again from what I know now. Take care
Comment Written 06-May-2014
reply by the author on 06-May-2014
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Thank you Angel Debbie. Good point.
Comment from NicciFaye
I think that watching children play is the most relaxing and funny thing an adult could do...it draws one in to act childish...even if for a moment. Excellent poem.
reply by the author on 06-May-2014
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I think that watching children play is the most relaxing and funny thing an adult could do...it draws one in to act childish...even if for a moment. Excellent poem.
Comment Written 06-May-2014
reply by the author on 06-May-2014
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Thank you Nicci.
Comment from Kingsland
There's nothing wrong with joining in with children at play. This was an excellent piece of poetic art that really has a voice of where we all were at one time, and a place where we all would like to return to for awhile... John
reply by the author on 06-May-2014
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There's nothing wrong with joining in with children at play. This was an excellent piece of poetic art that really has a voice of where we all were at one time, and a place where we all would like to return to for awhile... John
Comment Written 06-May-2014
reply by the author on 06-May-2014
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Thank you John. That is so true.
