From out of the Grayness
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Bloods Rain"Reaching from the gray areas to understand life
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Comment from TOMORAL
Absolutely beautiful in form and content. I do believe we leave the pain, but remember the love. I think these big pictures overshadow the writing, but it is a stunning one none the less.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Absolutely beautiful in form and content. I do believe we leave the pain, but remember the love. I think these big pictures overshadow the writing, but it is a stunning one none the less.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much TOMORAL...I really appreciate the meaningful comments and generous six stars....blessings! Vance
Comment from royowen
I love this beautiful, articulately written poem Vance, i remember God's words, they resonate in my head, " I will never leave you or forsake you." Hebrews 13:5! I love this descriptively well written poem, it flows well off the pen! Well done, blessings Roy.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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I love this beautiful, articulately written poem Vance, i remember God's words, they resonate in my head, " I will never leave you or forsake you." Hebrews 13:5! I love this descriptively well written poem, it flows well off the pen! Well done, blessings Roy.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Dear Roy: thank you so much for your wonderful review and I'm deeply grateful for the six star rating! Blessings to you dear friend~!
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You're welcome Vance, Roy.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Vance,
I consider "Bloods Rain" to be exceptional free style poetry. It has excellent internal rhyme, good flow, and good figurative language and imagery (cut through sinew, skin and bone.Its structure is uconventional and visually pleasing.
Preston
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Hi, Vance,
I consider "Bloods Rain" to be exceptional free style poetry. It has excellent internal rhyme, good flow, and good figurative language and imagery (cut through sinew, skin and bone.Its structure is uconventional and visually pleasing.
Preston
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much Preston...I am truly honored and grateful for your meaningful review and very generous rating. All the best! Vance
Comment from reconciled
there are many times I cry out to God inside my head....if something is very important to me...ahh if I'm nervous about impression or physical harm....I ask Him to be with me....in my head...when something really good comes my way...I thank Him...inside my head....three times I remember audibly crying out in ....in anger.....brought on by fear....first I was a boy...Chacholic school...pretty had me scared to death of him...but nothing scared me more than the monster in my closet...if I kept the light on....everything was fine...thing hated the light.....one night the light went out....and ahh...man he was on mark buddy...hungry....closet door started to slowly open...and I was getting a lil' emotional at this point....sprung up out of that bed like an olypian pulvulter...I kept switching that light....and ..nothing...I have this thing...where my right ear twitches...if somebody is sneaking up on me...and that sucker was humming....I ahh...had just about enough....and this idea came to me...check the plug.....well...the monster was out now...O two maybe three steps from my back end.....and well I wasn't going out like that Pop....in a burst of ..ahh...rage....I reached for the plug...I could feel his hot breath on my back at this point ...my ear had twitched into a pretzel....but I couldn't reach it...all I needed was some light for God's sake....just a lil' light...I was ...I was out of it man....I screamed loud enough for the neihbors to turn their lights on...thank God....I screamed..." If the lights don't go on this time there is no God!"...........and bam....bright white beautiful light everywhere brother....I forgot all about that monster.... -smile-...though this is funny now....it was serious for a lil' kid.....for me it was Him confirming Himself....aint that funny...-smile- great read Pop....love you Michael
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there are many times I cry out to God inside my head....if something is very important to me...ahh if I'm nervous about impression or physical harm....I ask Him to be with me....in my head...when something really good comes my way...I thank Him...inside my head....three times I remember audibly crying out in ....in anger.....brought on by fear....first I was a boy...Chacholic school...pretty had me scared to death of him...but nothing scared me more than the monster in my closet...if I kept the light on....everything was fine...thing hated the light.....one night the light went out....and ahh...man he was on mark buddy...hungry....closet door started to slowly open...and I was getting a lil' emotional at this point....sprung up out of that bed like an olypian pulvulter...I kept switching that light....and ..nothing...I have this thing...where my right ear twitches...if somebody is sneaking up on me...and that sucker was humming....I ahh...had just about enough....and this idea came to me...check the plug.....well...the monster was out now...O two maybe three steps from my back end.....and well I wasn't going out like that Pop....in a burst of ..ahh...rage....I reached for the plug...I could feel his hot breath on my back at this point ...my ear had twitched into a pretzel....but I couldn't reach it...all I needed was some light for God's sake....just a lil' light...I was ...I was out of it man....I screamed loud enough for the neihbors to turn their lights on...thank God....I screamed..." If the lights don't go on this time there is no God!"...........and bam....bright white beautiful light everywhere brother....I forgot all about that monster.... -smile-...though this is funny now....it was serious for a lil' kid.....for me it was Him confirming Himself....aint that funny...-smile- great read Pop....love you Michael
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Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Wow Michael....that's quite a story and YES indeed, there is no doubt that the "continuity" of God's presence is always light even when you close your eyes....His twinkle is still there winking at you to make you smile. Blessings to you....Pops
Comment from tbacha58
Now as the battle dims and fades
The dryness of solitude clings.
Hi Vance, your poem made my blood cold, such a deep poem coming from you Vance, It made me think, and think, you are so sad here, your rhyming even gave it more exclamation marks. You write only what you feel, and I pray to God you are ok. What an amazing writer you are Vance, you allow the reader to notice how impeccable are your phrases, the meaning of this questionable poem from where did it come from. I would answer, from your soul. Much Love Terry xoxoxo
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Now as the battle dims and fades
The dryness of solitude clings.
Hi Vance, your poem made my blood cold, such a deep poem coming from you Vance, It made me think, and think, you are so sad here, your rhyming even gave it more exclamation marks. You write only what you feel, and I pray to God you are ok. What an amazing writer you are Vance, you allow the reader to notice how impeccable are your phrases, the meaning of this questionable poem from where did it come from. I would answer, from your soul. Much Love Terry xoxoxo
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Dearest Terry: just so you know, I found this in old papers from 1997 and edited it just a bit but I seem compelled for some reason to write about GOD's presence and recognition of Him through the always loving LIGHT. I'm ok dear, just some rough times right now but one thing for sure, "THINGS ALWAYS CHANGE" and being GRATEFUL for what is RIGHT NOW is the only way to bear life's lessons. Love and Hugs and deep thanks for your words! Vance
Comment from GracieAnn
Vance, this is powerfully original with a creative way to present mighty truths about God and the spiritual warfare that we constantly engage in. Interesting rhyme and meter. Well done! :0 GracieAnn
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reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Vance, this is powerfully original with a creative way to present mighty truths about God and the spiritual warfare that we constantly engage in. Interesting rhyme and meter. Well done! :0 GracieAnn
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Comment Written 28-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much GracieAnn....your feedback is very.much appreciated as always....Vance
