From out of the Grayness
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Bloods Rain"Reaching from the gray areas to understand life
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Comment from 9999pool
What will happen today if it started raining blood from the skies?
The devils and the demons are at work again.
Fear can make us see many things in red and we can get lost in a world of temptations and evil deeds.
Those who fan fear have more fear than others.
Keep calm and watch out for that evil touch in us, smiles.
Good write.
Cheerio, best, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 07-May-2014
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What will happen today if it started raining blood from the skies?
The devils and the demons are at work again.
Fear can make us see many things in red and we can get lost in a world of temptations and evil deeds.
Those who fan fear have more fear than others.
Keep calm and watch out for that evil touch in us, smiles.
Good write.
Cheerio, best, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 07-May-2014
reply by the author on 07-May-2014
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Dear Ritchie: thanks for the encouraging review and insightful commentary. All the best! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
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Smiles. :))
Comment from JavaJunkie
I think your message rings true...you use good imagery to illustrate your point.
Suggest putting a comma in this line-God's warriors marched sung forth by drums.
Love this line: The dryness of solitude clings.
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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I think your message rings true...you use good imagery to illustrate your point.
Suggest putting a comma in this line-God's warriors marched sung forth by drums.
Love this line: The dryness of solitude clings.
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Thank you JavaJunkie for your kind review and good tip on the comma, Thanks! Vance
Comment from Tatarka2
This was a very powerful poem. I especially liked the use of rhyme, which helped the poem flow lyrically and added to the power of the message. I think this will be inspirational for many. Very well done.
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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This was a very powerful poem. I especially liked the use of rhyme, which helped the poem flow lyrically and added to the power of the message. I think this will be inspirational for many. Very well done.
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Dear Tatarka2: thank you for your kind review and glad to see you back again! Vance
Comment from LIJ Red
The look of spilled gore and rampant savagery, and the
drums and the bugles call and the old doc whispers "For every action there is an equal and opposite reaction-"
I'm impressed.
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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The look of spilled gore and rampant savagery, and the
drums and the bugles call and the old doc whispers "For every action there is an equal and opposite reaction-"
I'm impressed.
Comment Written 04-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Dear LIJ Red: Thanks for the kind review and glad you were impress and hope to see you again soon! Vance
Comment from Spitfire
What did Hitler and other dictators use to control the masses? FEAR , not LOVE. Created is right. God's warriors in time overcame the enemy, but it's always a battle between good and evil. A gripping poem, Vance.
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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What did Hitler and other dictators use to control the masses? FEAR , not LOVE. Created is right. God's warriors in time overcame the enemy, but it's always a battle between good and evil. A gripping poem, Vance.
Comment Written 03-May-2014
reply by the author on 04-May-2014
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Thank you so much dear one for this lovely review! Always a delight to hear from you...Vance
Comment from Selina Stambi
Dear Vance,
The message in your poem is as powerful as any sermon. The scriptural imagery is vivid and reassuring.
The only soldiers ... yes, the army of Jehovah Sabaoth - Lord God of Hosts!
soaked by fear's blood rains .. this is a potent phrase.
Have a wonderful weekend, your greyness, sir!
Sonali :)
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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Dear Vance,
The message in your poem is as powerful as any sermon. The scriptural imagery is vivid and reassuring.
The only soldiers ... yes, the army of Jehovah Sabaoth - Lord God of Hosts!
soaked by fear's blood rains .. this is a potent phrase.
Have a wonderful weekend, your greyness, sir!
Sonali :)
Comment Written 03-May-2014
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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Dear Sonali: thank you sincerely for this lovely review and blessings to you dear friend! Vance
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abcb rhyming with a strong closing couplet
excellent use of enjambment
nice alliteration in phrases like silent steps
and skin, sinew
intense emotion created by strong word choices
Brooke
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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solid use of abcb rhyming with a strong closing couplet
excellent use of enjambment
nice alliteration in phrases like silent steps
and skin, sinew
intense emotion created by strong word choices
Brooke
Comment Written 03-May-2014
reply by the author on 03-May-2014
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Thank you sincerely Brooke for your always rich and meaningful reviews. Kind regards, Vance
Comment from mmayen
Dear poet,
this is a good poem. The organisation is neat. The rhyme scheme is subtle but noticeable. Love can make all things whole.
reply by the author on 02-May-2014
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Dear poet,
this is a good poem. The organisation is neat. The rhyme scheme is subtle but noticeable. Love can make all things whole.
Comment Written 02-May-2014
reply by the author on 02-May-2014
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THANK YOU FOR YOUR KIND REVIEW....HIS GRAYNESS
Comment from Goldfortune
I like the way your poem came full circle and how descriptive it was in describing the feeling of overcoming fears through prayer and devotion, yet there is something that remains to remind the sufferer of the 'battle'. Stanzas are neat and is easy to read, did not stumble over any of them. Your title does mention rain, perhaps you could insert a stanza or some words about it drenching or spilling over? Good job overall.
reply by the author on 02-May-2014
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I like the way your poem came full circle and how descriptive it was in describing the feeling of overcoming fears through prayer and devotion, yet there is something that remains to remind the sufferer of the 'battle'. Stanzas are neat and is easy to read, did not stumble over any of them. Your title does mention rain, perhaps you could insert a stanza or some words about it drenching or spilling over? Good job overall.
Comment Written 02-May-2014
reply by the author on 02-May-2014
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THANK YOU GOLDFORTUNE...YOUR KIND REVIEW IS MUCH APPRECIATED: HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment from val fitchie
the last several were so...nice...It's refreshing to once more experience the Vance hellfire!!!THANK YOU!!! a "new" observation came to me during this reading (I hope I somehow alluded to this somewhere in all my appraisals)and it is thus: not a single word is mundane or just standing idlely by-EVERY WORD IS UTILISED -YOU PUT EVERY WORD THROUGH THE WRINGER AND GET EVERY DROP OUT OF EACH. THEY ALL ALL ALL WORK TOGETHER AS A TEAM TO SCORE AN EXOTIC GOAL IN YOUR UNIQUE WORDPLAYS. UNUSUAL CHOREOGRAPHY OF PHRASES/IMAGERY TO PASS YOUR THOUGHTS ALONG THE FIELD OF DREAMS. BRAVO.
reply by the author on 02-May-2014
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the last several were so...nice...It's refreshing to once more experience the Vance hellfire!!!THANK YOU!!! a "new" observation came to me during this reading (I hope I somehow alluded to this somewhere in all my appraisals)and it is thus: not a single word is mundane or just standing idlely by-EVERY WORD IS UTILISED -YOU PUT EVERY WORD THROUGH THE WRINGER AND GET EVERY DROP OUT OF EACH. THEY ALL ALL ALL WORK TOGETHER AS A TEAM TO SCORE AN EXOTIC GOAL IN YOUR UNIQUE WORDPLAYS. UNUSUAL CHOREOGRAPHY OF PHRASES/IMAGERY TO PASS YOUR THOUGHTS ALONG THE FIELD OF DREAMS. BRAVO.
Comment Written 01-May-2014
reply by the author on 02-May-2014
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HELLO VAL AND SO VERY DELIGHTED TO HEAR FROM YOU!!! I'VE SURE MISSED YOU AND HOPE ALL IS WELL WITH YOU. THIS REVIEW IS VERY MEANINGFUL AND VERY MUCH APPRECIATED. ALL THE BEST TO YOU VANCE
