senryu (emotional faces)
Faces can say a lot.15 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Yup. I agree. Even on a clown (especially on a clown!) a frown is undeniably depressing. Nice Senryu and (You guessed it) One that needed one more review for a little bump to Recognized.
You've proven it's not necessary to have a photo or image to present an impactful poem!
Karenina
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2023
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Yup. I agree. Even on a clown (especially on a clown!) a frown is undeniably depressing. Nice Senryu and (You guessed it) One that needed one more review for a little bump to Recognized.
You've proven it's not necessary to have a photo or image to present an impactful poem!
Karenina
Comment Written 10-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2023
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You are very busy reviewing some of my older works, and I appreciate that, but I think I have improved a little over time.
Today, I would have included an illustration.
Thanks for the review and all the stars.
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It's fun to look back... Maybe a boost or two will show up tomorrow in your PM box?
Comment from Mark D. R.
Hi leather!
You captured these emotions nicely in your Senryu. As previously mentioned to you, a larger font makes an impression to reviewers. Consider adding an illustration to this post - it could be an abstract or even a cartoon to give another nuance to your poem.
BTW ... I read somewhere that it takes more muscles to smile than frown - so exercise daily!
Mark
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Hi leather!
You captured these emotions nicely in your Senryu. As previously mentioned to you, a larger font makes an impression to reviewers. Consider adding an illustration to this post - it could be an abstract or even a cartoon to give another nuance to your poem.
BTW ... I read somewhere that it takes more muscles to smile than frown - so exercise daily!
Mark
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Thank you Mark, again, for your suggestions. I will see what I can do about this. It is from years ago. Perhaps I cannot edit it at this point-not sure. But I can exercise my smile! Thanks again.
Comment from Willowsong
This is a great depiction of a multiple of human emotions with excellent transition between each line. The photo is absolutely fantastic!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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This is a great depiction of a multiple of human emotions with excellent transition between each line. The photo is absolutely fantastic!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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The photo was indeed a wonderful find and probably brings a lot of smiles on its own. I'm glad my words were able to sort of hold up against that darling baby face. Thank you for the reading, comments, and all the stars.
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You're most welcome :)
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
This photo really adds to the message of this really good senyru. It conveys how our facial expressions are accepted by people, family, friends and even strangers. Sad faces are from troubling times that cannot be avoided. Smiles, grins and laughter is the way to go. I wish you much luck in this contest,,,,,,,,Jim
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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This photo really adds to the message of this really good senyru. It conveys how our facial expressions are accepted by people, family, friends and even strangers. Sad faces are from troubling times that cannot be avoided. Smiles, grins and laughter is the way to go. I wish you much luck in this contest,,,,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much for your review and comments, Jim. Laughter is a wonderful way to go. Even a smile can brighten a stranger's day and they cost so little to give. Thank you for all the stars and good luck wishes.
Comment from Njorgensen
This is terrific! Babies have a unique way of eliciting a deluge of emotion with a simple facial expression. You've done a great job of your word choice to convey this fact.
Njorgensen
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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This is terrific! Babies have a unique way of eliciting a deluge of emotion with a simple facial expression. You've done a great job of your word choice to convey this fact.
Njorgensen
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for all your compliments--word choice is a tricky thing, so I'm glad to hear it worked well in this case. The baby picture, though, is so cute it hardly needs words to go with it. Thanks again.
Comment from Terrie DeGolier
What an adorable picture, that baby is precious. Your words are perfect. the description is right on. Make a great card for a new mom on how to read her child. Good luck with your entry. Terrie
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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What an adorable picture, that baby is precious. Your words are perfect. the description is right on. Make a great card for a new mom on how to read her child. Good luck with your entry. Terrie
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Hi! Terrie. Thanks for your review, compliments, and well-wishes--also for all those stars. That baby has the "darling contest" all locked up. I was so lucky to run across it.
Comment from Glasstruth
Very carefree as the baby in the picture. The poem's full of life, as to when we're happy or not? That's the beauty of life. It's unpredictable. Let whatever may come, come. Wonderfully written. Les
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Very carefree as the baby in the picture. The poem's full of life, as to when we're happy or not? That's the beauty of life. It's unpredictable. Let whatever may come, come. Wonderfully written. Les
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Les, thank you so much for your review and the compliments. I really think the picture wrote the poem more than I did. Yes, it's good to look for the beauty of life. Thanks again.
Comment from Jackarrie
chuckles are funny
smiles are subtle but pleasing
frowns are downright sad
I love the image of the baby chuckling, a good senryu for the contest. Good luck, Mary
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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chuckles are funny
smiles are subtle but pleasing
frowns are downright sad
I love the image of the baby chuckling, a good senryu for the contest. Good luck, Mary
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Thank you, Mary, for your review and the excellent rating. I was so lucky to find that darling photo and have many thanks to give to the photographer. I thank you also for your good luck wishes.
Comment from Jean Lutz
I provide "love-care" for an infant and two young children. They mimic each others faces. Sometimes it is the "pout" that they do best and it has us all laughing. Best wishes with your entry that paints joy!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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I provide "love-care" for an infant and two young children. They mimic each others faces. Sometimes it is the "pout" that they do best and it has us all laughing. Best wishes with your entry that paints joy!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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I bet those little ones give you lots of joy. I wish we had a picture of the two pouters. Thank you for the review and all the stars.
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The two older ones are teaching the baby. I suspect soon a good photographer will catch a classic.
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Then please post a picture--I'd love to see it.
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your few words allow the reader to see and feel that chuckles make one laugh, smiles are always pleasing to the receiver and how frown can be sad
flows well easy read
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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good luck in the contest
your few words allow the reader to see and feel that chuckles make one laugh, smiles are always pleasing to the receiver and how frown can be sad
flows well easy read
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Thanks Smoothiecool for reading and reviewing. Thanks also for your "Excellent" rating and good luck wishes.
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most welcome..SC
