The Bard of Bel Air
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Diamond Dancer & Working Lincoln"A homeless man sees more than people realize.
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Comment from ravenblack
A blues harp- now that would be interesting. An electric blues harp. We have a full harp- my wife used to play, but not anymore. An extremely difficult instrument. Diamond Dancer- a very ethereal song. I think she is the key to Harpster, his "rosebud". Two typos- bellow should be below, won should be one.
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A blues harp- now that would be interesting. An electric blues harp. We have a full harp- my wife used to play, but not anymore. An extremely difficult instrument. Diamond Dancer- a very ethereal song. I think she is the key to Harpster, his "rosebud". Two typos- bellow should be below, won should be one.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
Comment from Michaelk
Another good chapter. Lucy is making her job look too easy. Now we have an Uncle living in the basement. Lincoln might even open up to lucy because of her percieved kindness. I noticed a little spag. "I owe you (one)"
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Another good chapter. Lucy is making her job look too easy. Now we have an Uncle living in the basement. Lincoln might even open up to lucy because of her percieved kindness. I noticed a little spag. "I owe you (one)"
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very good installment. I like the way Lucy handles kids... and Lincoln. Must be dead uncle coming to the room now. He might know a lot! Sure is a big family... all the better. :)
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Very good installment. I like the way Lucy handles kids... and Lincoln. Must be dead uncle coming to the room now. He might know a lot! Sure is a big family... all the better. :)
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
I honestly have never read anyone that writes like this. It is off the cuff, but you never lose the flow of the story and the characters always ring true. It makes the story seem so damn real!!! Really unique. NG
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I honestly have never read anyone that writes like this. It is off the cuff, but you never lose the flow of the story and the characters always ring true. It makes the story seem so damn real!!! Really unique. NG
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Lucy can be quite charming when she has to be. This is another very well written chapter. Just spotted one thing:
"I owe you won. --- one ???
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Lucy can be quite charming when she has to be. This is another very well written chapter. Just spotted one thing:
"I owe you won. --- one ???
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Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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So pleased you are enjoying so far. Way behind on these. But, I read everyone of them and pay close attention. Now I'm behind on reviewing. I'll try to catch up by tomorrow. I have to get back and see what's happening at the river. Gun running I bet! mikey
Comment from ProjectBluebook
My boy! my boy! You are better than a rooster. 11:00 PM your time, it comes out. Actually, a clever move. We know what time you will be posting, right on the minute. I'm starting to make a couple connections. Daniel looks like a loose cannon, with PTSD he could go off the deep end. Have some flashbacks, a possible killer. Backtracking, the Bard speaks of someone to be aware of. This demon lives down below. If I recall, that uncle, don't he live in the basement, which would be below. I believe the Bard saw this Daniel do something that frightened him enough to remember it. Maybe, it's a storage cellar containing pickles and canned foods. Maybe, the nut is preparing for a nuclear attack, a fallout shelter, he may be paranoid and have delusions. I would keep my eye out on this fruitcake, for sure. This is an interesting twist, I like. I always like lots of characters to play with like in a doll house. the Bard knows something and it ain't cool. I love your author notes. job well done! wackydo stamp of approval
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My boy! my boy! You are better than a rooster. 11:00 PM your time, it comes out. Actually, a clever move. We know what time you will be posting, right on the minute. I'm starting to make a couple connections. Daniel looks like a loose cannon, with PTSD he could go off the deep end. Have some flashbacks, a possible killer. Backtracking, the Bard speaks of someone to be aware of. This demon lives down below. If I recall, that uncle, don't he live in the basement, which would be below. I believe the Bard saw this Daniel do something that frightened him enough to remember it. Maybe, it's a storage cellar containing pickles and canned foods. Maybe, the nut is preparing for a nuclear attack, a fallout shelter, he may be paranoid and have delusions. I would keep my eye out on this fruitcake, for sure. This is an interesting twist, I like. I always like lots of characters to play with like in a doll house. the Bard knows something and it ain't cool. I love your author notes. job well done! wackydo stamp of approval
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Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
