Little Poems
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Comment from 9999pool
Our shadows follow us wherever we go and depending on the time of day and the angle of the sun's rays, the shadow can take on many shapes.
Sometime in life, we have to live like our shadows - adaptable to the many seasons and the sunshine but still that dark shadow of ours will follow us to the end of our journey.
The metaphor of our shadows and our characters are intricately entwined as we are ever evolving like the changing of our shadows upon the light.
Great write and well penned.
The pic of the thick snow gave us the chills, smiles.
Cheerio, best, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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Our shadows follow us wherever we go and depending on the time of day and the angle of the sun's rays, the shadow can take on many shapes.
Sometime in life, we have to live like our shadows - adaptable to the many seasons and the sunshine but still that dark shadow of ours will follow us to the end of our journey.
The metaphor of our shadows and our characters are intricately entwined as we are ever evolving like the changing of our shadows upon the light.
Great write and well penned.
The pic of the thick snow gave us the chills, smiles.
Cheerio, best, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 27-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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Thank you Ritchie. Yes, that is the nature of shadows.
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many have written about dark shadows and sunshine shadows are much better, I suppose.
Cheerio, best, Ritchie. :))
Comment from Chocolate Chip
Your reference to "shadows" is not only poetic but symbolic as well. I liked how you ended this piece by saying," to spot the image you emit". This truly formed the poem for me because it seemed to sum up everything described up to that point. Job well done! Thank you for sharing your particular writing and your style w/ those, such as myself, who love poetry. It's much appreciated!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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Your reference to "shadows" is not only poetic but symbolic as well. I liked how you ended this piece by saying," to spot the image you emit". This truly formed the poem for me because it seemed to sum up everything described up to that point. Job well done! Thank you for sharing your particular writing and your style w/ those, such as myself, who love poetry. It's much appreciated!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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Thank yoy Chocolate Chip, I am most pleased that you liked it.
Comment from Literature Dragon
An uplifting and innocent sounding poem. As I read the author's notes, I reccomend double-checking it the picturee wants the pic submitted, it not, then a more stealthy way is to not say you took a picture without full permission, although the notes are funny and animated...
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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An uplifting and innocent sounding poem. As I read the author's notes, I reccomend double-checking it the picturee wants the pic submitted, it not, then a more stealthy way is to not say you took a picture without full permission, although the notes are funny and animated...
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Thank you lit dragon, not to worry, she knows.
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Ok... and I typed "if" but it... changed to "it" for the review... I have been demoted to a Literature Cookie now... :(
Comment from DonandVicki
I will be quiet! But about the poetic verse I have to shout, what a good job. Comparing our shadows as a reflection of our lives... Wonderful concept. Don
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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I will be quiet! But about the poetic verse I have to shout, what a good job. Comparing our shadows as a reflection of our lives... Wonderful concept. Don
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Thank you Don. I hear you loud and clear.
Comment from words
I enjoyed your contemplative write on shadows.
You brought back one of my favorite childhood memories ... playing with shadows.
I too was intrigued by them ... especially shadows on the snow.
Hugs,d
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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I enjoyed your contemplative write on shadows.
You brought back one of my favorite childhood memories ... playing with shadows.
I too was intrigued by them ... especially shadows on the snow.
Hugs,d
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Thank you D, they are fascinating.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
"Shaddows" has rhyme and rhyme scheme and meter and figurative language and imagery. In my opion the rhyme is a little lame.
Preston
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Hi, Treischel,
"Shaddows" has rhyme and rhyme scheme and meter and figurative language and imagery. In my opion the rhyme is a little lame.
Preston
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2014
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Thanks Preston. I'd have to agree. It's more "folksy" than resonant.
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Some very good rhymes. I like the way it ended with emit and bit. Thanks for the author notes explaining the beat count. You know, you may have just invented a new type of poetry. You could name it a boat. In cards, three of a kind and two of a kind makes a Full house or boat. They are book ends. Perhaps, Book end boat as a new form of poetry. I like it. Name it what you want but I do think it is a new type. wackydo
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Some very good rhymes. I like the way it ended with emit and bit. Thanks for the author notes explaining the beat count. You know, you may have just invented a new type of poetry. You could name it a boat. In cards, three of a kind and two of a kind makes a Full house or boat. They are book ends. Perhaps, Book end boat as a new form of poetry. I like it. Name it what you want but I do think it is a new type. wackydo
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you Wackydo. I was thinking Barbell being heavy on the ends and thin in the middle, but I like your suggestion a lot.
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What about figure (8) Barbells? That sounds interesting ...
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That's really good, since it's 8 lines.
Comment from TAB_that's me
I used to be fascinated by the shadows of myself now I am fascinated with shadows of trees especially in the water. Wonderful poem with great rhyme and meter.
Teresa
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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I used to be fascinated by the shadows of myself now I am fascinated with shadows of trees especially in the water. Wonderful poem with great rhyme and meter.
Teresa
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you Teresa. Yes, water shadows are even more intriguing.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the aaabbccc rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with know/snow. Good alliteration with really/right...then/there...get/gist. Good complimentary photo followed by clear message.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Good use of the aaabbccc rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with know/snow. Good alliteration with really/right...then/there...get/gist. Good complimentary photo followed by clear message.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thanks Righteous, for that sterling assessment.
Comment from Kingsland
You have a good flow to the thoughts you are projecting here. Just as the sun projects a shadow. I liked the thoughts in this short poem and it is well written. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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You have a good flow to the thoughts you are projecting here. Just as the sun projects a shadow. I liked the thoughts in this short poem and it is well written. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2014
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Thank you John.
