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Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Rescue Begins At Home"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Comment from 24chas
It's hard to believe no negative factions with all the people coming, but I guess time will tell. And then again, maybe they are just grateful.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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It's hard to believe no negative factions with all the people coming, but I guess time will tell. And then again, maybe they are just grateful.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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It seems to have something to do with Christine and her extra abilities. She has been different from the beginning and more perceptive. I'm way behind. But, I'm reading all your reviews and appreciating them. Just answering one so you know I'm out here. Thank you very much, mikey
Comment from ragamuffin
Seems like an underground bunker is going to be needed for protection from aircraft, or maybe a tomb. hmmm. Very interesting, the mind control to make people puppets.
" 'No enemies? No one negative or problems? It seemed too good to be true."
That's for sure. Looking forward to seeing where that's going. Surely a spy or two in the group maybe? Or perhaps folks realize, "This is it. Work together or die." Or maybe in such a mess they're happy to pass on the responsibility of keeping people alive and their situation improving. Has lots of land been flooded due to flooding of coastal areas and the world's leaders are trying to cut down the population to the "survival of the fittest" people as they regroup against the enemy of the "free world." Very interesting and still quite open. Enjoying it much.
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Seems like an underground bunker is going to be needed for protection from aircraft, or maybe a tomb. hmmm. Very interesting, the mind control to make people puppets.
" 'No enemies? No one negative or problems? It seemed too good to be true."
That's for sure. Looking forward to seeing where that's going. Surely a spy or two in the group maybe? Or perhaps folks realize, "This is it. Work together or die." Or maybe in such a mess they're happy to pass on the responsibility of keeping people alive and their situation improving. Has lots of land been flooded due to flooding of coastal areas and the world's leaders are trying to cut down the population to the "survival of the fittest" people as they regroup against the enemy of the "free world." Very interesting and still quite open. Enjoying it much.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
Comment from ravenblack
So many applications for this new technology, an internet without a computer. But then you'd need a room full of people to serve as servers...And hope that the subconscious does not slip in a few nightmares.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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So many applications for this new technology, an internet without a computer. But then you'd need a room full of people to serve as servers...And hope that the subconscious does not slip in a few nightmares.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2014
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That's an interesting thought. Ha! I'm trying to wind down not expand! Way behind. No internet. I can write all day. I've had to go to the library to post and try and review and get some answers in. Hopefully I'll have internet tomorrow. I actually was at the neighbors for an hour today. Nope, don't know em at all!! mikey
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Man, you are an addict. What happened to your internet connection?
Comment from nordicgirl
This is your best chapter of any of your prose.
I believe all of this. It all follows based on what you have set up from day one.
I sense that Christine is set apart from all others in ability.
Perfect that you have not made her out to be
Some kind of freak. The theme of love that you are hinting at
Is one that I am down for 100% NG
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This is your best chapter of any of your prose.
I believe all of this. It all follows based on what you have set up from day one.
I sense that Christine is set apart from all others in ability.
Perfect that you have not made her out to be
Some kind of freak. The theme of love that you are hinting at
Is one that I am down for 100% NG
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
First of all, I am amazed how you posted this and found time for your roast. You must of been busy as a honey bee today but you are picking up speed. Bombers take a lot of fuel. If you can locate the fuel reserves and torch it, they will be rounded. Oh course, it will be guarded. Also, during the previous wars soldiers made decoys that looked real, dummies that moved, German dummies. Maybe, some decoys could trick the Bombers, just a theory. You probably got more ideas than me. A lot of mind games. Them solar panels came in handy. I envy you, you came out smelling like a rose. Maybe, you can find some SAM missiles in the catacombs. If it is cloudy, they will have to get below the cloud cover so their smart weapons will work. One malfuction of electronics. In the Gulf war Sadam Hussains trops took advantage of the dust storms. Also, smoke will blind the bombers, maybe, some controlled burns are in order. You probably don't need any help but I got to write something here, don't I.
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First of all, I am amazed how you posted this and found time for your roast. You must of been busy as a honey bee today but you are picking up speed. Bombers take a lot of fuel. If you can locate the fuel reserves and torch it, they will be rounded. Oh course, it will be guarded. Also, during the previous wars soldiers made decoys that looked real, dummies that moved, German dummies. Maybe, some decoys could trick the Bombers, just a theory. You probably got more ideas than me. A lot of mind games. Them solar panels came in handy. I envy you, you came out smelling like a rose. Maybe, you can find some SAM missiles in the catacombs. If it is cloudy, they will have to get below the cloud cover so their smart weapons will work. One malfuction of electronics. In the Gulf war Sadam Hussains trops took advantage of the dust storms. Also, smoke will blind the bombers, maybe, some controlled burns are in order. You probably don't need any help but I got to write something here, don't I.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
Comment from faragon
I think it is very cool the way you have mustered everyone together to make use of their special talents. Just enough information on the equipment to let us understand what it does without being too techinal and losing us with specifics.
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I think it is very cool the way you have mustered everyone together to make use of their special talents. Just enough information on the equipment to let us understand what it does without being too techinal and losing us with specifics.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very good chapter, Mikey. One of your best and I wish I could give it a six. I love that so many are coming to join the group... it's a real army now, and will be very strong against ANYONE trying to harm them. But that is a LOT of food they're eating. How well stocked can this bunker be?
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Very good chapter, Mikey. One of your best and I wish I could give it a six. I love that so many are coming to join the group... it's a real army now, and will be very strong against ANYONE trying to harm them. But that is a LOT of food they're eating. How well stocked can this bunker be?
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Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
Comment from nor84
If they are packing to leave(,) then someone is receiving the enemy transmission.
Christine did,(so) perhaps she could explain it to me when we had some leisure time.>>>you need a conjunction in that sentence, otherwise it's a comma splice. So will work, or 'and'
A picture of the bunker with a large number of people eating a meal filled a large panel >>>Instead of 'a large number of people', maybe a crowd of people?
She let out a laugh.>>>She laughed is stronger with fewer words.
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If they are packing to leave(,) then someone is receiving the enemy transmission.
Christine did,(so) perhaps she could explain it to me when we had some leisure time.>>>you need a conjunction in that sentence, otherwise it's a comma splice. So will work, or 'and'
A picture of the bunker with a large number of people eating a meal filled a large panel >>>Instead of 'a large number of people', maybe a crowd of people?
She let out a laugh.>>>She laughed is stronger with fewer words.
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Comment Written 04-Apr-2014
