Dark Eyes Watch
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Comment from Thane VerBroe
Ah yes, the goddess Styx Herself watching, and Charon, ever ready to accept a pittance to pole his ferry 'cross the five rivers of Hades to the gates of Erebus. Dark and spooky Pretty Lady.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Ah yes, the goddess Styx Herself watching, and Charon, ever ready to accept a pittance to pole his ferry 'cross the five rivers of Hades to the gates of Erebus. Dark and spooky Pretty Lady.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thanks Thane so very much. I really appreciate your review.
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Pleasure, as always Pam
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Smiling at you Thane.
Comment from Lysa Schuler
This was an excellent writ. "When despair strikes, emotions run wild. So easy then, to capture a soul to accompany the eyes." A poem about a women predator in search of prey. It seems interesting, and dark. However, it also seems a little bitter. Though, seeming a little angry, this piece was superb work. I found it well expressed, and intense to read. Very well done.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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This was an excellent writ. "When despair strikes, emotions run wild. So easy then, to capture a soul to accompany the eyes." A poem about a women predator in search of prey. It seems interesting, and dark. However, it also seems a little bitter. Though, seeming a little angry, this piece was superb work. I found it well expressed, and intense to read. Very well done.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thank you ever so much Lysa for the great review and the stars.
Comment from Petriesan
picture is cool as, well, hell, you know what I mean
great rhythm, this:
Reddened from sadness,
blurred with grief,
death comes slinking
in the night like a thief.
very easy to read, first to last
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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picture is cool as, well, hell, you know what I mean
great rhythm, this:
Reddened from sadness,
blurred with grief,
death comes slinking
in the night like a thief.
very easy to read, first to last
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thanks Pet for a beautiful review. Sigh.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Who, I wonder, is the owner of such dark eyes? It seems sometimes that there is more than one pair, and they cause despair, seem to delight in it - that's what I get from this exquisite poem, Gungalo (and it is exquisite in its marvelous imagery and flow...)
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Who, I wonder, is the owner of such dark eyes? It seems sometimes that there is more than one pair, and they cause despair, seem to delight in it - that's what I get from this exquisite poem, Gungalo (and it is exquisite in its marvelous imagery and flow...)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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I wonder who too Dawn. LOL but for now, awesome review.
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My pleasure, as it always is, my friend!
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Smile girl.
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No time. (LOL)
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LOL
Comment from Amenian Aypotheeno
They feed on the emotions to taste them as they have none of their own, their cold soul, just a void in that abyss, cold and unmoved by the swirling emotion of the world, waiting for that weary traveller to succumb to the illusion of this Styx siren offers in sanctuary. Falter here and be lost forever... excellent story poem with riveting wordplay.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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They feed on the emotions to taste them as they have none of their own, their cold soul, just a void in that abyss, cold and unmoved by the swirling emotion of the world, waiting for that weary traveller to succumb to the illusion of this Styx siren offers in sanctuary. Falter here and be lost forever... excellent story poem with riveting wordplay.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much Dale for a heck of a review. Sigh you see in this one something most do not.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Gather the faithless,
the forlorn and the weak,
bring them around
by the creek.
Bid them to jump into
the River Styx,
stand there, use every trick.
Oh dear, Pam - they'll be such a crowd turning up if the faithless, the forlorn and the weak come along ---
this is written on your dark side, my friend.
margaret
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Gather the faithless,
the forlorn and the weak,
bring them around
by the creek.
Bid them to jump into
the River Styx,
stand there, use every trick.
Oh dear, Pam - they'll be such a crowd turning up if the faithless, the forlorn and the weak come along ---
this is written on your dark side, my friend.
margaret
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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My but yes Margaret. It should be pretty telling. Thank you my friend for a revealing truth.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Ooh - so cold! So cruelly, patiently inevitable - those eyes!
There's really nothing
for them to see, only ...
to hope for a tragedy. .. shudder!
Gave me chills, Pam dear .. sigh!
xxx
Sonali :)
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Ooh - so cold! So cruelly, patiently inevitable - those eyes!
There's really nothing
for them to see, only ...
to hope for a tragedy. .. shudder!
Gave me chills, Pam dear .. sigh!
xxx
Sonali :)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Sorry about the chills Sonali but that must mean it worked. LOL
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Sure did!!
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LOL girl.
Comment from Amsterdam
Would give a six
Only have five
Besides, already 666
Below you pics eyes
One eye sees
One eyes blind
Dark entity
Everywhere looking...
Most are blind
Am
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Would give a six
Only have five
Besides, already 666
Below you pics eyes
One eye sees
One eyes blind
Dark entity
Everywhere looking...
Most are blind
Am
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thanks Am for a dark and sinister review. LOL.
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written poem with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. One can be puzzled over the time that they will take their last ride.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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This is a very well written poem with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. One can be puzzled over the time that they will take their last ride.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Yeah they can for sure Charlie. Thank you for a great review.
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You're welcome, Gungalo. Charlie
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Smile.
Comment from Just2Write
the River Styxx (Spelling Styx)
Those eyes watching from the underworld beyond the River Styx send a pretty scary message. They do wait, and perhaps will do so for an eternity.
I like when you venture into this type of Free Verse. An interesting read, for sure.
Rose.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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the River Styxx (Spelling Styx)
Those eyes watching from the underworld beyond the River Styx send a pretty scary message. They do wait, and perhaps will do so for an eternity.
I like when you venture into this type of Free Verse. An interesting read, for sure.
Rose.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much Rose and you are right about the spelling.
