A Murder Most Fowl
It's best to be happy with who--or what--we are...138 total reviews
Comment from poet.wayne
Awesome!
I had so many different ideas of where this was going... Thought it might be about suicide... the flight of Icarus retold... a passing through from childhood to adult... the passing from earthly (physical) life into the spiritual one... I guess each could be seen here... it took reading the author's notes, to take my focus off the woman and place it on the bird! And, as usual, I learned something new from your notes!
Great poem! Love the picture, too...
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Awesome!
I had so many different ideas of where this was going... Thought it might be about suicide... the flight of Icarus retold... a passing through from childhood to adult... the passing from earthly (physical) life into the spiritual one... I guess each could be seen here... it took reading the author's notes, to take my focus off the woman and place it on the bird! And, as usual, I learned something new from your notes!
Great poem! Love the picture, too...
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much for your glowing, wonderful review, PW. I'm very grateful, and especially glad that you liked it.
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I noticed you didn't have any music embedded on it... I just posted two chapters to "Ha Ha" (where I'm amping up the darkness, the horror of it) and I tried to embed with youtube's autoplay code (the ?autoplay=1) and it wouldn't allow me to type that in the code ON THE YOUTUBE PAGE... But I figured it out... just copied the code as is into the author's note area, then added the autoplay bit there...the chapters I'm working on now, I'm using different variations of the same theme, melody, performed on different instruments and in different styles... but the same basic tune...
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I noticed you didn't have any music embedded on it... I just posted two chapters to "Ha Ha" (where I'm amping up the darkness, the horror of it) and I tried to embed with youtube's autoplay code (the ?autoplay=1) and it wouldn't allow me to type that in the code ON THE YOUTUBE PAGE... But I figured it out... just copied the code as is into the author's note area, then added the autoplay bit there...the chapters I'm working on now, I'm using different variations of the same theme, melody, performed on different instruments and in different styles... but the same basic tune...
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Thanks poet_wayne, that sounds great. I'll have to check that out.
I'm only using sounds and music on my PictaPoem © series of poems now, nothing else.
I'll be looking into that "Ha Ha" story ASAP!
Comment from hifein
a very well written tribute to our winged friends. and i actually picked up some knowledge along the way. the photo, lovely and enhancing as it is for your poem, ebbs in comparison to the skill with which the poem is constructed, the play on words, the pacing, the rhyming scheme and the story told.
You think you're done but you have won ~ you've passed my wary test.
A downy bed to rest your head, now feathers in your nest.
With graceful dive you felt alive, when plummeting toward earth...
New wings were sprouted, all she doubted, died with her rebirth.
wonderful stanza. excellent poem.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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a very well written tribute to our winged friends. and i actually picked up some knowledge along the way. the photo, lovely and enhancing as it is for your poem, ebbs in comparison to the skill with which the poem is constructed, the play on words, the pacing, the rhyming scheme and the story told.
You think you're done but you have won ~ you've passed my wary test.
A downy bed to rest your head, now feathers in your nest.
With graceful dive you felt alive, when plummeting toward earth...
New wings were sprouted, all she doubted, died with her rebirth.
wonderful stanza. excellent poem.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for such a glowing rating and outstanding review, hifein. I am truly grateful.
Comment from Cedar
Dean: I believe this is one of your best pieces that I've read so far. In just a year, you have managed to write many exceptional poems. I like everything about this one, the story, the bounce and rhythm of your perfect rhyming. Also, the presentation matches your words exactly as they should. I believe you may receive a "seven star" rating from the site for this piece, due to the number of exceptional ratings that you are receiving. And, in my opinion, it should be nominated for the poem of the month. Your notes are also exceptional. This is truly a fantastic write. Bill
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Dean: I believe this is one of your best pieces that I've read so far. In just a year, you have managed to write many exceptional poems. I like everything about this one, the story, the bounce and rhythm of your perfect rhyming. Also, the presentation matches your words exactly as they should. I believe you may receive a "seven star" rating from the site for this piece, due to the number of exceptional ratings that you are receiving. And, in my opinion, it should be nominated for the poem of the month. Your notes are also exceptional. This is truly a fantastic write. Bill
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, Bill, that's such a wonderful compliment. I'm very glad you liked this one and felt so strongly about it. I sincerely appreciate it, my friend.
Comment from rouskin
Perfect combination of artwork, storytelling and history about other cultures Memorable writ. Kudos to you for this one my friend. Blessings, Rouskin
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Perfect combination of artwork, storytelling and history about other cultures Memorable writ. Kudos to you for this one my friend. Blessings, Rouskin
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much, rouskin. I really appreciate that!
Comment from dragonpoet
Nicely done poem of death and rebirth, or finding your wings.
It is sad she had to do it by suicide. The raven was right
in that live is meant for living and life is better when you find your true self. When you do your wings sprout and you can fly.
Nice artwork. She's at a precipice that seems to be covered by blood and surrounded be darkness. Both metaphors of how the narrator feels
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Nicely done poem of death and rebirth, or finding your wings.
It is sad she had to do it by suicide. The raven was right
in that live is meant for living and life is better when you find your true self. When you do your wings sprout and you can fly.
Nice artwork. She's at a precipice that seems to be covered by blood and surrounded be darkness. Both metaphors of how the narrator feels
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thanks, dragonpoet, for the excellent review. I appreciate it, and will keep writing.
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You're welcome, Dean. I hope we all keep it up until we can't physically do it any more.
Joan
Comment from comanalbert
I like how you decribe the struggle in her soul and how that the crow tells her that her body is not made â??â??to fly .. I love it .. It is so sad .I can see myself in your poem..I really feel it..It's good "'Twas just a dream of dying".
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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I like how you decribe the struggle in her soul and how that the crow tells her that her body is not made â??â??to fly .. I love it .. It is so sad .I can see myself in your poem..I really feel it..It's good "'Twas just a dream of dying".
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Thanks a million, comanalbert. I'm glad you could identify, and appreciate the review.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Dean Kuch,
In the light of Author Notes, it's a lovely piece of Spiritually Poetry beautifully depicting its theme.
Impressive wording.
Smooth flow with nice rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
These lines are particularly worth noting:
"You think you're done but you have won ~ you've passed my wary test.
A downy bed to rest your head, now feathers in your nest.
With graceful dive you felt alive, when plummeting toward earth...
New wings were sprouted, all she doubted, died with her rebirth."
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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Hello Dean Kuch,
In the light of Author Notes, it's a lovely piece of Spiritually Poetry beautifully depicting its theme.
Impressive wording.
Smooth flow with nice rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
These lines are particularly worth noting:
"You think you're done but you have won ~ you've passed my wary test.
A downy bed to rest your head, now feathers in your nest.
With graceful dive you felt alive, when plummeting toward earth...
New wings were sprouted, all she doubted, died with her rebirth."
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014
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RPSaxena, thank you so much for reviewing this for me. I appreciate it.
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written poem almost creating your own small legend, your a good literary raconteur Dean, I enjoyed this narrative, it is wonderfully written with a text descriptively attractive, it flows sweetly off the pen, well written, well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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A beautifully written poem almost creating your own small legend, your a good literary raconteur Dean, I enjoyed this narrative, it is wonderfully written with a text descriptively attractive, it flows sweetly off the pen, well written, well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thanks a million, Roy. I am so glad to know that you enjoyed this one.
Comment from mfowler
Hi Dean
This poem is not only beautifully crafted, but quite serendipitous. I have just posted a story featuring crows (a little), and then explained their role in my neck of the woods, and then I see this. With my name, I had to review it. Besides, you've reviewed me about four times in the last week.
Now for the poem. I loved every well selected word. It tells a great and original story, with the ending a complete surprise. I love the 'fable -like' approach, with the mystical scene and the appearance of the much maligned crow with his lyrical wisdom. The girl defies the wisdom, and the poor bird wakes up with a realisation that he's died as a human in his dream. You must have written this to the image, as I can't believe you found the perfect match, post-writing. The meter and rhyme are so good, that I don't think I even noticed structure as I read through this. Good sign of its underlying perfection.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
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Hi Dean
This poem is not only beautifully crafted, but quite serendipitous. I have just posted a story featuring crows (a little), and then explained their role in my neck of the woods, and then I see this. With my name, I had to review it. Besides, you've reviewed me about four times in the last week.
Now for the poem. I loved every well selected word. It tells a great and original story, with the ending a complete surprise. I love the 'fable -like' approach, with the mystical scene and the appearance of the much maligned crow with his lyrical wisdom. The girl defies the wisdom, and the poor bird wakes up with a realisation that he's died as a human in his dream. You must have written this to the image, as I can't believe you found the perfect match, post-writing. The meter and rhyme are so good, that I don't think I even noticed structure as I read through this. Good sign of its underlying perfection.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
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Thanks very much, mark, i sincerely appreciate such a thoughtful review. Actually, the poem was prompted by some stories I was reading about the myths and legends of Native Americans, and I read one in particular about some very naughty children who transformed into crows to learn the evils of their ways. made to feast on carrion and the eyes of dead men, they learned their lesson all right! I then found a picture to compliment it, at least I'd hoped it would.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, dean, you did an excellent job writing this quatrain poem about the flight of the raven that dreamed of being human and unable to fly..
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
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this is very well written, dean, you did an excellent job writing this quatrain poem about the flight of the raven that dreamed of being human and unable to fly..
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
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Thanks so much for a wonderful review and generous rating, sweetwoodjax. I really appreciate it.
