A Murder Most Fowl
It's best to be happy with who--or what--we are...138 total reviews
Comment from barkingdog
Your story of the crow's dream is well penned in these smoothly rhyming quatrains. The visuals are clear(the girl on the precipice, the crow, flitting about, urging her to treasure her life)
As always, your notes are a brilliant addition to your work. :) e
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Your story of the crow's dream is well penned in these smoothly rhyming quatrains. The visuals are clear(the girl on the precipice, the crow, flitting about, urging her to treasure her life)
As always, your notes are a brilliant addition to your work. :) e
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Ellen, I'm really gald that you liked this one. I appreciate all tose shining stars, as well. Much obliged, my friend!
Comment from cory4
Dear Dean,
Your poem is completely brilliant. You have chosen perfect words to construct your poem. It is very thoughtful and evocative. It made me reflect on life as well as death. I believe there is something mysterious and mythological about crows, and you have portrayed them in appropriate way, according to what you have written about. Well done!
Kind Regards,
Cory4
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Dear Dean,
Your poem is completely brilliant. You have chosen perfect words to construct your poem. It is very thoughtful and evocative. It made me reflect on life as well as death. I believe there is something mysterious and mythological about crows, and you have portrayed them in appropriate way, according to what you have written about. Well done!
Kind Regards,
Cory4
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thanks very much fo such a wonderful complimentary review, Cory4. I sincerely appreciate that!
Comment from alexgeorge
I gobbled up this poem like a hungry man eating bread offered by the Lord. I found the author's notes very informative. Dean, I'll say this, not merely as your friend, but as a reader who is expressing their honest opinion: your writing lacks nothing when compared to published works from great writers. I think you've transcended that elusive boundary that keeps the rest of us land-locked. Have you had any success with getting your poems noticed by agents and publishers? I'd be very interested to hear your story.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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I gobbled up this poem like a hungry man eating bread offered by the Lord. I found the author's notes very informative. Dean, I'll say this, not merely as your friend, but as a reader who is expressing their honest opinion: your writing lacks nothing when compared to published works from great writers. I think you've transcended that elusive boundary that keeps the rest of us land-locked. Have you had any success with getting your poems noticed by agents and publishers? I'd be very interested to hear your story.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thanks, Alex, and coming from you, that truly means the world to me. My problem with publishing is that I simply don't know how to do it. I'm on disability for a severe heart condition (I currently have just 20% capacity of my total heart function), so monetary issues restrict me as well. Unless noticed by someone in publishing circles who feels as strongly about my writing as you do, I may simply have to be contented with entertaining the fine people on this website, much like yourself.
Thanks so much again, Alex. You do realize how much I respect your opinion, don't you?
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How about sending query letters to agents? I seem to recall that you have had some of your poems published by a paying magazine. That's a massive first step, so you can put that in your query letter.
Read on what Ted has to say about publishing on this site and how to write query letters.
I think it will be worth your while. If you're going to produce such fine poetry, you may as well get recognised--and paid--for it.
I'm sorry to hear about your heart condition. Stay strong, my horror/fantasy friend,
A
Comment from Jackarrie
First of all I agree with your line of description.It's best to be happy with who--or what--we are. I love the poem from the beginning to the end. The presentation is done so well, it is like opening a glossy covered book, to the first poem. The image is just brilliant. The rhymes are well done. and the story/poem is magic. I enjoyed your authors notes too.
Well done, Mary
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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First of all I agree with your line of description.It's best to be happy with who--or what--we are. I love the poem from the beginning to the end. The presentation is done so well, it is like opening a glossy covered book, to the first poem. The image is just brilliant. The rhymes are well done. and the story/poem is magic. I enjoyed your authors notes too.
Well done, Mary
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Wow, what a glowing review, thank you so much, Mary. I'm truly grateful for your kind words and generous rating.
Comment from tony bronk
I really like the fact that this poem is a dream sequence. I love the surreal, and this certainly qualifies as such. The subject is very interesting and educational, and it was fun reading. We, here in Wisconsin, have many Native American tribes within our borders, and many of our cities are named after them. We honor the Native American here. An exceptional poem! Tony
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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I really like the fact that this poem is a dream sequence. I love the surreal, and this certainly qualifies as such. The subject is very interesting and educational, and it was fun reading. We, here in Wisconsin, have many Native American tribes within our borders, and many of our cities are named after them. We honor the Native American here. An exceptional poem! Tony
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much, Tony, i truly appreciate that. I'm glad you liked the story behind it as well. Much obliged, my friend!
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
A most magnificent rhyming work. It is wonderful to read, I love the internal rhyme and the subtle nuances of speech and meaning. It has an excellent conclusion with her coming back to live amongst a murder of crows. I also gained a great deal from your author notes, thank you, Dean. Giddy
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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A most magnificent rhyming work. It is wonderful to read, I love the internal rhyme and the subtle nuances of speech and meaning. It has an excellent conclusion with her coming back to live amongst a murder of crows. I also gained a great deal from your author notes, thank you, Dean. Giddy
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thank you for taking time out to read and review it so favorably, Giddy. I sincerely appreciate that!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Very effective the rhyming within each line in this story poem of the girl and the bird. The conversation from the crow and the raven are great and I love the ending. Her re-birth as she Floated into a feathered nest and finding her budding wings.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Very effective the rhyming within each line in this story poem of the girl and the bird. The conversation from the crow and the raven are great and I love the ending. Her re-birth as she Floated into a feathered nest and finding her budding wings.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thanks very much, Pearl. I'm so happy you liked it.
Comment from Sanku
A beautiful poem .A very good lilt with the internal rhymes and end rhymes.The crow tried to save her fronm her chosen end.in our folk lore the crow is the vehicle of God Saturn, a planet that can influence one. they are also the souls of dead near and dear ones ,so feed them rice .I enjoyed the poem .it has a classical echo.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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A beautiful poem .A very good lilt with the internal rhymes and end rhymes.The crow tried to save her fronm her chosen end.in our folk lore the crow is the vehicle of God Saturn, a planet that can influence one. they are also the souls of dead near and dear ones ,so feed them rice .I enjoyed the poem .it has a classical echo.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thanks very much for the generous review and rating, Sanku. I also appreciate you filling me in on your culture's viewpoint of the raven. Perhaps there's another poem in there somewhere?
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I did write a story about my mother feeding the crow everyday. if you have time ,please read it .
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I will, Sanku, just let me know the name of it. I'd love to read it.
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Thank you .It is called 'My mother and the crow". It deals with two generation's attitude with myths.Please forgive me for the space issues.My typing is very clumsy.
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You got it. I'm going to bed now, but I promise to read it first thing in the morning.
~Dean~
Comment from Deborah Marie
Well penned and nice artwork used. Progression, rhythm and flow is nice. Clever descriptive wording used. Story is nice too. God Bless, Deb
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Well penned and nice artwork used. Progression, rhythm and flow is nice. Clever descriptive wording used. Story is nice too. God Bless, Deb
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thanks for your kind review, Deborah. Much obliged.
Comment from DonandVicki
The word murder is such a good and picturesque word for a group of noisy crows. Your poem Dean is so well composed and a good poetic verse to contemplate, well done as always. Don and Vicki
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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The word murder is such a good and picturesque word for a group of noisy crows. Your poem Dean is so well composed and a good poetic verse to contemplate, well done as always. Don and Vicki
Comment Written 31-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
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Thanks very much for taking the time to read & review it for me, Don. I truly appreciate it!
