A Murder Most Fowl
It's best to be happy with who--or what--we are...138 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I would have missed this one completely had I not reviewed the poets of the month contest, so I have been very wise in Fanning you. This is a beautiful poem, Dean, I do like it when I read a smooth and silky, unforced flow. The story is amazing, and I can quite understand it being chosen. This was a real pleasure for me to read. Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
  |
I would have missed this one completely had I not reviewed the poets of the month contest, so I have been very wise in Fanning you. This is a beautiful poem, Dean, I do like it when I read a smooth and silky, unforced flow. The story is amazing, and I can quite understand it being chosen. This was a real pleasure for me to read. Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
-
Thanks so much, Sandra. I'm so happy that you enjoyed this rather lighthearted side of my normally rather dark muse. I certainly am grateful for your kind words and very generous rating, my friend.
Comment from Narvik
OK, dude. You scare the bejiggers out of me with your weird stuff, but it's damn good weird stuff. I know diddly about poetry, but your mechanics look better to me than the other poets.
You got my vote.
~ Jack
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
 |
OK, dude. You scare the bejiggers out of me with your weird stuff, but it's damn good weird stuff. I know diddly about poetry, but your mechanics look better to me than the other poets.
You got my vote.
~ Jack
Comment Written 17-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2014
-
Thank you Capt'n, I really appreciate the fact that you feel that way, my friend. This one was pretty tame, as far as the majority of my poetry goes. I'm very pleased to know that you enjoyed it, Jack.
-
Your tame ones are more daunting than my wild ones.
-
:>]
Comment from pipersfancy
Well - this is such a delight to read! I'm so glad you pointed out that I'd missed this gem of yours!
A lovely story told in iambic heptameter... gosh, Dean... now you're speaking my language!
Just to consider:
A marvelous vast precipice lay o'er grassy hill--
the word 'marvelous', although technically a 3 syllable word, is typically pronounced as a 2 syll. 'mar-vless' (especially as it is read aloud at the fast pace your story unfolds at) So, you could use 'over' rather than the contracted
'o'er' if you wanted to!
With graceful dive you felt alive, when plummeting toward earth...
-consider 'while' instead of 'when'
As I said - these are simply suggestions... (I always feel obliged to contribute SOME suggestion!) It's a superb piece as is, and a highly enjoyable read! Lovely!
PF
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
|
Well - this is such a delight to read! I'm so glad you pointed out that I'd missed this gem of yours!
A lovely story told in iambic heptameter... gosh, Dean... now you're speaking my language!
Just to consider:
A marvelous vast precipice lay o'er grassy hill--
the word 'marvelous', although technically a 3 syllable word, is typically pronounced as a 2 syll. 'mar-vless' (especially as it is read aloud at the fast pace your story unfolds at) So, you could use 'over' rather than the contracted
'o'er' if you wanted to!
With graceful dive you felt alive, when plummeting toward earth...
-consider 'while' instead of 'when'
As I said - these are simply suggestions... (I always feel obliged to contribute SOME suggestion!) It's a superb piece as is, and a highly enjoyable read! Lovely!
PF
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
-
Thanks, Pipe, and I happen to like those suggestions. I'm really happy that you got to take a look at this one. It's a bit different than my usual fare. Thanks for such a generous review, as well as those idea. All are appreciated!
Comment from Treischel
A lively tale the actually blends two traditions: that of the fair lovelorn maiden jumping to her death, and that of the wise crow. I enjoyed the twists of the tail feathers in this very well written poetic saga, done in wonderful abab rhyme scheme, and a pulsing 14 meter pace. Very nice!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
|
A lively tale the actually blends two traditions: that of the fair lovelorn maiden jumping to her death, and that of the wise crow. I enjoyed the twists of the tail feathers in this very well written poetic saga, done in wonderful abab rhyme scheme, and a pulsing 14 meter pace. Very nice!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
-
Thanks for reading and reviewing this one for me, Tom. I value your opinion quite highly.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
absolutely the best i have read in a long time.
Rhyme and reason combined to relay a message, a story, a comparison to life itself
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
|
absolutely the best i have read in a long time.
Rhyme and reason combined to relay a message, a story, a comparison to life itself
Comment Written 03-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
-
Thanks so very much, Barb. I'm very happy you liked this one, it is a little bit different from most of my usual poetry. Thanks for such a wonderful review, and those six stars.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Bravo, Dean. You not only have done a great job of educating the readers of the misperception regarding crows, but you've created a spellbinding poem to match your efforts. I did not know how the poem would go mid-way and, so, was pleased and surprised by the end. I love that you are able to tell such great stories in these poems. And the ending line was perfect! A virtual six as I am all out.
Hugs, Bev
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
|
Bravo, Dean. You not only have done a great job of educating the readers of the misperception regarding crows, but you've created a spellbinding poem to match your efforts. I did not know how the poem would go mid-way and, so, was pleased and surprised by the end. I love that you are able to tell such great stories in these poems. And the ending line was perfect! A virtual six as I am all out.
Hugs, Bev
Comment Written 02-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2014
-
Thanks so much, and a virtual "six" from you speaks volumes, Bev, my friend. I appreciate your kind review, most sincerely.
-
You're very welcome, Dean. :0) Bev
Comment from billscott
Very interesting. A friend of mine has been asking me about the meaning of crows in recent weeks. I pointed several references out to her, right along with my generalized opinions. I suppose that assisted her, but I couldn't help but wonder about the crow...and birds.
The symbol of the bird, crow, etc. is quite rich with history as you have displayed here.
Your poem is unbelievably good in every way. You have a terrific way of attaching meaning with a bit of education to boot.
Love that.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
|
Very interesting. A friend of mine has been asking me about the meaning of crows in recent weeks. I pointed several references out to her, right along with my generalized opinions. I suppose that assisted her, but I couldn't help but wonder about the crow...and birds.
The symbol of the bird, crow, etc. is quite rich with history as you have displayed here.
Your poem is unbelievably good in every way. You have a terrific way of attaching meaning with a bit of education to boot.
Love that.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
-
Thanks so much, Bill, and I am very glad to hear that you like that particular aspect of my poetry. Your generous rating and warm review are both greatly appreciated.
Comment from skye
What a beautifully written poem with smooth lines, great rhymes, and gorgeous art.
I learn new things everyday here. These stories about the birds and legends are interesting. Your poem brings one small part to life.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
|
What a beautifully written poem with smooth lines, great rhymes, and gorgeous art.
I learn new things everyday here. These stories about the birds and legends are interesting. Your poem brings one small part to life.
Excellent.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
-
Thank you very much, skye. I'm very glad that you enjoyed it!
Comment from persevere
This is a riveting poem with a pulsating beat. The title itself, with'Fowl', is an invitation to read on. Spirituality conveyed in italics is brilliant. What a creative way, via a crow's dream, to send that message of accepting one's limitations.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
|
This is a riveting poem with a pulsating beat. The title itself, with'Fowl', is an invitation to read on. Spirituality conveyed in italics is brilliant. What a creative way, via a crow's dream, to send that message of accepting one's limitations.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2014
-
Thanks so much for a wonderful review and generous rating, persevere. I really appreciate it.
Comment from Pegcook
These kind of stories told in poetic form are the absolute best! Is this one based on an Indian legend? The rhyme and meter you use move this poem along at a pace that keeps the reader involved. The line, "New wings were sprouted, all she doubted, died with her rebirth." Tells the story. Thank you for writing this poem.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
|
These kind of stories told in poetic form are the absolute best! Is this one based on an Indian legend? The rhyme and meter you use move this poem along at a pace that keeps the reader involved. The line, "New wings were sprouted, all she doubted, died with her rebirth." Tells the story. Thank you for writing this poem.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014
-
Thank you very much for reading and reviewing it for me, Peg. I truly appreciate the kind review, and I am very glad you liked it, too!
