Reclamation
The search for a lost childhood.27 total reviews
Comment from Tatarka2
Woe - I just don't know how this could be improved. You have told the story, so succinctly, and in such a lyrical way, of a person who has, with therapy and insight, overcome a traumatic childhood and alcohol abuse (so often connected) to a mature, reasoned adulthood. All of this in such a lyrical, poetic form. My congratulations. I hope you do very well in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Woe - I just don't know how this could be improved. You have told the story, so succinctly, and in such a lyrical way, of a person who has, with therapy and insight, overcome a traumatic childhood and alcohol abuse (so often connected) to a mature, reasoned adulthood. All of this in such a lyrical, poetic form. My congratulations. I hope you do very well in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the stellar review. I just paused to look back. It's been a long time. Mine was a happy ending. Distance makes it easier to reflect on.
Comment from James Dooney
woooo this is pretty deep work going on here. I really love what you have done and the fact that you have written about it. Good work.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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woooo this is pretty deep work going on here. I really love what you have done and the fact that you have written about it. Good work.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the stellar review.
Comment from ennahanid
This is a most 'honest' sounding write and I am thinking that the narrator of said piece was born an Old Soul. Childhood reclaimed how fine that is and a great subject for the Childhood contest and I thank you for the read and wish you luck - Dinah
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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This is a most 'honest' sounding write and I am thinking that the narrator of said piece was born an Old Soul. Childhood reclaimed how fine that is and a great subject for the Childhood contest and I thank you for the read and wish you luck - Dinah
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the great review. yes I was born an old soul. but it took years to rescue the child within. A story with a happy ending. It all began long ago.
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I too was born an Old Soul, it is so recognizable and I knew it from an early age...interesting how life is and how we handle such situations...I am glad you found you - Dinah
Comment from ccto12
This is a very touching poem you've penned here about your childhood or lack thereof. Your poem tells your story well with excellent rhyming stanzas. You are very candid and honesty about having developed a drinking problem. Not only do you mention overcoming this major obstacle but it seems to me this very poem and the fact that you've written it with such introspection says to me as your reader just how far you've come and how you've healed. I loved reading your last stanza as it speaks volumes of your current healthy emotional state. Very well done and best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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This is a very touching poem you've penned here about your childhood or lack thereof. Your poem tells your story well with excellent rhyming stanzas. You are very candid and honesty about having developed a drinking problem. Not only do you mention overcoming this major obstacle but it seems to me this very poem and the fact that you've written it with such introspection says to me as your reader just how far you've come and how you've healed. I loved reading your last stanza as it speaks volumes of your current healthy emotional state. Very well done and best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the insightful review, was just reaching back into time. Have been in recovery for 27 years. It's been an amazing journey.
Comment from Ben Colder
Very nice. Good strong words and a very nice rhythm. I find no fault. Best to you in the contest. You told it like it is poet. Shalom.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Very nice. Good strong words and a very nice rhythm. I find no fault. Best to you in the contest. You told it like it is poet. Shalom.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you for reviewing. For me there was a happy ending.
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The poem flowed and connected well. The author's words were descriptive, creative and thought provoking. I enjoyed the video it was so appropriate for this poem.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Excellent Poem! The poem flowed and connected well. The author's words were descriptive, creative and thought provoking. I enjoyed the video it was so appropriate for this poem.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mfowler
This is a wonderfully and skilfully written poem. Your meter and rhyme bring the poem up off the page and say, Read ME! Your clever response to the prompt about childhood by revisiting through the eyes of a shrink's patient is masterful. I love how you explore childhood as a place unknown to you, and then when awareness sets in you describe the experience as:two footprints in a garden of blooms relieved of blight. You use magery to great effect such as when you decribe the effects of alcohol in midlife:along came alcohol I opened like a flower
until it crushed my petals. The best of luck in the vote.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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This is a wonderfully and skilfully written poem. Your meter and rhyme bring the poem up off the page and say, Read ME! Your clever response to the prompt about childhood by revisiting through the eyes of a shrink's patient is masterful. I love how you explore childhood as a place unknown to you, and then when awareness sets in you describe the experience as:two footprints in a garden of blooms relieved of blight. You use magery to great effect such as when you decribe the effects of alcohol in midlife:along came alcohol I opened like a flower
until it crushed my petals. The best of luck in the vote.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the detailed stellar review. Appreciate your attention to the imagery. Mine was a happy ending. Not so for everyone.
Comment from LoannaLois
This is so well done, beautifully rhymed, and dearly remembered...with such anguish and soul searching . This was such a memory of difficulty, that my heart swelled when, at the end, she found her inner child.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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This is so well done, beautifully rhymed, and dearly remembered...with such anguish and soul searching . This was such a memory of difficulty, that my heart swelled when, at the end, she found her inner child.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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It was a process but had a happy ending. An amazing journey that begun 27 years ago. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from tony bronk
A very wonderful poem of reminisce which I enjoyed very much. You appeared to be honest, and fairly open, as far as you were willing at the time, but there's a time for everything. Your rhyme scheme worked well, and your flow was smooth. Sweet Dreams. Tony
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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A very wonderful poem of reminisce which I enjoyed very much. You appeared to be honest, and fairly open, as far as you were willing at the time, but there's a time for everything. Your rhyme scheme worked well, and your flow was smooth. Sweet Dreams. Tony
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Smoothiecool
this is a very deep insight to your childhood
your chosen words allow the reader to see and feel your demise with alcohol
the therapy and recovery
to allow you to find yourself once again to be free
your rhyme works and allows free flow
great read and write
cheers Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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this is a very deep insight to your childhood
your chosen words allow the reader to see and feel your demise with alcohol
the therapy and recovery
to allow you to find yourself once again to be free
your rhyme works and allows free flow
great read and write
cheers Smoothiecool
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the in depth review. Appreciate it.
