Reclamation
The search for a lost childhood.27 total reviews
Comment from amada
You did such a great job in this powerful rhyming poem about your childhood. It adds beauty and song to a very heavy subject. My favorite lines, hard to decide, but these are the ones "Dressed in false maturity I popped out of the womb
pretended I was all grown up hid deep inside that tomb." I know, tragedies make us grow pretty fast. A pleasure to read. Blessings.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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You did such a great job in this powerful rhyming poem about your childhood. It adds beauty and song to a very heavy subject. My favorite lines, hard to decide, but these are the ones "Dressed in false maturity I popped out of the womb
pretended I was all grown up hid deep inside that tomb." I know, tragedies make us grow pretty fast. A pleasure to read. Blessings.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the stellar review, Amada
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow - this is so intense, and so bittersweet - so many years lost to such self-delusion and denial, and we all do it somewhat, don't we? What an incredible poem! I see how it won - not only technically wonderful, but so powerful emotionally.
KUDOS! SIX (if I had one!)
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Wow - this is so intense, and so bittersweet - so many years lost to such self-delusion and denial, and we all do it somewhat, don't we? What an incredible poem! I see how it won - not only technically wonderful, but so powerful emotionally.
KUDOS! SIX (if I had one!)
Comment Written 25-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Dawn, so much for the stellar review and the virtual six. We all have our stories.
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So very much my pleasure! I love reading your work!
Comment from L.M.Mullins
Congratulations! You have written a beautiful poem.
Like a swan is sad in the beginning but later in life blossom into amazing beauty.
L.M. Mullins
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Congratulations! You have written a beautiful poem.
Like a swan is sad in the beginning but later in life blossom into amazing beauty.
L.M. Mullins
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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thank you for the very nice review.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with womb/tomb. Good simile use with like the layers of an onion. Good description and alliteration. Good eye catching photo followed by a clear message. Congrats on your win.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with womb/tomb. Good simile use with like the layers of an onion. Good description and alliteration. Good eye catching photo followed by a clear message. Congrats on your win.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the review and the congrats.
Comment from barleygirl
Congrats on your win in this contest. Your poem is very unique & well-structured, with good rhythm & rhyme. The story really doesn't include much "childhood" as one might expect it to come across. Yet your explanation of starting out "mature" makes sense & leads to the ensuing years of adulthood, as described. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Congrats on your win in this contest. Your poem is very unique & well-structured, with good rhythm & rhyme. The story really doesn't include much "childhood" as one might expect it to come across. Yet your explanation of starting out "mature" makes sense & leads to the ensuing years of adulthood, as described. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Thank you for reviewing. I guess my point was about missing it.
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Lack of childhood is a good response to a prompt about childhood . . . hadn't thought of it that way.
Comment from kiwijenny
This brought tears to my eyes....I always give a six when that happens but I am out of them...this poem is worthy of its winning ribbon...well written and dear one, well lived......
God bless
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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This brought tears to my eyes....I always give a six when that happens but I am out of them...this poem is worthy of its winning ribbon...well written and dear one, well lived......
God bless
Comment Written 24-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much for the heart felt review. Appreciate it.
Comment from jandeck
This was a beautifully written poem about childhood, with a personal invitation to peek imside. If therapy provides this much insight, I say bravo!
It takes courage to face mistakes and to try to change them. Well done!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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This was a beautifully written poem about childhood, with a personal invitation to peek imside. If therapy provides this much insight, I say bravo!
It takes courage to face mistakes and to try to change them. Well done!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of rhyming couplets
good alliteration in fan the flames that forced and frolicked in the freedom
effective simile in layers of the onion
effective imagery in your closing line that helps convey your thoughtful message :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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solid use of rhyming couplets
good alliteration in fan the flames that forced and frolicked in the freedom
effective simile in layers of the onion
effective imagery in your closing line that helps convey your thoughtful message :-) Brooke
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thanks for the detailed review.
Comment from Lysa Schuler
This was a beautiful poem, with a wonderful message. Meter and rhyme were timed well. The format made it easy to follow, and kept my attention entirely. Good writ. God bless.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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This was a beautiful poem, with a wonderful message. Meter and rhyme were timed well. The format made it easy to follow, and kept my attention entirely. Good writ. God bless.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you for reviewing. Glad it was easy to follow. I try not to be so abstract as to need translation.
Comment from seaglass
This poem's perfect rhyme and even meter is a pleasure to read. It describes the plight of those of us, including me, who missed childhood. Not all turn to alcohol or drugs, for me it was deep depression but healing comes eventually. Very nice and informative.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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This poem's perfect rhyme and even meter is a pleasure to read. It describes the plight of those of us, including me, who missed childhood. Not all turn to alcohol or drugs, for me it was deep depression but healing comes eventually. Very nice and informative.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review.
