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Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Hostages and Cargo Drops"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Comment from ragamuffin
So, the supplies were a rouse to dope folks up? Could make for an interesting "what happens next after the masses are subdued." Could even be a "what happens next after the subdued people come back into their right minds and think their supplies have been ripped off." Someone's game. Question is whose. Looking forward to reading more.
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So, the supplies were a rouse to dope folks up? Could make for an interesting "what happens next after the masses are subdued." Could even be a "what happens next after the subdued people come back into their right minds and think their supplies have been ripped off." Someone's game. Question is whose. Looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story. Johnny is learning some valuable lessons. The government is dropping fake recuse packages. It could be just because the government wants to save money , or they could be trying to large numbers if groups in one area. Johnny also learned he has to start making friends or start to kill people. Great work.
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I love the story. Johnny is learning some valuable lessons. The government is dropping fake recuse packages. It could be just because the government wants to save money , or they could be trying to large numbers if groups in one area. Johnny also learned he has to start making friends or start to kill people. Great work.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
Not sure where you are going. A lot of set up. A lot of angles to focus on. What about the prisoners? What's up with the fake food drops? Are the poisened people goners? There's mire!!! Hahaha. Okay. Do your thing. NG
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Not sure where you are going. A lot of set up. A lot of angles to focus on. What about the prisoners? What's up with the fake food drops? Are the poisened people goners? There's mire!!! Hahaha. Okay. Do your thing. NG
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
Comment from country ranch writer
A sentence that starts with everyone at the end it should say here to our aid. I feel your pain with the internet messing up a lot of us has had the same problems
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A sentence that starts with everyone at the end it should say here to our aid. I feel your pain with the internet messing up a lot of us has had the same problems
Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
Comment from seaglass
I'm a little confused why there were people lying around the cargo? Did I miss something? Wow, empty box, that's odd. Will be a mystery. wait and see.
I don't know how you write two plots at once. You must have a split brain. I can't think of but one at a time. You can get a lot done that way.
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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I'm a little confused why there were people lying around the cargo? Did I miss something? Wow, empty box, that's odd. Will be a mystery. wait and see.
I don't know how you write two plots at once. You must have a split brain. I can't think of but one at a time. You can get a lot done that way.
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Yeah. I'm not clear on that. The packages are booby trapped with something. That's why everyone is walking around in a daze and the people are down by the package and the guy is walking half out of it. I don't have any plots. Hahaha. Just vague ideas and what the reviewers have said. mikey
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Why would the planes go to all the trouble and waste fuel just to drop empty boxes? Sorry, Mikey, but it makes no sense. I guess you have an explanation, however, so I'll wait (impatiently) to see what it is. :)
Ma is right... do one or the other. But there IS an advantage in larger numbers.. also more chance of internal conflict and mutiny. Either way, there is danger.
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Why would the planes go to all the trouble and waste fuel just to drop empty boxes? Sorry, Mikey, but it makes no sense. I guess you have an explanation, however, so I'll wait (impatiently) to see what it is. :)
Ma is right... do one or the other. But there IS an advantage in larger numbers.. also more chance of internal conflict and mutiny. Either way, there is danger.
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2014
