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Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Plans Made and Set in Motion"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Comment from ragamuffin
Maybe the aliens aren't involved in this mess but helping by sending some dreams to a few? Would be terrible to have to "shoot to kill," but as I've said before, this is a great piece to sit and ponder on as to what you yourself might do given a survival situation.
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Maybe the aliens aren't involved in this mess but helping by sending some dreams to a few? Would be terrible to have to "shoot to kill," but as I've said before, this is a great piece to sit and ponder on as to what you yourself might do given a survival situation.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
Comment from Michaelk
Another great chapter. Great tension. I'm still not sure about Annie. Did she help or hinder? One other thing bothers me. Christine and Johnny had a conversation where they agreed to shoot to kill, yet as they are about to attack, Johnny says he would give them two seconds to surrender. Wouldn't that open the group up to defeat? If two or three people surrender in the middle of the fray, wouldn't it distract rather than help? Just sayin.
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Another great chapter. Great tension. I'm still not sure about Annie. Did she help or hinder? One other thing bothers me. Christine and Johnny had a conversation where they agreed to shoot to kill, yet as they are about to attack, Johnny says he would give them two seconds to surrender. Wouldn't that open the group up to defeat? If two or three people surrender in the middle of the fray, wouldn't it distract rather than help? Just sayin.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
Comment from Nosha17
Great chapter, full of excitement and sense of adventure. Your characters have all taken on a life of their own, individually. The story has a sense of direction and is developing at a fast rate, without leaving out the important elements essential to a story. Hope there aren't too many dead bodies! Faye
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Great chapter, full of excitement and sense of adventure. Your characters have all taken on a life of their own, individually. The story has a sense of direction and is developing at a fast rate, without leaving out the important elements essential to a story. Hope there aren't too many dead bodies! Faye
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
It is heating up again. You have a way of seeing far ahead. Even though this is write as you go, it still forms a direction in your mind that you may not even see. But, it shoes in the story. Lots of action with more to come. Questions to answer. No quick endins!! See it through. No huury!!! NG
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It is heating up again. You have a way of seeing far ahead. Even though this is write as you go, it still forms a direction in your mind that you may not even see. But, it shoes in the story. Lots of action with more to come. Questions to answer. No quick endins!! See it through. No huury!!! NG
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
Comment from seaglass
It a great plot. Can't wait to see where the bullets fell. Also it will be interesting to see if supplies are delivered via parachute.
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It a great plot. Can't wait to see where the bullets fell. Also it will be interesting to see if supplies are delivered via parachute.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
Comment from Sankey
Good stuff mate. Excitement, drama, and all that. Seems it pays to have folks helping with the story. I need toget back on mine when we get home.
One Spag ok!The(y) found Linda
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Good stuff mate. Excitement, drama, and all that. Seems it pays to have folks helping with the story. I need toget back on mine when we get home.
One Spag ok!The(y) found Linda
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this is the tuning point of the story and it's a toss up for met. Good cliff hanger and you've got about three good sub-plots going on. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this is the tuning point of the story and it's a toss up for met. Good cliff hanger and you've got about three good sub-plots going on. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
Comment from DonandVicki
An excellent continuation to your flash fiction story. Well composed and very good character development. Your story holds the readers attention Don and Vicki
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An excellent continuation to your flash fiction story. Well composed and very good character development. Your story holds the readers attention Don and Vicki
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
