An Unfinished Man
Thank God chicks dig scars. ;)45 total reviews
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the aabcbc rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with fan/can...cuts/guts. Good alliteration with drugged/dull...road/rashed...trace/trophies...sundry/scrapes...which/with/wild...scar/smile/speak. Good thought provoking message that holds my attention from start to finish.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Good use of the aabcbc rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with fan/can...cuts/guts. Good alliteration with drugged/dull...road/rashed...trace/trophies...sundry/scrapes...which/with/wild...scar/smile/speak. Good thought provoking message that holds my attention from start to finish.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much, RR.
Comment from dmt1967
I like the flow of this poem and the message behind it most people hide their scares and imperfections but if I understood this poem the poet is saying so what if I am imperfect deal with it nice thank you for sharing
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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I like the flow of this poem and the message behind it most people hide their scares and imperfections but if I understood this poem the poet is saying so what if I am imperfect deal with it nice thank you for sharing
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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That's sort of correct, dmt. It's also realizing that even the mistakes had value when looking back. I appreciate the great review.
Comment from Norbanus
This stir of rhyming form has caught my eye
not just a plain ol' AB scheme to try.
Reminded of my kinship to this man
I see those scraped retainers of the past
and markers of where each regret began
another Percodan and they won't last
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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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This stir of rhyming form has caught my eye
not just a plain ol' AB scheme to try.
Reminded of my kinship to this man
I see those scraped retainers of the past
and markers of where each regret began
another Percodan and they won't last
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Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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No, they won't, my friend, but I don't have a scrip for it. :) As always, I enjoy your poetic replies! Thank you.
Comment from judester
I like this. Solid writing recreating one man's journey reflected. I had to read twice to really appreciate. "Wouldn't give nothing for my journey now", Bravo, Judester
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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I like this. Solid writing recreating one man's journey reflected. I had to read twice to really appreciate. "Wouldn't give nothing for my journey now", Bravo, Judester
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Judester, many thanks for that sixer, and for taking the time to read it again. I was afraid the overall message might get lost here, but you nailed it. I appreciate it! David
Comment from 24chas
What an excellent and reflective poem, David, very personal, sad, and yet hopeful, too, as you're obviously not done yet. I like it a lot, my good man.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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What an excellent and reflective poem, David, very personal, sad, and yet hopeful, too, as you're obviously not done yet. I like it a lot, my good man.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014
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Thanks SO much, Chas, for that. I wasn't sure how this would be received!
