Comment from Andrewajgblue

Excellent

My goodness that was so scary it was brilliant , I really enjoyed it , the scary picture and the graphic at the end , the flow of the poem was brilliant ,really well done , I loved it thank you :)

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014

Thanks very much, Andrew, I'm very happy you liked this "crazy" thing.
Welcome to FanStory, my friend...

Comment from manicblue

Exceptional

Damn, Dean, this scared the bejeebers out of me! =:o

Good iambic tetrameter with the last stanza lines in trimeter. Spooky to the max. And how do you turn that music off - it scared my cat!

And the coup de gras, a looney bin employee (the doctor?) Argghh you got us all with this one. Great, great job.
Lucretia xx

 Comment Written 14-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014

Hah, thanks Lucretia (what an awesome, Gothic sounding name, very poetic!). Just hit the mute button on your computer, my dear friend. That will usually take care of it.

As far as that ending, well, I wanted those who read it to decide for themselves who they wanted it to be.

Thanks for such an encouraging review.

Comment from minopavlic

Excellent

A powerful statement is made within this thought provoking piece. All writing should leave some form of impact, and yours certainly has. The impact and meaning is in itself captivating. Well written, with a reality that threatens to jump off the page and drop kick you.

Given my own previous horrific lifestyle, we as human beings can venture to limits we never dreamed imaginable. Its all really a progression of our emotions, manifesting themselves into reality.

The plot had an intriguing ability to hold my interest from the opening to the finish. Your characterization is brilliantly crafted and realistically brought to life. Has all the makings of a powerful novel, and my friend, if anyone could weave it, I'm sure with the talent you've expressed within this piece, you certainly could.

Wish I had one, definitely worthy of a six and then some...Regards

No_obstacle

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014

Thank you for such an insightful review, No_obstacle. I sincerely appreciate that. No six necessary my friend, the fact that you enjoyed it is reward enough for me.

Pleasant screams...

reply by minopavlic on 14-Mar-2014

Amen to that brother.

Comment from JM daSilva

Excellent

Yeah, the loony bin is a crazy place, isn't it? No monsters can be more horrible than the ones produced by the human mind.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014

Isn't that the ever lovin' truth? Ted Bundy, Jeffery Dahmer, Richard Trenton Chase, Albet Fish, Andrei Chikatilo ... These are the real lunatics and monsters. The ones I make up pale in comparison.

Thanks, JM. I see you've posted something new. I'll be having a go at it shortly.

reply by JM daSilva on 13-Mar-2014

I won't post much because of my busy schedule, and I'm editing a book by a writer, plus my own, but I won't forget you guys. I'll always do plenty of reviews now, even though I'll post less. I have a destination for those monsters in my future writing, you'll see.

reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014

I'll be waiting.
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Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Heh heh ... indeed! How do you do it, Dean?

I'd be afraid to pitch a tent in your head - even if I won a free weekend for two to go there .... that's a compliment, I suppose!!

I so appreciate the new format - nice, eye-friendly sized font.

Nicely done, my friend.

Sonali



(Loony)-bin- (no e)

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014

Hah, well. thank you Reach (I think?), I wouldn't recommend it.

I'm glad you liked the new formatting. Tom suggested I try and work on it, so I have. Fanstory's new formatting editors have helped immensely, too.

I appreciate the review, as always, my friend!

reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014

World English Dictionary
loony, looney or luny ('nɪ)

- adj , loonier , looniest , lunier , luniest
1. lunatic; insane

2. foolish or ridiculous

- n , loonier . looniest , lunier , luniest , loonies , looneys , lunies

3. a foolish or insane person
looney , looney or luny

Looks like we're both right.
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reply by Selina Stambi on 13-Mar-2014

My dic.'s the Websters - just one spelling:) Okay! :) :)

reply by Selina Stambi on 13-Mar-2014

Now if only Tom would stop all those many daily site maintenance breaks .. this would be a perfect space!

reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014

Just think of bugs bunny, the coyote and all them fellas,or: the "Looney Tunes". Both spellings are very common, though.

Thanks again, Reach. You are a gem!

Comment from TELLER OF TALES

Excellent

To the author I say that this is the very first time that I have read a wonderful piece of this nature, being that I write fiction , I say that it is excellent truly wonderful and the effects are extraordinary, very imaginative and sends chills up your spine as I read.....a piece that can cause that effect is very powerful...

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014

The very first, TELLER OF TALES? That's quite a statement. However, I shall take you at your word, my friend. My poetic ventures are a bit...different.

The fact that I accomplished sending chills up your spine pleases me immensely. It means I have done what I had set out to do. Horrify someone.

As always, I appreciate the kind remarks. Thanks for giving my work a try.

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Dear Dean - crap stop scaring the heck out of me! I can hear you laughing too you bugger!
Your post packs a punch with great images and solid rhyme - on the serious side I wonder what kind of torture the mind must weave through in such a place of insanity. For me this is powerful - but then I am a marshmallow and scare easy. Great writing as always and now the music is killing me - gotta go.
Thanks for sharing - not!
Maureen

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014

Hah, thanks, Maureen...I think? No, I'm only kidding, I do thank you. The fact that you read my posts, even though the genre isn't exactly your cup of tea, and you pretty much know what you're getting into...sort of- makes me appreciate your reads & reviews all the more.

Comment from Writingfundimension

Excellent

Dean, your words and imagery strike real fear into my heart! Wow, you do amazing things with horror poetry, and I can say you are the master of it on this site. Thank, I think LoL. Bev

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014

Thanks, Bev, coming from you, that means a lot. The only reason I haven't followed your "MOON" novels isn't because I wouldn't like to, I would. But, I missed so much of the beginning that I feel I'd be ripping you off giving you a review about a story I know virtually nothing about. I just wanted you to know that. I wish I had time to to go back to chapter one, and start from the beginning. The time just isn't there.

Thanks for the fabulous review. It's always nice hearing from you!

reply by Writingfundimension on 13-Mar-2014

See, Dean, that's why I have always considered you a real gentleman -- because you would take time to be honest with me about that. And I fully understand about time. There are so many good writers, and I follow a lot of them, so something's gotta give.

Have a good weekend, my friend.

Warmest regards, Bev

reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014

You do the same, Bev.

Comment from DR DIP

Exceptional

I love that style of rhyme for straight away i have the rhythm you wanted it to be read in.
this my friend after I climbed back out from under the bed..is absolutely fky brilliant..your poem writing just festers a puss of awesomeness every time..YOUR PICTURES are another genre another magnificent yet spectacle within itself
your productions are "Kucho and then daylight" in the fanstory race of poets to indelibly remember.
you continually inspire me master splinter my respect for you as a writer and more significantly a "HORROR POET" just grows and grows..if I could give a 7 for this masterpiece of shitscaredness I would.
but at the moment under the bed awaits me..For i lie in a petrified state of fear, awe, envy and admiration

as always your partner in rhyme

dipster (6+1) rating!!!

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2014

Shitscaredness [shit-sac-red-ness]- The act of being scared shitless ...

Hah! Believe me when I tell you this, dip. I'm gonna use that term in a story sometime. I don't know when, I don't know where-- but I know I will. That was figgin' priceless! I'm really glad you liked this "crazy" thing. And your work inspires me as well.

Thanks for the belly laugh, and the awesome review!