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Sonnet28 total reviews
Comment from Sankey
You did this a long tie ago. had it in my book case sorry so long getting here. Trying to get up to next Reviewing level glad I found this. Good story love the artwork. Presume a failed love tryst ha!
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You did this a long tie ago. had it in my book case sorry so long getting here. Trying to get up to next Reviewing level glad I found this. Good story love the artwork. Presume a failed love tryst ha!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
This is flawless in rhythym and form. A story as well. I didnot see the shockinng concousion coming. Nice to see a departure from the typical subject matter. Well done!. NG
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This is flawless in rhythym and form. A story as well. I didnot see the shockinng concousion coming. Nice to see a departure from the typical subject matter. Well done!. NG
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
Comment from amanda98653
Superb work, Mikey :) very menacing. Really like the overall effects of assonance and alliteration. Vacancy just kills you, doesn't it?
You know I'm not much for sonnets. Tried to write one before (the Phoenix poem) and I struggled for hours.
Well, at least I tried.
Hugs
Amanda
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Superb work, Mikey :) very menacing. Really like the overall effects of assonance and alliteration. Vacancy just kills you, doesn't it?
You know I'm not much for sonnets. Tried to write one before (the Phoenix poem) and I struggled for hours.
Well, at least I tried.
Hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
Comment from Patti R.
As far as I can tell
As far as I can spit -
A sonnet you have written
There's no denying it!
I enjoyed this, especially the final couplet with its nasty twist. Perfecto!
patti
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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As far as I can tell
As far as I can spit -
A sonnet you have written
There's no denying it!
I enjoyed this, especially the final couplet with its nasty twist. Perfecto!
patti
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Yea! It really is a sonnet. Yeah. A little bit odd on the subject matter. Ha! Thank you kindly. :)) mikey
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Well, once I wrote a sonnet about a cow's love for grass ... it didn't go over too well, but I though my form was excellent!
Comment from Spitfire
Congratulations for trying this difficult form. I can't get it right, so I keep this review to the poem's emotions. My problem is- if you're dead, how can you write this? Totally unprepared for the violent ending. You're weird. :-)
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Congratulations for trying this difficult form. I can't get it right, so I keep this review to the poem's emotions. My problem is- if you're dead, how can you write this? Totally unprepared for the violent ending. You're weird. :-)
Comment Written 10-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Hahaha. I figured You'd be the only one sharp enough to catch that!!! mikey
Comment from TAB_that's me
Well I'm not good at forms so I don't know much about sonnets BUT... this is great. Great story. Good luck in the contest:)
Teresa
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Well I'm not good at forms so I don't know much about sonnets BUT... this is great. Great story. Good luck in the contest:)
Teresa
Comment Written 09-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Thank you! I think I finally got one right. mikey
Comment from country ranch writer
TO ACT LIKE A FOOL ONE DIES LIKE ONE, I WOULD SAY OFF HAD THAT MAN HAD REVENGE ON HIS MIND DON'T YOU FOR MESSING AROUND WITH HIS CROWN JEWELS
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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TO ACT LIKE A FOOL ONE DIES LIKE ONE, I WOULD SAY OFF HAD THAT MAN HAD REVENGE ON HIS MIND DON'T YOU FOR MESSING AROUND WITH HIS CROWN JEWELS
Comment Written 09-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Yep. It never pays unless lead is a payment!!
Comment from Ted T
Hi :)
Great piece, well written.
Good luck with the contest.
My extra words are there to please the system.
Forgive me if I don't go into detail about the structure and format of your work.
It's not for me to say.
I don't presume to judge a poets style, the words and work are from the heart and should be left alone.
If I didn't like what you wrote, I wouldn't respond to it.
That's good enough for me and other writers will share the same comments.
Good job,
Ted
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Hi :)
Great piece, well written.
Good luck with the contest.
My extra words are there to please the system.
Forgive me if I don't go into detail about the structure and format of your work.
It's not for me to say.
I don't presume to judge a poets style, the words and work are from the heart and should be left alone.
If I didn't like what you wrote, I wouldn't respond to it.
That's good enough for me and other writers will share the same comments.
Good job,
Ted
Comment Written 09-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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So pleased to hear positive comments. I've been trying for a while to get one of these right. Thank you very much, mikey
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You're most welcome :)
Comment from Dawn Munro
Yikes! Intense and sad, but very, very well-done, Michael. "I sadly sing of love our former song..." << and with it, haunt you all the whole night long! The thing is, it happens, more often than we realize.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Yikes! Intense and sad, but very, very well-done, Michael. "I sadly sing of love our former song..." << and with it, haunt you all the whole night long! The thing is, it happens, more often than we realize.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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Hey! Nice couplet!! It only took me since I first signed up, but I finally got one right. Yeah, kinda morbid, huh? Okay, now I'll work on content. mikey
Comment from lancellot
A very deep write. The first part was sad but the second was downright tragic. You done a great job and you skill as story telling in any more is expanding by leaps and bounds. Well done.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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A very deep write. The first part was sad but the second was downright tragic. You done a great job and you skill as story telling in any more is expanding by leaps and bounds. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
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I can't tell you how pleased I am you liked it. I've been trying to write one of these since I've been here. I'm stubborn! You've made my night. Thank you very much. mikey
