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Comment from rod007
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A great piece that depicts our origins and here we will ultimately be. The words original origins makes the point in a very telling way. Well done, Tom.

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 10-Mar-2014
    Thank you rod. Yes, a Tautology.
Comment from robina1978
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Has it been Ash Wednesday or is that still to come. I like your poem and foot note: ashes to ashes and dust to dust. Well said and a great picture.

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
    Thank you Ine, it was last Wednesday.
Comment from Preston McWhorter
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Hi, Treischel,
"Ash Wednesday" is excellent short poem with internal rhyme and alliteration. It flows well. Original origins is a tautology.
Preston

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 08-Mar-2014
    Thank you Preston. Indeed it is.
Comment from CornishChick
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Tom, this is superb. How can you say so much with so little? Absolutely LOVED your beginning: A dash of ash. Love, love, love it!

Your poems are so cool!

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thank you. Did you mean is award it a 4 rank?
reply by CornishChick on 07-Mar-2014
    no.... thank you for replying about that. I meant to hit FIVE and didn't know how to fix it. so sorry!!
Comment from RGstar
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Or reminds of that which we would rather not be reminded of.
It seems ashes serves only one purpose in thought.
A nice portrayal of worth here Treischel,
Best wishes,
RG

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thank you RG,
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
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Three lines, ten words -and yet bearing spiritual significant and evoking memories of our spiritual beginnings.
A spiritual poem as we approach the time of Lent in our religious lives.
Thoughtful.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thank you Shirley. A time for reflection.
Comment from sunnilicious
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The holy season is here. It is quite spiritual period of time. I don't see people wearing ash around Seattle. My mother was cremated. She is now ashes too. Creative poem with good visual imagery. Nice work.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thank you Alicia. Yes, not many around here any more either.
Comment from ProjectBluebook
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I do know, I was babtized catholic and went to a catholic school from K-8th grade. This is aquickie but gets my respect. Nicely done, mate.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thank you Wackydo. Yup, me too through HS, I even took 4 years of Latin.
reply by ProjectBluebook on 07-Mar-2014
    Savvy ...
Comment from Dean Kuch
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Yep, from dust we were created, and to dust we will return once more. During early times of Ash Wednesday, ashes and sackcloths were used as severe penance due to grave sin. Ashes, mixed with sackcloths represented a gruesome image of penance and humiliation; a form of penitence associated with those who violated Canon Law in the early church.

Nice work, Tom. Good way to bring the season to light!

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thank you Dean for the review and your perpective on it.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
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Dear Tom - nice play with words and in a simple format yet powerful sentiment.
Nicely penned my friend.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2014


reply by the author on 07-Mar-2014
    Thank you Maureen for your astute review.