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Comment from Lovinia
Hi Debbie
I know how closely you worked with Alvin. His loss must be especially deep for you. My heart goes ot to you and of course to all who feel pain at his loss.
Your tribute is beautifully presented. Your tanka expresses a huge part of who he was. To many of us, affectionately known as "Teach" we knew his passion to teach, guide, encourage and support us in our own love for these Japanese forms. While he also was a master at the sonnet, his greatest rewards seem to come from teaching the Japanese aesthetic and how to work within the traditional and contemporary guidelines of the forms. You have described in your tanka the essence of his spirit as a mentor and teacher. He simply 'glowed' when one of his students published.
Good alliteration in "talented/thrived/teaching", "student/submit" and the add of 's' consonance in "loss/students/us/works", consonance of 'l' in "loss/talented", assonance of 'u' - "courage/submit/publication", near sound of soft 'o' in "mourning/loss/courage". Loads of poetic technique and a fine honour to our dear Alvin. Hugs - Lovi xoxox
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Hi Debbie
I know how closely you worked with Alvin. His loss must be especially deep for you. My heart goes ot to you and of course to all who feel pain at his loss.
Your tribute is beautifully presented. Your tanka expresses a huge part of who he was. To many of us, affectionately known as "Teach" we knew his passion to teach, guide, encourage and support us in our own love for these Japanese forms. While he also was a master at the sonnet, his greatest rewards seem to come from teaching the Japanese aesthetic and how to work within the traditional and contemporary guidelines of the forms. You have described in your tanka the essence of his spirit as a mentor and teacher. He simply 'glowed' when one of his students published.
Good alliteration in "talented/thrived/teaching", "student/submit" and the add of 's' consonance in "loss/students/us/works", consonance of 'l' in "loss/talented", assonance of 'u' - "courage/submit/publication", near sound of soft 'o' in "mourning/loss/courage". Loads of poetic technique and a fine honour to our dear Alvin. Hugs - Lovi xoxox
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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He touched so many of us, a true and kind fiend. He will be missed~Debbie
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is the exact record of just what he did for all of us.... a lovely tanka written in tribute to a wonderful poet who taught us to love our craft. Well oone, Debbie. Giddy
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This is the exact record of just what he did for all of us.... a lovely tanka written in tribute to a wonderful poet who taught us to love our craft. Well oone, Debbie. Giddy
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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He touched so many of us, a true and kind fiend. He will be missed~Debbie
Comment from royowen
Such a wonderfully penned tribute to someone who was quite obviously loved! You have eloquently made a touching testament to a friend and mentor. Well done, Debbie, Roy.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Such a wonderfully penned tribute to someone who was quite obviously loved! You have eloquently made a touching testament to a friend and mentor. Well done, Debbie, Roy.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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He touched so many of us, a true and kind fiend. He will be missed~Debbie
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a beautiful tanka tribute to alvin, debbie, and the lessons that we learned from him through his teaching and encouragement. i enjoyed reading this one.....
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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this is a beautiful tanka tribute to alvin, debbie, and the lessons that we learned from him through his teaching and encouragement. i enjoyed reading this one.....
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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He touched so many of us, a true and kind fiend. He will be missed~Debbie
Comment from l.raven
HI Debbie, it is so sad that he is no longer with us...he was a great guy...and never was my teacher...but I hear a great teacher...he will truly be missed...may he rest in peace....very well written
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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HI Debbie, it is so sad that he is no longer with us...he was a great guy...and never was my teacher...but I hear a great teacher...he will truly be missed...may he rest in peace....very well written
Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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He touched so many of us, a true and kind fiend. He will be missed~Debbie
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yea he will...xxoo
Comment from Nichola
This is a heart felt poem about someone truly missed. Your poem is in good Tanka form and expresses fond feelings. I can tell by your poem, that Alvin had a positive impact.
Nichola
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This is a heart felt poem about someone truly missed. Your poem is in good Tanka form and expresses fond feelings. I can tell by your poem, that Alvin had a positive impact.
Nichola
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Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
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He touched so many of us, a true and kind fiend. He will be missed~Debbie
Comment from judester
Such a heartfelt eulogy. I can see that he truly touched so many lives and left a wonderful gift of writing with courage, great work, cheers Judester
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Such a heartfelt eulogy. I can see that he truly touched so many lives and left a wonderful gift of writing with courage, great work, cheers Judester
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Comment Written 07-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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He touched so many of us, a true and kind fiend. He will be missed~Debbie
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I know that you meant to write friend, cheers Judester
