Comment from TOMORAL

Excellent

God, our Almighty Protector, keeps us safe and sound while we sleep. I know first hand. This is a brilliant little piece and I enjoyed the message.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014

Dear TOMORAL ...thanks you for your wonderful review and encouraging remarks! Vance

Comment from MelissaBickel

Excellent

The one think I've grown to appreciate about these short poems is the impact they can have on people when done right. This is one powerful shorty which gives one pause, well some I'd say :)

Well done Vance!

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014

Dear , I agree and have usually ignored these short ones but thought it was time for some broader (no make that narrower) thinking. Always appreciate hearing from you..deep respect and many thanks! Vance

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

Poor Darkness, always get a bad rap. Nice title, though it's when I write a lot of poetry. Like how you conclude it with the last two lines. Even in sleep we're safe with faith. Enjoyed scream, and the message. Les

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014

Well Les, you know nature says all things must have an opposite so the darkness is outa here in my book...well unless we are talking chocolate orf ice cream! Thanks for the kind review! Vance

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Darkness screams "Satan"
Be then sound asleep with God
It will not matter

Being sound asleep with God protects you from many things. What a wonderful write you.

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014

AW..wow...dear Gungalo..so honored to hear from you and thanks so much for the encouragement...Vance

reply by Gungalo on 02-Mar-2014

Smile.

Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

Darkness screams "Satan"
Be then sound asleep with God
It will not matter
Perfect syllable count 5-7-5 for the haiku form

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014

Dear emrpoems: thanks so much for your kind review Vance

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Second review - perfect syllables now Vance:) Bumped you to five stars
Hugs
M

First Review 4

Dear Vance - great descriptive imagery - I have a 6 count on line two ? Maybe have another look at it. I'll re-review once revised.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

"Darkness screams "Satan" 5
Be sound asleep with God 6 // needs another syllable.
It will not matter" 5

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 Comment Written 02-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014

Dear Maureen....thanks so much for this, I was talking to someone while posting this and did not double check!! Many thanks dear friend..much appreciated! Vance