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Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Adri7enne
"Leave it to Christine to raise the MORAL." MORALE??
"I know that in what 'once was the real world', THAT I craved ..." Close quote marks and remove second THAT.
You're telling a story with an interesting situation. I think you have a good mix of characters.
You tend to switch from present tense to past tense in narration, especially in the first half of the chapter. Also, the voice seems to change completely in the second part. Almost as if written by a different author. LOL!
Well done in describing the different reactions to the death. Very poetic.
A good read, Mikey.
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Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
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