The Case of Pig Number Three
a fairy tale with a clue27 total reviews
Comment from tony bronk
Where is my six when I need it? This poem/story is just lovely, witty, and funny, and don't leave out imaginative and clever. Chuckle Chuckle. I picked up on a 10-12 syllable count, and your rhyme scheme worked well. A smooth meter flow. Good write.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Where is my six when I need it? This poem/story is just lovely, witty, and funny, and don't leave out imaginative and clever. Chuckle Chuckle. I picked up on a 10-12 syllable count, and your rhyme scheme worked well. A smooth meter flow. Good write.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Tony Bronk!. I am delighted that you liked this poem well enough to consider giving it a six star rating. Yes, I tried to remain true to the fairy tale. I know it is mostly told in prose, but I tried to use the same syllable count 10-10-12-12 as the verse:
"Little pig, little pig, let me come in
Not by the hair of my chiny-chin-chin
Then I'll huff and I'll puff and I'll blow your house in
And he huffed and he puffed and he blew the house in."
Thanks for noticing. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from MoIronE13
That is just precious..
Good old Columbo asking all the right questions.
Say was he smoking a cigar??...LOL
I love the build up of the alibi Finishing off with pork stew.
Bravo bravo..
Most excellent write..
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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That is just precious..
Good old Columbo asking all the right questions.
Say was he smoking a cigar??...LOL
I love the build up of the alibi Finishing off with pork stew.
Bravo bravo..
Most excellent write..
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Hi MolronE,
Wow, I am flattered that you liked this so well that you gave it six stars!
I do like Columbo. Yep, I picture him with the cigar, the old beat up car and that signature trench coat. Thank you for such an encouraging review. Debi
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It is my pleasure to give you a deserved 6er..
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Pork stew, where does it come from ,eh
Well, there is the clue.
I love the story. I feel like a old child listening. I am all eats.
Lovely
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Pork stew, where does it come from ,eh
Well, there is the clue.
I love the story. I feel like a old child listening. I am all eats.
Lovely
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Hi Benny Beeharry,
I wonder when Columbo gets around to testing the DNA if the stew will match the missing pig. hmmm. Probably.
I am so pleased that you enjoyed this bit of nonsense. Thank you for a wonderful review. Debi
Comment from tfawcus
Lovely! Reminds me of that wonderful series of children's stories, "Polly and the Stupid Wolf". You do tell these stories well. If they give children as much pleasure as they give me, you are on a winner!
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Lovely! Reminds me of that wonderful series of children's stories, "Polly and the Stupid Wolf". You do tell these stories well. If they give children as much pleasure as they give me, you are on a winner!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Hi tfawcus,
I don't know the "Polly and the Stupid Wolf" series, but I will have to look it up. I am so pleased that you enjoyed reading this. Thank you for the kind review and encouraging comments. Debi
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You'll just love them! They are brilliant! Written by Catherine Storr.
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with hall/call...trick/brick...go/so. Good description and alliteration. Good story telling mixed with humor. Good complimentary photo followed by a story that holds my attention from start to finish.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with hall/call...trick/brick...go/so. Good description and alliteration. Good story telling mixed with humor. Good complimentary photo followed by a story that holds my attention from start to finish.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Righteous Riter. I appreciate the close analysis. I am so pleased that the you enjoyed the story. Thanks for the encouraging comments. Debi
Comment from michaelcahill
I wonder how many of the readers are familiar with Columbo? You have the flavor of his character to a tee. I used to watch it all the time. You nailed it. A very entertaining and perfectly flowing write. Perfect story in a poem with a killer tag line!! HAhaha. Pork stew. Classic. Good luck. Not many I've read are actual stories with a beginning, middle and end. mikey
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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I wonder how many of the readers are familiar with Columbo? You have the flavor of his character to a tee. I used to watch it all the time. You nailed it. A very entertaining and perfectly flowing write. Perfect story in a poem with a killer tag line!! HAhaha. Pork stew. Classic. Good luck. Not many I've read are actual stories with a beginning, middle and end. mikey
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Hi Mikey,
I've met very few people who don't know who Columbo is, no matter their age. Columbo seems to be the iconic detective. Maybe it's all the reruns, or maybe the fact that he is set apart by the fact the fun is not seeing him figure out who did it. He seems to know that at the very beginning, the fun is how will he get the murders to trip themselves up?
Thanks for the very nice review. I am very complimented that you think I nailed Columbo's character. I am so happy you enjoyed reading this nonsense and especially that tag line. Thanks for the good wishes. I appreciate it. Debi
Comment from DonandVicki
A witty twist on the old three little pigs childrens story. Good structure with good rhythm and rhyme. Reads a lot like a sonnet. Don
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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A witty twist on the old three little pigs childrens story. Good structure with good rhythm and rhyme. Reads a lot like a sonnet. Don
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Don. A sonnet? I was just thinking of the rhyme and rhyme in the verse within the story
Little pig, little pig let me come in
Not by the hair of my chiny-chin-chin
Then I'll huff and I'll puff and I'll blow your house in
And he huffed and he puffed and he blew the house in
I appreciate the gracious remarks about the rhythm and rhyme. I am so pleased you enjoyed the story. Thank you. Debi
Comment from krys123
You wrote down in the fourth line: "they're pointing (as) us"
Instead of (at) us!!! I found your poem to be very amusing especially at the end. It seemed that pigs were not firing on all cylinders. Are they were quite mentally cumbersome. The characters were written very well and story-line was excellent. The rhymes are neither forced, labored or strained while the rhythm float very smoothly throughout the poem. Thank you so much for sharing and posting this poem for everyone. May you have a good one and God bless.
Alex
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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You wrote down in the fourth line: "they're pointing (as) us"
Instead of (at) us!!! I found your poem to be very amusing especially at the end. It seemed that pigs were not firing on all cylinders. Are they were quite mentally cumbersome. The characters were written very well and story-line was excellent. The rhymes are neither forced, labored or strained while the rhythm float very smoothly throughout the poem. Thank you so much for sharing and posting this poem for everyone. May you have a good one and God bless.
Alex
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thank you for catching that mistake, Alex. I read the poem through so many times and missed that. I have changed the work to "at".
Thank you for commenting on the characters and the story-line. I appreciate the encouraging review. Debi
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You are so welcome Debbi and I'm somewhat the same way, I could read a poem so many times and can still miss a simple error.
Alex
Comment from ennahanid
I read it quietly and raised a smile then a little unsatisfied I read it again, this time out loud and I am still sitting here with a gurgling chuckle and a stupid grin on my face. Love it and wish you luck in the contest - I can't get this grin of my face that last lines was a real 'porker'.
Many thanks - Dinah
They're pointing as us - at us???????perhaps
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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I read it quietly and raised a smile then a little unsatisfied I read it again, this time out loud and I am still sitting here with a gurgling chuckle and a stupid grin on my face. Love it and wish you luck in the contest - I can't get this grin of my face that last lines was a real 'porker'.
Many thanks - Dinah
They're pointing as us - at us???????perhaps
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Dinah. I appreciate you catching the mistake. I did mean "at". I read this so many times looking for errors that I can't believe I missed it. I have corrected it. Thank you.
I am so pleased that you found the poem funny and it made you chuckle. Love the humor in you "porker" comment. Thank you for the good luck wishes. Debi
Comment from Donald O. Cassidy
So, Pig Number Three ended up in the pot of scrumptious stew, if I read this right.
Clever twist.
It's a twist of another kind about adapting other stories. For example, "Little Red Riding Hood,", the wolf in sheep's clothing.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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So, Pig Number Three ended up in the pot of scrumptious stew, if I read this right.
Clever twist.
It's a twist of another kind about adapting other stories. For example, "Little Red Riding Hood,", the wolf in sheep's clothing.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2014
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Thank you, stumbly. Yep, that is most likely where pig number three ended up. I'll bet Columbo took that evidence they handed over in the stew and had it analyzed. I wonder what the DNA will turn up?
Thank you for your wonderful review. Debi
