Comment from MONTANA SNOW

Excellent

You are very talented. I enjoyed your writing. Always remember you are entitled to your opinion. I think you bring out the human nature in us all. It is good we have lawyers to take care of our differences, yes? Lawyers,thats another story.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

Thank you very much, Montana! I really appreciate your great review. Hmmm...for lawyers, maybe quatrain four is the right thing to do with them. ;-)

Comment from Sylvia Page

Excellent

Boxing gloves & Knives, guns and oh God what's the fuss about?
If there are issues to discuss,
Please ask me what I think.
If our discussions raise a fuss,
Then offer me a drink?
Cheers
Sylvia

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

Thanks so much, Sylvia!

Comment from bhogg

Excellent

I enjoyed your post . A fun, easy to read discussion on how disagreement can escalate. The meter and rhyme scheme really pulls your reader through quickly. Bill

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

Thanks so much, Bill. I appreciate the review!

Comment from califdot

Excellent

I really like your poem. It is nicely written and very well done. Your abab rhyme pattern works well with your poem and aids with the strength of the cadence that is heard when it is read out loud.The poetic devices you have used in this poem are very well done. You have done a great job. Overall the poem is written very well indeed!

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

Thank you very much, califdot! I appreciate your review.

Comment from Woman~Loved

Poor

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 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

Hey you! Thanks so much, my friend, for the great review. Looks like the length of your review just make it under the wire. :)

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

LOL. . .

Great dissertation
on stages of escalation!
On the construction side
the meter and rhyme
mirror fine perfection.

Nice write! Enjoyed the read :-)

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

Nice poetic reply, my friend. Thanks so much!

Comment from padumachitta

Excellent

Hi.. I was having fun untilthe end...then I though about how there are more hand guns than people in the USA and got all urgh.
Oh well...still liked the poem.

But if, by then, we're still at odds,
And live to kill the lesson,
We'll give our grievance to the gods
Of Colt and Smith & Wesson.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

Pad, that was exactly the point, my friend...and it SHOULD make you go all "urgh". Thank you! D

reply by padumachitta on 26-Feb-2014

Hi...I hate guns...I really do...and unless one has been pointed at you, it's hard to explain just how ugly they are at close range...
I hope lots of people read you poem and I hope they go all urgh too:-)

reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

So do I, my friend.

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

LOL! Seems to be pro war though. Why can't man just agree that they will always disagree and be done with it. Why does everyone think they are right? How about a game of chess?
That is how disagreements can escalate into a very bad situation. What's the answer? Well done David. Nancy

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

Actually, it's not pro-war, Nancy. It's satirizing the idea of escalation through the idiot narrating the poem, so you have the right of it when you ask those questions. Thanks so much! D

reply by nancy_e_davis on 26-Feb-2014

What I meant is that is how wars start. Not that you were promoting war.I often express my thoughts badly.

reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

Gotcha! I thought you had it, based on your last comment, but I wasn't sure. Thanks! D

Comment from Dom G Robles

Excellent

Nice poem. I like the rhyme and rhythm. However, I think, the
writer is tops capable of improving the poem so it would shine better. It could twinkle as a star. I am referring to the last stanza wherein the gun Colt and Wesson is attributed to, and the Lesson...I think it rhymes well, but my problem is: "And live to kill the lesson..." it is flat and it isn't cool. This my own thinking...

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

Thanks, Dom. Opinions vary, and I actually think that's the strongest part of the poem, so ours differs here. I appreciate your thoughts.

Comment from buzclick

Excellent

Wait! You mean this not pro-guns. Well, that's all I can say, well.
I thought your words were a reenactment of Leaders who choose war to stop the war. I mean fight for the right and choose you right to die.
Enough of that crap.
The escalations in your poem left out the laugh and saying the old line. "Fool bringing a knife to a gun fight."

Glad your doing well keep it up.

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

Thanks so much, buzclick. I do love that saying, though I've altered it to bringing a BB gun to a bazooka fight. ;-)

reply by buzclick on 26-Feb-2014

Yea, fools fight I just use a Scud missile.

reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014

Unfortunately, their inaccuracy could kill friend as well as foe.