Ichabod
Poem about Ichabod from the 1 Samuel 4: 21-2225 total reviews
Comment from bard owl
Your poem is very thought-provoking. Until I read your "Ichabod", the only Ichabod I knew of was in the Legend of Sleepy Hollow. The poem describes misery at it's worst, being an "unacceptable abomination" and cursed to walk in the desert, alone with solitary thoughts for the rest of his life. Very clear and disturbing imagery. A poem to think about. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Your poem is very thought-provoking. Until I read your "Ichabod", the only Ichabod I knew of was in the Legend of Sleepy Hollow. The poem describes misery at it's worst, being an "unacceptable abomination" and cursed to walk in the desert, alone with solitary thoughts for the rest of his life. Very clear and disturbing imagery. A poem to think about. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 06-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2014
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Thank you Linda.
Comment from Alanna Renee
This is very descriptive with some beautiful language in it. I stumbled toward the end when the rhyming couplets turned into stanzas of three lines each with no rhyme. Some of my favorites were: "this unacceptable abomination will walk these flesh-searing,desert sands of an unforgiving nation", and "the very scourge of God". Good job. :) Alanna
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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This is very descriptive with some beautiful language in it. I stumbled toward the end when the rhyming couplets turned into stanzas of three lines each with no rhyme. Some of my favorites were: "this unacceptable abomination will walk these flesh-searing,desert sands of an unforgiving nation", and "the very scourge of God". Good job. :) Alanna
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you for the advice Alanna.
Comment from Adri7enne
Well inspired, Justin. I wondered whether your story was true, of Ichabod dying in the desert. Thanks for the notes.
"So I LAY in wait for the night." LIE in wait????
Well done. I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Well inspired, Justin. I wondered whether your story was true, of Ichabod dying in the desert. Thanks for the notes.
"So I LAY in wait for the night." LIE in wait????
Well done. I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you for the review Adrienne. And yes It should be lie in wait.
Comment from billscott
Interesting account from your imagination.
Loved the inevitable mental and emotional fall described.
I wonder if it did happen for Ichabod this way.
Interesting work
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Interesting account from your imagination.
Loved the inevitable mental and emotional fall described.
I wonder if it did happen for Ichabod this way.
Interesting work
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you for the kind review bill. I have no idea what actually happened to the real Ichabod because the Bible only mentions him maybe once or twice. But I was just betting that his life didn't turn out well based on what his name meant and I combined that with the unrelenting saga of Job and arrived at this melodramatic Biblically based character.
Comment from Orphan33
Really enjoyed reading about Ichabod. I really appreciate the author notes. Wish more writers would utilize this space. It is very beneficial. Congratulations on being "Recognized" by FanStory. This is very deserving.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Really enjoyed reading about Ichabod. I really appreciate the author notes. Wish more writers would utilize this space. It is very beneficial. Congratulations on being "Recognized" by FanStory. This is very deserving.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you very much Orphan.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Justin Chopin,
One can only feel sympathy for the likes of Ichabod, many victims of genetic mutations, or simply illness not understood by their fellows.
Nicely covered in your poem.
Patrick
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Hi Justin Chopin,
One can only feel sympathy for the likes of Ichabod, many victims of genetic mutations, or simply illness not understood by their fellows.
Nicely covered in your poem.
Patrick
Comment Written 27-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you Patric.
Comment from padumachitta
Hello. a strong poem with strong unsettling images. i do not know the bible well, but can feel the pain of this poor soul.
it seems so unrelenting, oh well, it made me read a few times..from the poem i do not understand why compassion and understanding of one man's plight is needed.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Hello. a strong poem with strong unsettling images. i do not know the bible well, but can feel the pain of this poor soul.
it seems so unrelenting, oh well, it made me read a few times..from the poem i do not understand why compassion and understanding of one man's plight is needed.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2014
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Thank you Padu.
Comment from DonandVicki
A very well constructed poetic verse about a character in the Bible. Well metered and the rhythm and rhyme work well. Don
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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A very well constructed poetic verse about a character in the Bible. Well metered and the rhythm and rhyme work well. Don
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Thank you Don .
Comment from Petriesan
very well drawn piece
I liked the thoughts expressed very much
what do we do when rejected?
So now, I, Ichabod, this unacceptable abomination. - chilling line
good piece
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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very well drawn piece
I liked the thoughts expressed very much
what do we do when rejected?
So now, I, Ichabod, this unacceptable abomination. - chilling line
good piece
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Thank you Petriesan
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
An interesting poem telling a story that I knew nothing about. I knew the name Ichabod but did not know it meant Disgrace, or the story that went with him. Written in mainly rhyming couplets and you put your story forward very well. I enjoyed he read. A very dramatic, well written final two stanzas. Regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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An interesting poem telling a story that I knew nothing about. I knew the name Ichabod but did not know it meant Disgrace, or the story that went with him. Written in mainly rhyming couplets and you put your story forward very well. I enjoyed he read. A very dramatic, well written final two stanzas. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Thank you Dorothy
