I've Lost My Brother!
Where has Tommy gone?35 total reviews
Comment from Gungalo
An awesome story Sandra!! Those who would find the elves have a forever something to share.
The three friends all promised. "We would never tell anyone. We truly promise you that, not even our best friends!"
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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An awesome story Sandra!! Those who would find the elves have a forever something to share.
The three friends all promised. "We would never tell anyone. We truly promise you that, not even our best friends!"
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, Gungalo for your fantastic review! :) Sandra xsx
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Smile.
Comment from barleygirl
I so enjoy your children's writing, even tho I've never had kids & I never read this genre. I wasn't reading it, imagining how it would come across to kids -- I'm just enjoying it as a big person! *smile* I love the part where "elves" are first being discussed. All the realistic nuances of that conversation are delightful. I also love the "look-alike" part, which I did envision as a message to children for a bit. Great job & thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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I so enjoy your children's writing, even tho I've never had kids & I never read this genre. I wasn't reading it, imagining how it would come across to kids -- I'm just enjoying it as a big person! *smile* I love the part where "elves" are first being discussed. All the realistic nuances of that conversation are delightful. I also love the "look-alike" part, which I did envision as a message to children for a bit. Great job & thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, barleygirl, for another lovely review. We all have a little child inside us! Mine has been inside me a bit longer than most! LOL. xsx Sandra.
Comment from queenv
Great children story with the storyline and characres well developed. The story is interesting and the picture depicts the theme of the story.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Great children story with the storyline and characres well developed. The story is interesting and the picture depicts the theme of the story.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much, queenv! Your review is wonderful. :) xsx Sandra
Comment from ccto12
This is a very sweet tale and I can tell would be very popular with children. Talking animals, especially forest creatures who have adventures in the forest has universal appeal. Maybe you intended it to be "peep" but did wonder if what you might have intended to write (but was a typo?) in the line "I'm going to go as close as I can to have a quick - peek instead here? Just wondered. Minor thing. Cute story.
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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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This is a very sweet tale and I can tell would be very popular with children. Talking animals, especially forest creatures who have adventures in the forest has universal appeal. Maybe you intended it to be "peep" but did wonder if what you might have intended to write (but was a typo?) in the line "I'm going to go as close as I can to have a quick - peek instead here? Just wondered. Minor thing. Cute story.
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Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much for your lovely and most thoughtful review. I did intend it to be, peep, but after reading what you said, I thought I decided change it as it would then be more in line with peek-a-boo! Thank you! :) Sandra xsx
Comment from Dirus
HI there,
looks well done. Good childrens read. i liked th epicture as well. good dialog with good character structure. you may need to go back and re read. some ? were placed where commas were supposed to be. sometimes the text editer does not take them in. I always re read after posting. Learned that the hard way.lol.
kepp up the good work. I listed some I found below. :)
-you must be very quiet. (remoive ?? around dont and add"")
-we will tip toe so they don?t(add')
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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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HI there,
looks well done. Good childrens read. i liked th epicture as well. good dialog with good character structure. you may need to go back and re read. some ? were placed where commas were supposed to be. sometimes the text editer does not take them in. I always re read after posting. Learned that the hard way.lol.
kepp up the good work. I listed some I found below. :)
-you must be very quiet. (remoive ?? around dont and add"")
-we will tip toe so they don?t(add')
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Comment Written 26-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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OH, Dirus, that text editor is really after me! Those ? were everywhere. I went through it so many times, my eyes were turning into question marks, and I still missed some!!! Thank you so much for finding them for me and letting me know, that was really kind of you. And a big thank you for your lovely review! xsx sandra
