From out of the Grayness
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Carpathias Dream: by: His Grayness"Reaching from the gray areas to understand life
24 total reviews
Comment from GracieAnn
Vance, this is solidly written with interesting mental images of time, space, and place. The personifications are strong in my charts, life sails, and sea of me. Well penned my friend. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Vance, this is solidly written with interesting mental images of time, space, and place. The personifications are strong in my charts, life sails, and sea of me. Well penned my friend. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2014
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Thank you so much GracieAnn! It's always a delight to hear from you and of course....to read your work! Vance
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Good choice of a picture. Nice poem, as always. Some interesting words. Carpathian ship, like a galley? passenger ship? Amazing, published your first poem at ten. Man, I'm way behind the eight ball. Yelp, traveling is fun. Addicting, did a lot of traveling in the Navy. I wrote a lyric/poem in honor of "The Highwayman," called Tumbleweeds. A tribute, I like the old country legends. I'm not enthused by this generation of music which seems lost? I saw on TV, a documentary about the Titanic. They suggested, an optical illusion was the demise of the survivors. Why their ship didn't respond to the Titanic as it sank. good job, mate. wackydo
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Good choice of a picture. Nice poem, as always. Some interesting words. Carpathian ship, like a galley? passenger ship? Amazing, published your first poem at ten. Man, I'm way behind the eight ball. Yelp, traveling is fun. Addicting, did a lot of traveling in the Navy. I wrote a lyric/poem in honor of "The Highwayman," called Tumbleweeds. A tribute, I like the old country legends. I'm not enthused by this generation of music which seems lost? I saw on TV, a documentary about the Titanic. They suggested, an optical illusion was the demise of the survivors. Why their ship didn't respond to the Titanic as it sank. good job, mate. wackydo
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Many thanks Wackydo....great to hear from you and certainly appreciate your comments. I had a lot of reviews questioning what Carpathia means and of course, it was the first ship called to help save the Titanic passengers which I noted in the author notes but obviously not clearly enough. THANKS AGAIN...VANCE
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Sometimes me eyes get blurry. I miss simple things. Thought that name sounded familar. Appreciate your final thoughts ... wackydo
Comment from Darkhorse555
what an image you painted right here vance I am lost-adrift Alone with all my life's sails torn Companion of my own destiny very beautifully penned dear friend
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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what an image you painted right here vance I am lost-adrift Alone with all my life's sails torn Companion of my own destiny very beautifully penned dear friend
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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DEAR DARKHORSE; thanks so very much for the honor of your six stars, I was really proud of this work and was hoping someone would have a six and the related appreciation so you've made my day and thanks again. Always delighted to hear from you and read your work as well...Vance
Comment from michaelcahill
Awesome metaphor. Your really draw us in with your tale here and we are fully engaged to be hit with the message that you deliver. Like a whisper in a storm. Well done. mikey
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Awesome metaphor. Your really draw us in with your tale here and we are fully engaged to be hit with the message that you deliver. Like a whisper in a storm. Well done. mikey
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Hey mikey! thanks so much for your wonderful review and kind words...it is always a delight to hear what you think and also to read your work! Blessings to you...Vance
Comment from Gungalo
Hurry please, please do come quick
Carpathian Ship
The sea of me
Is already upon my lip
This is lovely and certainly a write that vilifies life and the search for goodness.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Hurry please, please do come quick
Carpathian Ship
The sea of me
Is already upon my lip
This is lovely and certainly a write that vilifies life and the search for goodness.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Dear Gungalo: thank you for your kind remarks, they are held in very great value by me and deeply appreciated! Vance
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Smiling at you.
Comment from lakeport
Carpathias dream, indeed that was a most tragic event in
shipping history, that's a dramatic expressed poem.I enjoyed reading it, God bless you.Lakeport.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Carpathias dream, indeed that was a most tragic event in
shipping history, that's a dramatic expressed poem.I enjoyed reading it, God bless you.Lakeport.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Dear Lakeport...many thanks and deeply appreciated! Vance
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your welcome.Lakeport.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Vance - I enjoyed your creativity in this work. Seeing life and the storms as the Titanic - the image that gives is powerful. Nicely penned my friend.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Dear Vance - I enjoyed your creativity in this work. Seeing life and the storms as the Titanic - the image that gives is powerful. Nicely penned my friend.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Thanks so much Maureen, much appreciated! Hugs! Vance
Comment from robina1978
Your foot note explains what your poem is meant to say. And your poem does indeed say that. It is like the Titanic but you gave the ship an other name.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Your foot note explains what your poem is meant to say. And your poem does indeed say that. It is like the Titanic but you gave the ship an other name.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Thanks robina, much appreciated..the Carpathias was the first ship to arrive when Titanic was sinking and saved many lives. Vance
Comment from queenv
I like how use used the ship to transposed with the first line, the storm of life. I looked upon the ship called doomed and felt sadden. Well written.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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I like how use used the ship to transposed with the first line, the storm of life. I looked upon the ship called doomed and felt sadden. Well written.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Deer Queeenv: thank you so much for your kind review; VANCE
Comment from Jessie Denniel
Excellent! Poem writing is really your piece of craft. The imagery is wide and clear. The words are fitted wisely to every line. Keep sharing! It is very creative!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Excellent! Poem writing is really your piece of craft. The imagery is wide and clear. The words are fitted wisely to every line. Keep sharing! It is very creative!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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THANKS JESSIE: NICE TO MEET YOU AND HOPE TO SEE YOU AGAIN SOON HIS GRAYNESS...Vance
