Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 55 "Sunka Moon, Part 1"Murder Mystery
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Comment from Gungalo
It sounds as if Ty will have to do some protecting of Det. Jana, eh? Well once again I have bounced in on a great story that seems to go on forever. Forgive me girl for not keeping up.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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It sounds as if Ty will have to do some protecting of Det. Jana, eh? Well once again I have bounced in on a great story that seems to go on forever. Forgive me girl for not keeping up.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Gungalo, thank you so much for this gracious review. I appreciate you stopping by. :0) Bev
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Smile girl.
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I am! xx
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That's so good girlie.
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You're sweet, Gungalo. xx
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Sighhhhhhh
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Bev, - this is a riveting read - and had me spooked - great writing, it both scares the heck out of me and yet I want more to read. Great smooth transitions from thought to spoken word of Ty. Smooth read and your imagery was wonderful too. Sure glad I didn't read this at night.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Dear Bev, - this is a riveting read - and had me spooked - great writing, it both scares the heck out of me and yet I want more to read. Great smooth transitions from thought to spoken word of Ty. Smooth read and your imagery was wonderful too. Sure glad I didn't read this at night.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Thank you so very much, Maureen. I really appreciate your insights into the chapter and encouragement. I'm so glad you found the read 'smooth'. Love, Bev
Comment from c_lucas
It looks as if the killer thinks he is in full control and your are planning a showdown. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
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He threw in (it) across the room
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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It looks as if the killer thinks he is in full control and your are planning a showdown. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
ERROR:
He threw in (it) across the room
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Charlie, thanks for the sharp eye and the very generous review. I very much appreciate you hanging in with this novel. Means a lot to me. :0) Bev
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You're welcome, Bev. Charlie
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Bev.
Wow! What a chapter! This is excellent. I found myself hanging off of every word. The encounter on the bridge is excellent, written with such amazing visual details. I could feel Ty's fear, see him reaching for his gun, and the cold that wrapped around him, even through his clothing. The dog-wolf hybrid is so well shown, using the two colours. Great symbolism using this creature as a warning of doom. I've heard the calls of wolves in the wild. It is such a beautiful, but can also be such an eerie sound in the dead of the night. The ending of this chapter is a nail biter. I can't wait to read the next chapter!! Awesome read!
Bye
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Hi, Bev.
Wow! What a chapter! This is excellent. I found myself hanging off of every word. The encounter on the bridge is excellent, written with such amazing visual details. I could feel Ty's fear, see him reaching for his gun, and the cold that wrapped around him, even through his clothing. The dog-wolf hybrid is so well shown, using the two colours. Great symbolism using this creature as a warning of doom. I've heard the calls of wolves in the wild. It is such a beautiful, but can also be such an eerie sound in the dead of the night. The ending of this chapter is a nail biter. I can't wait to read the next chapter!! Awesome read!
Bye
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Thank you so very much, Rosalyne. I'm absolutely thrilled with yoru insights into this chapter. It's a struggle for me sometimes to try to come up with something fresh in the horror category. The painted warrior came up in a show I was watching and morphed into the devil dog. Though there's different interpretations for the warrior's colors depending on the tribe, generally the ones I've used, red and white, are true for most.
You're wonderfully generous six is icing on the cake my so-gracious friend.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from robina1978
Jana tries if her uncle will come back, as he might also be in danger. Then the police man Ty crosses with a devil dog. The somebody wants to go to Tony and have Jana out of the way. Good chapter.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Jana tries if her uncle will come back, as he might also be in danger. Then the police man Ty crosses with a devil dog. The somebody wants to go to Tony and have Jana out of the way. Good chapter.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Ine, thank you so much for your continued interest in reading my chapters. Means a lot to me. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Showboat
Holy cow, Bev, that was really scary. It's amazing how words, in the right hands, can evoke the shivers even though nothing violent actually happens. I was waiting for the wolf to jump through the windshield, and then the car wouldn't start, oh boy, heart thumps.
Excellent job, not a thing to change that I saw and poor Tony. I don't think he's a happy camper right now.
Here's a sixer!
Hugs,
Gayle
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Holy cow, Bev, that was really scary. It's amazing how words, in the right hands, can evoke the shivers even though nothing violent actually happens. I was waiting for the wolf to jump through the windshield, and then the car wouldn't start, oh boy, heart thumps.
Excellent job, not a thing to change that I saw and poor Tony. I don't think he's a happy camper right now.
Here's a sixer!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Gayle, I'm thrilled by your words of encouragement. I do find myself trying to evoke psychological fear more than outright violence, so your thoughts on that mean a lot to me! And thank you for the very generous sixer. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Joy Graham
Awesome chapter full of suspense and intrigue. I like the visual of his boots touching the ground. Yours is one of the few things I'm following these days. I'm taking a break from fanstory. Not sure if I will catch your next chapter. Keep writing my friend. You have loads of talent for this type of writing!
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Awesome chapter full of suspense and intrigue. I like the visual of his boots touching the ground. Yours is one of the few things I'm following these days. I'm taking a break from fanstory. Not sure if I will catch your next chapter. Keep writing my friend. You have loads of talent for this type of writing!
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Joy, I'm really honored that you took the time to read my chapter. And I understand your need for some time out from the site. You've been a great support all along, and I couldn't ask for more than that. Thanks for the very generous rating and inisights, my friend. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
your description sets the scene so well, Bev - I could see him driving along and slowing down over the bridge and feel the surprise when the animal suddenly appeared. So creepy.
and the poor dog - and now the beast has Tony
way its eyes bored into his was - fancy this should be "bore" into his
sound of an animal in terrible pain.- You left me wondering about this - as surely, with its throat ripped apart and entrails spilling from the dog's gut, it would be dead!!
Capice, redboy?(")
Glad I have a six for you - so deserved, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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your description sets the scene so well, Bev - I could see him driving along and slowing down over the bridge and feel the surprise when the animal suddenly appeared. So creepy.
and the poor dog - and now the beast has Tony
way its eyes bored into his was - fancy this should be "bore" into his
sound of an animal in terrible pain.- You left me wondering about this - as surely, with its throat ripped apart and entrails spilling from the dog's gut, it would be dead!!
Capice, redboy?(")
Glad I have a six for you - so deserved, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Margaret, thank you so very much for this terrific review and rating. You've made some good points and I've tweaked accordingly... so thanks for that as well. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Adri7enne
Fascinating stuff. You've got a good tolerance for violence. LOL! Some of your scenes leave me a bit shivery. I'm such a chicken shit. I close my eyes at scary movies. LOL!
I followed Ty all the way, though. Good death scene with Wasu. Poor thing!
You took me there and wrung me out. I was hiding behind you all the way. You've got some scary characters in there. Brrr! Well done, Bev. Hurry with the next one.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Fascinating stuff. You've got a good tolerance for violence. LOL! Some of your scenes leave me a bit shivery. I'm such a chicken shit. I close my eyes at scary movies. LOL!
I followed Ty all the way, though. Good death scene with Wasu. Poor thing!
You took me there and wrung me out. I was hiding behind you all the way. You've got some scary characters in there. Brrr! Well done, Bev. Hurry with the next one.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Thank you so very much, Adrienne. I'm thrilled with your insights into this chapter, though it was beyond your comfort level. Writing horror is surprisingly difficult if you want to keep a balance between the psychological and physical. That was my goal with this chapter, and, hopefully I succeeded.
Your support, as always, means a lot to me, my friend. Thanks also for the generous sixer.
Hugs, Bev
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You did super great! I know it must require a tight grip and intense focus. That's why it's so hard to write. Talent, my friend. That's what makes the difference. Whew! Well done, indeed.
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Aw, thanks for that, Adrienne. Words like yours make it all worth while. XX Bev
Comment from Green Lake Girl
You are such a good writer, Bev. This chapter emphasizes your skill at painting a scene.
The devil-dog was chillingly presented--excellent foreshadowing. The "man" that kidnapped Tony seems to be demonic. What human would or would be able to rip open a dog's throat?
We are in dangerous territory now. I suspect this chapter sets up the the story for its dramatic end. Lots to follow, however. I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
Perfect artwork to accompany this post. Superbly penned, Bev.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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You are such a good writer, Bev. This chapter emphasizes your skill at painting a scene.
The devil-dog was chillingly presented--excellent foreshadowing. The "man" that kidnapped Tony seems to be demonic. What human would or would be able to rip open a dog's throat?
We are in dangerous territory now. I suspect this chapter sets up the the story for its dramatic end. Lots to follow, however. I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
Perfect artwork to accompany this post. Superbly penned, Bev.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2014
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Marietta, thank you for this wonderful review and your generous six star rating. I, especially, appreciate your taking time to point out what you liked in the chapter. That's so helpful! Tears flowed as I wrote about Wasu's death. I had a very special feeling for that hound, one shared by my character, Tony. And, you're right on target about the importance of this chapter.
Hugs, Bev
